
4/6/2015 c34 Guest
Love the story, please update soon!
Love the story, please update soon!
4/8/2015 c36
1BK2U
Oh no! I hope Ezi is going to be OK. I love the Pedrad brothers' relationship to Tris, and I crack up every time I read Amar referring to her as Lady Zeke. Very original! :-)
There is a typo in the final paragraph you may want to repair. You wrote "progress", when I think perhaps you may have wanted to write "prognosis". I could be wrong, but wanted to give you the heads up to check it out.

Oh no! I hope Ezi is going to be OK. I love the Pedrad brothers' relationship to Tris, and I crack up every time I read Amar referring to her as Lady Zeke. Very original! :-)
There is a typo in the final paragraph you may want to repair. You wrote "progress", when I think perhaps you may have wanted to write "prognosis". I could be wrong, but wanted to give you the heads up to check it out.
4/5/2015 c29 bekka
fourtris 3
fourtris 3
4/7/2015 c35 catch39
Please don't let the Putz Caleb be the one who shot someone else. It would be well deserving if he shot his own foot.
Please don't let the Putz Caleb be the one who shot someone else. It would be well deserving if he shot his own foot.
4/7/2015 c35 juliadancer
This chapter was so intense! I'm really excited for the next chapter because I want to know what happened to Tris. My brain is reminding me that it's unlikely that Caleb would shoot Tris because he'd be too scared, so I want to see what happens next! Please update soon! xx
This chapter was so intense! I'm really excited for the next chapter because I want to know what happened to Tris. My brain is reminding me that it's unlikely that Caleb would shoot Tris because he'd be too scared, so I want to see what happens next! Please update soon! xx
4/7/2015 c35 kristieb
OMG...you just leave us hanging like that? lol...GREAT chapter! Can't wait for the next.
Okay...so thoughts. Caleb was still in there with Tris, Tobias and Zeke. Two shots- Caleb shots Zeke once and Tobias once?
As I said before, you kinda can't do something with stealth without someone getting hurt. I didn't expect Tris to stab Eric, but then I can understand it. If someone major is to get hurt just don't let them die. That would be too much for me.
Oh...what's up with Zeke not inviting Shauna? Maybe he didn't want to bring her incase something happened? And he took it out on Ri cause he's nervous?
Uri would know if something happened to Ri, right? With their connection I don't see how he couldn't.
Or did Ri scream because she got shot? If Caleb shot her, I can't see Zeke or Tobias letting him live. But, ...
I'm excited for the next chapter!
OMG...you just leave us hanging like that? lol...GREAT chapter! Can't wait for the next.
Okay...so thoughts. Caleb was still in there with Tris, Tobias and Zeke. Two shots- Caleb shots Zeke once and Tobias once?
As I said before, you kinda can't do something with stealth without someone getting hurt. I didn't expect Tris to stab Eric, but then I can understand it. If someone major is to get hurt just don't let them die. That would be too much for me.
Oh...what's up with Zeke not inviting Shauna? Maybe he didn't want to bring her incase something happened? And he took it out on Ri cause he's nervous?
Uri would know if something happened to Ri, right? With their connection I don't see how he couldn't.
Or did Ri scream because she got shot? If Caleb shot her, I can't see Zeke or Tobias letting him live. But, ...
I'm excited for the next chapter!
4/7/2015 c35
8Savanah Rose
Don't make us wait too long for the next update! Who got shot? Zeke? Tris? Four? Caleb? (Can we be that lucky?)

Don't make us wait too long for the next update! Who got shot? Zeke? Tris? Four? Caleb? (Can we be that lucky?)