for Rebirth of the Fox10/10/2016 c2 anoneme
Interesting idea, I think I like it. I plan on keeping an eye on this fic ;)
Interesting idea, I think I like it. I plan on keeping an eye on this fic ;)
10/18/2014 c2 Dracoessa
i think that the pink and platinum blond banshees should be bashed until their fan girl obsessions are driven out.
i think that the pink and platinum blond banshees should be bashed until their fan girl obsessions are driven out.
10/18/2014 c1 dracoessa
*starts cackling like a demented hyena at mizuki-baka*
*starts cackling like a demented hyena at mizuki-baka*
10/17/2014 c2 
17SpiralAK
Hi. I read through both chapters and like the concept, but I have a couple of issues. One, they all accepted the Nine-Tailed Fox too quickly. Even with his reasons (being controlled by Tobi) he'd still be the one who caused so much damage and strife to the village.
Putting that aside, I think you're going too fast into the Super!Naruto direction. Sure, Kurama has a lot of chakra and stuff, but what about ability? He'd still be as incompetent as Naruto in canon was, so it would take time for him to get good. There's also the way everyone gushed over him after a wardrobe change and a slight change in goal, even though he would be, to them, dead last Uzumaki.
It leads me to my final issue: conflict. What's the point of making Kurama have access to all his power from the get-go, if he's stronger than everyone else and it'll lead to him walking over everyone.
But don't worry. So far you're doing a better job than the other idiots who write this kind of story (Super!Naruto and all its variants) because you don't bash, you have fine grammar and some interesting ideas.
17SpiralAKHi. I read through both chapters and like the concept, but I have a couple of issues. One, they all accepted the Nine-Tailed Fox too quickly. Even with his reasons (being controlled by Tobi) he'd still be the one who caused so much damage and strife to the village.
Putting that aside, I think you're going too fast into the Super!Naruto direction. Sure, Kurama has a lot of chakra and stuff, but what about ability? He'd still be as incompetent as Naruto in canon was, so it would take time for him to get good. There's also the way everyone gushed over him after a wardrobe change and a slight change in goal, even though he would be, to them, dead last Uzumaki.
It leads me to my final issue: conflict. What's the point of making Kurama have access to all his power from the get-go, if he's stronger than everyone else and it'll lead to him walking over everyone.
But don't worry. So far you're doing a better job than the other idiots who write this kind of story (Super!Naruto and all its variants) because you don't bash, you have fine grammar and some interesting ideas.
10/15/2014 c2 custoon
Okay, my enjoyment of this story definitely increased, like, tenfold with this chapter. Hope to see more soon!
I like how you include the Third's crystal ball despite that showing up maybe twice in all of Naruto (even though it's super useful... but then again, Kishimoto does a lot of things that don't make sense...). I think you made a good decision with Naruto's name and switching between Naruto and Kurama depending on the situation/context he's in. That makes much more sense than sticking with one or the other.
I really liked the way you had Naruto introduce himself. He's still clearly the Naruto we know and love, but he's also obviously got the wishes of a tempered Kurama in him.
I'm hoping to see an explanation as to why you put everyone on the teams you did at some point. Unless you just did it because it's a better balance that way.
Just two things I saw in this chap that I thought were kind of out there: Kakashi seemed a bit OOC, and I thought it was weird that the Third didn't know about Sakura and Ino's issues.
So, I'd totally love to be a beta for this fic, but I don't think ffn qualifies me as one, since I've never posted any fics, but just know that I happily extend the offer.
Okay, my enjoyment of this story definitely increased, like, tenfold with this chapter. Hope to see more soon!
I like how you include the Third's crystal ball despite that showing up maybe twice in all of Naruto (even though it's super useful... but then again, Kishimoto does a lot of things that don't make sense...). I think you made a good decision with Naruto's name and switching between Naruto and Kurama depending on the situation/context he's in. That makes much more sense than sticking with one or the other.
I really liked the way you had Naruto introduce himself. He's still clearly the Naruto we know and love, but he's also obviously got the wishes of a tempered Kurama in him.
I'm hoping to see an explanation as to why you put everyone on the teams you did at some point. Unless you just did it because it's a better balance that way.
Just two things I saw in this chap that I thought were kind of out there: Kakashi seemed a bit OOC, and I thought it was weird that the Third didn't know about Sakura and Ino's issues.
So, I'd totally love to be a beta for this fic, but I don't think ffn qualifies me as one, since I've never posted any fics, but just know that I happily extend the offer.
10/15/2014 c2 duke drake
Right, this is a good start in my opinion. a few errors, such as mistyping Iruka as Ikura, Kakashi's family name is Hatake, not Hayate (that's a seperate character, Hayate Gekko who was killed by Baki of the Sand Village) and Uzuki Yugao was the Neko masked ANBU, not Anko the second or third in command of T&I.
still a good shot and seems interesting at least.
Right, this is a good start in my opinion. a few errors, such as mistyping Iruka as Ikura, Kakashi's family name is Hatake, not Hayate (that's a seperate character, Hayate Gekko who was killed by Baki of the Sand Village) and Uzuki Yugao was the Neko masked ANBU, not Anko the second or third in command of T&I.
still a good shot and seems interesting at least.
10/15/2014 c2 13Shio-Senpai
I like how you put Naruto/Kurama on an ANBU team with Kakashi and Anko while still keeping him on a gennin team. It's a nice twist.
Ino and Sakura on his gennin team? That I was unsure of but with how you've put it I think it will work! All in all, good job on the chapter, I enjoyed reading it and I hope to see an update as soon as it is possible for you to post one! Keep up the good work!
13Shio-SenpaiI like how you put Naruto/Kurama on an ANBU team with Kakashi and Anko while still keeping him on a gennin team. It's a nice twist.
Ino and Sakura on his gennin team? That I was unsure of but with how you've put it I think it will work! All in all, good job on the chapter, I enjoyed reading it and I hope to see an update as soon as it is possible for you to post one! Keep up the good work!
10/14/2014 c1 3Run Around With A KF Lover XD
I like thisstory, it's interesting keep going! I can't wait for the next chapter! :D
3Run Around With A KF Lover XDI like thisstory, it's interesting keep going! I can't wait for the next chapter! :D