for Del infierno al paraíso ¿Pero el paraíso es como lo esperaba?7/29/2016 c7 Luxray72
Oye ¿por que no continuaste el fic si estaba tan bueno?(aunque...es un poco tarde para decirlo)
Oye ¿por que no continuaste el fic si estaba tan bueno?(aunque...es un poco tarde para decirlo)
7/27/2016 c7 Strawberry
KyaaAAa!(se calma)me encanta tu historia,es tan mpeatgdg,conti onegai
KyaaAAa!(se calma)me encanta tu historia,es tan mpeatgdg,conti onegai
8/21/2015 c2 julygarcia02
Me encanto, esa es la verdad tengo uno amigos que alos cuales les entantan tus historias pero... esta me llego mal! adora a Gyororo
Me encanto, esa es la verdad tengo uno amigos que alos cuales les entantan tus historias pero... esta me llego mal! adora a Gyororo
12/24/2014 c6 
21Parker Megraw
Since I am not a Spanish speaker nor am I very well aquainted with the Shurara Corps, I am afraid there is little input I can give you in those respects...
However, I can say that I liked the prologue, and the backstory to your character Nalala, which was very sad. I also think that you could have played around more with the were-frog aspect of her character. How might she use an ability like that in the Shurara Corps, in battle? There are many possibilities. Have some fun with it!
Let's see... I would suggest to stay away from chat-script format when you write, and lean more toward novel format. Not only is it a common preference, but it's easier to read, and looks more impressive. It'll take a bit of work, but it'll be worth it.
Poor Dokuku, always getting mistaken for a ghost... :(
21Parker MegrawSince I am not a Spanish speaker nor am I very well aquainted with the Shurara Corps, I am afraid there is little input I can give you in those respects...
However, I can say that I liked the prologue, and the backstory to your character Nalala, which was very sad. I also think that you could have played around more with the were-frog aspect of her character. How might she use an ability like that in the Shurara Corps, in battle? There are many possibilities. Have some fun with it!
Let's see... I would suggest to stay away from chat-script format when you write, and lean more toward novel format. Not only is it a common preference, but it's easier to read, and looks more impressive. It'll take a bit of work, but it'll be worth it.
Poor Dokuku, always getting mistaken for a ghost... :(