5/2/2016 c7 4Reiko x 3
Also known as Vanitas is still pretty much in character; he's just a bit less of an asshole. I am not kidding, if you take away the general jerkishness from his character in the game I am pretty sure he would be a lot like your version of Vanitas. This is not a bad thing. It means you know his character well enough to give it these subtle little tweaks and still have it be recognizable. That takes finesse and talent.
Poor Ven indeed. He knows the truth about Light and Darkness, but no one is willing to listen. It's a pity. This is knowledge that could really help them all. It would certainly help Terra because, instead of doing what he did in the game, he could work to temper his Darkness with his Light. Put quite simply, he could learn to pull a Riku. I like Riku... Aqua could benefit because this is something she needs to keep in mind as a Keyblade Master. Xehanort is an example of what happens when you go too far one way...Master Eraqus is a borderline case of what can happen when you go too far the other. Balance is key (no pun intended). Eraqus just needs to stop letting his own fears blind him and realize he /isn't helping/ by insisting that Light is better. He's putting his students in danger by pushing that mindset. Listen to Ven people! He knows what he's talking about even if he doesn't remember the why of it yet.
Let me guess. Either Terra, Aqua, or Eraqus is going to run into Vanitas and he's going to be /himself/. Which will result in whoever it is not liking the boy. Then there will be some back and forth that ultimately ends up in a brief tiff. End result is that the mindset of DarkBad will be reinforced for whoever it is even though, relatively speaking, Vanitas isn't all that bad a guy. He's just a snarky little ass. Which will make Ventus even more frustrated because /he/ knows his Dark isn't a bad guy. But nobody listens to Ven. Poor Ven.
I rather enjoy this story. I've been lurking since chapter four and finally came up with a decent review. I've also finally made up my mind to add this to my favorite stories list. It can take me a while. I will be patiently, yet eagerly, awaiting the next update. Take as much time as you need to get the next chapter right. I can wait and so can everyone else no matter how much they may whine. Good writing can take time, am I right? That's not to say that your writing so far hasn't been good because it is. It's really good. Just don't let your readers rush you is what I am getting at. Rushed writing doesn't make anybody happy. Not the writer and not the readers. I'm...not sure if I'm making any sense. Sorry about that. Anyways, I like this and am interested in seeing where this story will go.
Also known as Vanitas is still pretty much in character; he's just a bit less of an asshole. I am not kidding, if you take away the general jerkishness from his character in the game I am pretty sure he would be a lot like your version of Vanitas. This is not a bad thing. It means you know his character well enough to give it these subtle little tweaks and still have it be recognizable. That takes finesse and talent.
Poor Ven indeed. He knows the truth about Light and Darkness, but no one is willing to listen. It's a pity. This is knowledge that could really help them all. It would certainly help Terra because, instead of doing what he did in the game, he could work to temper his Darkness with his Light. Put quite simply, he could learn to pull a Riku. I like Riku... Aqua could benefit because this is something she needs to keep in mind as a Keyblade Master. Xehanort is an example of what happens when you go too far one way...Master Eraqus is a borderline case of what can happen when you go too far the other. Balance is key (no pun intended). Eraqus just needs to stop letting his own fears blind him and realize he /isn't helping/ by insisting that Light is better. He's putting his students in danger by pushing that mindset. Listen to Ven people! He knows what he's talking about even if he doesn't remember the why of it yet.
Let me guess. Either Terra, Aqua, or Eraqus is going to run into Vanitas and he's going to be /himself/. Which will result in whoever it is not liking the boy. Then there will be some back and forth that ultimately ends up in a brief tiff. End result is that the mindset of DarkBad will be reinforced for whoever it is even though, relatively speaking, Vanitas isn't all that bad a guy. He's just a snarky little ass. Which will make Ventus even more frustrated because /he/ knows his Dark isn't a bad guy. But nobody listens to Ven. Poor Ven.
I rather enjoy this story. I've been lurking since chapter four and finally came up with a decent review. I've also finally made up my mind to add this to my favorite stories list. It can take me a while. I will be patiently, yet eagerly, awaiting the next update. Take as much time as you need to get the next chapter right. I can wait and so can everyone else no matter how much they may whine. Good writing can take time, am I right? That's not to say that your writing so far hasn't been good because it is. It's really good. Just don't let your readers rush you is what I am getting at. Rushed writing doesn't make anybody happy. Not the writer and not the readers. I'm...not sure if I'm making any sense. Sorry about that. Anyways, I like this and am interested in seeing where this story will go.
5/2/2016 c7 7Shinigami Merchant
Love it so much X3
Really happy to see an update.
Vanitas is definitely my favorite, I adored Mickey's reaction to the exchange between Yen Sid and Vanitas.
Poor Ventus it really is frustrating when the people around you refuse to even try and see things in a different way
Love it so much X3
Really happy to see an update.
Vanitas is definitely my favorite, I adored Mickey's reaction to the exchange between Yen Sid and Vanitas.
Poor Ventus it really is frustrating when the people around you refuse to even try and see things in a different way
5/2/2016 c7 10Searchingforangels
Love it all, and I'm so glad you're continuing this! The way you describe light and dark and Light and Dark is absolutely fascinating and gorgeous. I love how you're portraying Ven and Vanitas in this. I love how Master Eraqus is still so understanding-yet-not about the light, and how you have Ventus coming into conflict with him over that so quickly. I love how both Ventus and Vanitas want both Light and Dark and aren't so blindly set on each other to fight as in canon. I love how perceptive Yen Sid immediately is of the whole situation, and I love how protective Van's being without losing any of his Dark personality. Oh, gosh, I just loved all of this. Thank you so much for continuing!
Love it all, and I'm so glad you're continuing this! The way you describe light and dark and Light and Dark is absolutely fascinating and gorgeous. I love how you're portraying Ven and Vanitas in this. I love how Master Eraqus is still so understanding-yet-not about the light, and how you have Ventus coming into conflict with him over that so quickly. I love how both Ventus and Vanitas want both Light and Dark and aren't so blindly set on each other to fight as in canon. I love how perceptive Yen Sid immediately is of the whole situation, and I love how protective Van's being without losing any of his Dark personality. Oh, gosh, I just loved all of this. Thank you so much for continuing!
5/2/2016 c7 Kiri Kaitou Clover
Oh heck this chapter exceeded all my expectations! I love how Ventus tries to explain his situation yet Eraqus, Aqua and Terra all misunderstand the issue. I love how Yen Sid understands immediately what happened to Vanitas with just one explaination. I love this difference in reactions. I love the inclusion of Yen Sid and Mickey, and I wonder how this will affect things hence forth.
Oh heck this chapter exceeded all my expectations! I love how Ventus tries to explain his situation yet Eraqus, Aqua and Terra all misunderstand the issue. I love how Yen Sid understands immediately what happened to Vanitas with just one explaination. I love this difference in reactions. I love the inclusion of Yen Sid and Mickey, and I wonder how this will affect things hence forth.
5/1/2016 c7 54FlightfootKeyseeker
Hopefully when Van meets Ven, he won't try to kill him like in canon.
Hopefully when Van meets Ven, he won't try to kill him like in canon.
5/1/2016 c7 4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
Awesome chapter! I was hoping for another update, and you delivered! Update again soon!
Awesome chapter! I was hoping for another update, and you delivered! Update again soon!
4/27/2016 c6 Kameo1
I love the concept of this story! It's super cool and I'm excited to see where you're going to take it! Your writing is really good too, keeping the characters mostly in character for such a large AU is impressive :)
Thanks so much for sharing and hopefully you can write more soon!
I love the concept of this story! It's super cool and I'm excited to see where you're going to take it! Your writing is really good too, keeping the characters mostly in character for such a large AU is impressive :)
Thanks so much for sharing and hopefully you can write more soon!
1/4/2016 c6 10Searchingforangels
Great chapter! I love the introspection; it was interesting to see how Van was doing (poor Van - he got the short end of the stick, getting stuck with Master Xehanort). I really liked how you incorperated Twilight Town, and how Van reated to it.
Great chapter! I love the introspection; it was interesting to see how Van was doing (poor Van - he got the short end of the stick, getting stuck with Master Xehanort). I really liked how you incorperated Twilight Town, and how Van reated to it.
1/3/2016 c6 54FlightfootKeyseeker
That mansion seems to be perpetually abandoned. Shouldn't someone have claimed it by now aside from squatters?
That mansion seems to be perpetually abandoned. Shouldn't someone have claimed it by now aside from squatters?
1/3/2016 c6 Kiomori
I'm glad Vanitas got away and found somewhere he feels safe. Hopefully it lasts! Twilight Town could be a good place for him.
I'm glad Vanitas got away and found somewhere he feels safe. Hopefully it lasts! Twilight Town could be a good place for him.
1/3/2016 c6 7Shinigami Merchant
I really like how you're constructing Vanitas' character; even though he has some light of his own he still acts like himself.
Twilight Town does seem the most fitting place for him at the moment.
I'm actually quite curious to see how giving both Ventus and Vanitas what they needed is affecting Sora.
I really like how you're constructing Vanitas' character; even though he has some light of his own he still acts like himself.
Twilight Town does seem the most fitting place for him at the moment.
I'm actually quite curious to see how giving both Ventus and Vanitas what they needed is affecting Sora.
1/2/2016 c6 4Antex-The Legendary Zoroark
Great start-up for the next chapter! This story keeps getting better and better each time I read a chapter! Keep it up!
Great start-up for the next chapter! This story keeps getting better and better each time I read a chapter! Keep it up!
12/26/2015 c5 10Searchingforangels
Wow, this is an absolutely incredible story you have going here. I love how you let Vanitas be Ventus's Dark, not just a practically insane boy, while still keeping both of them completely in character.
Wow, this is an absolutely incredible story you have going here. I love how you let Vanitas be Ventus's Dark, not just a practically insane boy, while still keeping both of them completely in character.