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3/28 c10 kaitywelsh
I love this story please update soon
4/2/2018 c10 Guest
The next episode is the voice of nature
6/20/2017 c3 Chaos. Creator Of The Universe
tip dont have so much text after text try some spacing like major spacing
5/29/2017 c10 Harmony-Caprice
Plz update soon. Can you do more cloud yowrt professor's and bloom scenes plz.
11/28/2016 c10 lovebooks2042
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4/9/2016 c9 1Valle95
Hello I have a few issues with your story.
1: Each chapter is one looong block of text.
2: Lots of misspelled words and improper use of grammer, punctuation, and capitalization.
3: The spoken sentences, everything in quotation marks, get lost in the text block. At least bold them.
Other then that though it is a good story and intrigues me.
1/14/2016 c1 9CrescentFullMoon
love it
9/22/2015 c9 4adokable dork
I luv this story plz update soon
1/22/2015 c9 6WinxClubTecna
Ok, Its good story, I can see that its just too cramed... Reading this is very hard without going back over a sentance by acident. Just a quick tip. Try do it in paragraphs. Example from Winx Club Powerless for power cp 3

'' Ah Bloom, like the nine tails?'' Valtor laughed. The wolf snarled. Bloom could heard Wolf's snarls back. Bloom looked up,'' Why are you back?'' she asked the lean tall man.

The winx seperated as they dodged an attack from the tailed beast. Bloom flew on her own but soon she stopped flying and was falling towards the ground.

''BLOOM!'' Stella yelled as her friend fell to the ground. Bloom couldnt move or speak, she could just fall. Suddenly she felt something furry under her and she was able to move again. She sat up to see Wolf as big as the nine tails. Bloom felt tears forming in her eyes but wiped them away, she could cry later but right now she needed to fight.

Doing it like this makes it much easier to read instead of..

'' Ah Bloom, like the nine tails?'' Valtor laughed. The wolf snarled. Bloom could heard Wolf's snarls back. Bloom looked up,'' Why are you back?'' she asked the lean tall winx seperated as they dodged an attack from the tailed beast. Bloom flew on her own but soon she stopped flying and was falling towards the ground. ''BLOOM!'' Stella yelled as her friend fell to the ground. Bloom couldnt move or speak, she could just fall. Suddenly she felt something furry under her and she was able to move again. She sat up to see Wolf as big as the nine tails. Bloom felt tears forming in her eyes but wiped them away, she could cry later but right now she needed to fight.

Dont you agree? Otherwise its a great story and its good to hear from you. Just go like this and everything will be ok!

Don Worry :-(
Be Happy :-)

Quote from my pencil case XD

-WinxClubTecna
12/24/2014 c1 27Aya Rose
Holy Snickers. I wanted to read this, but I can't.
I mean actively.

How to Format for Paragraphs With Dialogue. Just google it please. I can't copy this over and format it myself.
I can't say I'll like the final story if you made just that change, but I actively can not read this as a wall of text. It's impenetrable.
12/24/2014 c1 Guest
Please get a beta or use spellcheck. There are so many mistakes that it isn't even funny.
11/30/2014 c7 TimeKeeper6984
Damn I so badly wanna know who that is. Can't wait for the next chapter.
11/16/2014 c6 9rubacuori
Cool !
P.S.k plus equals nine and up and you cursed in the first chapter.
Bye and update soon !
11/9/2014 c6 TimeKeeper6984
Happy birthday for then. How old are you? Can't wait for the next update. BTW where is ceder point?
11/1/2014 c5 Snow Jewel
i have been sooo busy latey. i FINALLY had time to read this. it was great! Like always! U have 8 reviews already! this is the 9th
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