
11/24/2023 c48
4Raineh Daze
Being a genius of hard work doesn't work if you won't engage your brain and make that work as well, huh?
Overall, I've been enjoying this, that one weird niggle aside, and I'm definitely impressed by how long you've been working at it. Will be interesting to see how the rest of the Chuunin exams pans out, and how things will change once Akatsuki gets involved.

Being a genius of hard work doesn't work if you won't engage your brain and make that work as well, huh?
Overall, I've been enjoying this, that one weird niggle aside, and I'm definitely impressed by how long you've been working at it. Will be interesting to see how the rest of the Chuunin exams pans out, and how things will change once Akatsuki gets involved.
11/24/2023 c47 Raineh Daze
Good for Hinata. Surprised she didn't use a bit more ninjutsu, but I guess there's still some of that Hyuuga taijutsu pride going around.
Good for Hinata. Surprised she didn't use a bit more ninjutsu, but I guess there's still some of that Hyuuga taijutsu pride going around.
11/23/2023 c39 Raineh Daze
Kind of weird that every lesbian so far has had to have some justification for not being interested in men. That's got some pretty unfortunate connotations, tbh.
Kind of weird that every lesbian so far has had to have some justification for not being interested in men. That's got some pretty unfortunate connotations, tbh.
11/14/2023 c17 WearyCurmudgeon
Rereading and noticed this: "In fact, another highly obscure Clan Law actually outlawed the last members of a Clan from so much as trying to join the ANBU."
As this creates a plot hole with Kakashi who is the last Hatake and was an ANBU Captain.
Maybe the law was made after he'd already joined, so he was grandfathered in. But the phrasing gives the impression that it's an old law, rather than a relatively new one.
Rereading and noticed this: "In fact, another highly obscure Clan Law actually outlawed the last members of a Clan from so much as trying to join the ANBU."
As this creates a plot hole with Kakashi who is the last Hatake and was an ANBU Captain.
Maybe the law was made after he'd already joined, so he was grandfathered in. But the phrasing gives the impression that it's an old law, rather than a relatively new one.
11/12/2023 c48 Guest
love this story, naruko is awesome and the way the characters differ from canon is interesting
love this story, naruko is awesome and the way the characters differ from canon is interesting
11/12/2023 c22 Fetteraga
artistic license: chemistryunlike flour/manure/etc, cement does not have a high concentration of carbon that is able to fuel an air/fuel explosion. instead cement is a common fire smothering agent. stone and stone like substances are still considered some of the best ways to fire proof a home. asbestos was considered such a boon and implemented so heavily because it introduced stone work into the biggest weakness to homes at the time, insulation.
quick setting cement does have a little carbon as part of the process. but it produces inferior product and more expensive and as such would not be used in a major city works project.
either way, still a great concept and obscure trivia so no harm in not knowing it, doesn't really subtract from a story that overall is pretty good. keep up the great writing.
source: trained in asbestos removal, and this info is supplemental information, tangentially relevant.
artistic license: chemistryunlike flour/manure/etc, cement does not have a high concentration of carbon that is able to fuel an air/fuel explosion. instead cement is a common fire smothering agent. stone and stone like substances are still considered some of the best ways to fire proof a home. asbestos was considered such a boon and implemented so heavily because it introduced stone work into the biggest weakness to homes at the time, insulation.
quick setting cement does have a little carbon as part of the process. but it produces inferior product and more expensive and as such would not be used in a major city works project.
either way, still a great concept and obscure trivia so no harm in not knowing it, doesn't really subtract from a story that overall is pretty good. keep up the great writing.
source: trained in asbestos removal, and this info is supplemental information, tangentially relevant.
11/11/2023 c48 OrkinEX78
Good to see a new chapter from you my dude! Great as always! You're story on a female Naruto is one of the best ones I've come across. The Fanfiction site is playing up so I'm not getting story alerts in my gmail, but I'll find a way to read your story my dude. :)
Good to see a new chapter from you my dude! Great as always! You're story on a female Naruto is one of the best ones I've come across. The Fanfiction site is playing up so I'm not getting story alerts in my gmail, but I'll find a way to read your story my dude. :)
11/10/2023 c48
2AvidReader2425
Another absolutely awesome match that was very well written, thank you very much, I am excited for the next one

Another absolutely awesome match that was very well written, thank you very much, I am excited for the next one
11/10/2023 c47 AvidReader2425
Another really awesome chapter with a thrilling battle, thank you very much
Another really awesome chapter with a thrilling battle, thank you very much
11/10/2023 c44 AvidReader2425
Thank you for another excellent chapter, it was entertaining to see the various kinds of training. The other characters were doing.
Thank you for another excellent chapter, it was entertaining to see the various kinds of training. The other characters were doing.
11/10/2023 c42 AvidReader2425
Thanks for an awesome chapter. One of my favorite Rahman when I go out to buy it rather than make a quick and easy version at home, it’s from Ko Ryu Ramen, the Koi
Thanks for an awesome chapter. One of my favorite Rahman when I go out to buy it rather than make a quick and easy version at home, it’s from Ko Ryu Ramen, the Koi