10/18/2014 c1alcamoth Aight, took some time to read and analyze this... AND IT'S AMAZING! You've improved so much!
10/18/2014 c11Darth Sinox Ok, I'm not gonna blame you for this, but your history is a little off. If Lilly's dad was trained in Sparta, he would have had to live in sparta. And if you were a kid in Sparta, you didn't even know your dad. But all in all good story