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10/28/2014 c1 48reality deviant
the writing is not bad... but i want issei in this story-even if as only a member of the trio-you could have him in a mini story , showing what he is up too meanwhile...

and i am of the opinion that the Great Red is stronger.
10/28/2014 c1 2Mechawizard
I think you should have spent some more time on the pre-summoning preparations. Show don't tell and all that. And the rest of the chapter is very info-dumpy, which isn't terribly interesting to read if you're already familiar with the mechanics. It's an interesting idea but so far the execution is merely okay.
10/28/2014 c1 bankerjoe13
Really awesome start for an intriguing idea. You are right that it's rather amazing something like this has not been done before considering how many fics lately have been fate/dxd xovers. Really hope you continue writing this. Archer was definitely a good choice to bring in as the servant, since he is both very powerful (unlimited bladeworks) and is good at just going with the flow and dealing with situations as they come without being ridiculously arrogant or fight hungry like a lot of servants are.
10/28/2014 c1 5Jouaint
Absolutely magnificent idea.

Also a right into to your poll I think Ort would be a much better choice.

Please update soon.
10/28/2014 c1 Kinunatzs The Eternal
Damn this is interesting though I wish Archer would explain what Gaia, Alaya and Akasha to Rias and her Peerage and what are their reactions anyway nice chapter and more please
10/28/2014 c1 Anon
Lol... Identity unknown? We all know it's GARcher so why do you need to put it unknown?
10/28/2014 c1 kadzooks
While I love FS/N crossover fics, I'm a bit disappointed that you chose to go with EMIYA as opposed to Emiya. :P

Don't get me wrong, I don't hate Archer or anything like that but I feel the story would do much better with a character that can actually grow and change from their baseline selves rather than Archer whose character seems rigid and fleshed out leaving less room for growth.

I believe that most other characters from the FS/N franchise could serve better in place of EMIYA.
Imagine if it was Rin that was summoned or Ilya. Hehhehheh.

Still, this is an enjoyable read and I can't wait to see how you're going to use EMIYA in a world of Sacred Gears comparable to Noble Phantasms with descendants of heroes and villains from past mythologies still existing.

p/s : Great Red hands down. Primate Murder is just an angry puppy compared to it.
10/28/2014 c1 GVN.Chaos
Yeah, it did pique my interest. Rias summonned Archer as a Servant, so it's safe to assume that some other people summoned their Servant. I'd like to see how exactly strong a Servant in this setting.
On a second note: if just the sight of a part of Excalibur is enough to scare away devil, how would the real Excalibur affected them?
PS2: I think a mutual destruction if Great Red and Primate Murder fight. Both ranked very high on their own verse, after all
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
This...is...Awesome! You have a great writing style and a unique story premise. And now that you mention it, I have not seen a crossover of this sort. Good on you for thinking this up. Also, you have good pacing. Some authors struggle with spacing and as a result their stories feel rushed and lack that spark, that quality of realism. Keep up the good work. Don't let haters bring you down.
10/28/2014 c1 someone
i like the story and the premise and am happy that we will not be having two mains in the story as i always feel that it detracts from both. i look forward to where you take this story! Noble Phantasm: ? I hope that you wont be replacing UBW!
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
very good
10/28/2014 c1 Andre 'Vortex
Paragon of Awesomeness indeed. A story with great potential, amd bad-ass moments. GArcher FTW.
Is he gonna be involved in the rating games? And I think Great Red is more powerful. He is on the level of the Ophis after all.

-Andre 'Vortex' Prower
10/28/2014 c1 Anon
To the review who believes foolishly gun god can even touch great red, you fail to understand what the black barrel even does. While it is true the strength of the target increases the barrel's strength exponentially, this is only considering the ETHER of the target. Great red has no ether (or is not proven to be ether-based). TYPES are ether-based. Hence gun god gets destroyed by great red.
10/28/2014 c1 3Stilphyell
Hmmmm interesting concept you are using. And you are using it in such a way that is deliverately vague and where if needed you could easily make more Command Seals appear on another person. It would be interesting if someone close to Rias (maybe from her own peerage? Heh Kiba seems like a fun idea) summons a Saber that remembers Archer and maybe his life since the route that happened on the Grail War was the one where she remains in the word with Rin (can't remember name right now... I think it was UBW route).

I'm interested in how you will advance in the story and distribute the 8 pawns from Rias, especially now that you have a Boosted Gear with a possibility of it being in an enemy. I would recommend involving one of the remaining Longinus (Absolute Demise - Innovate Clear - Telos Karma) or maybe some half-devils from a devil lineage (A bastard child of Grayfia's brother with a human woman sounds pretty cool, and it would set a catchy one-liner like "It can't be a Gremory with a Lucifuge"), doesn't matter if it is from a Pillar or not. Hell you could add a lost descendant of one of the Maous to make it more fun.

Cheers!
Stilphyell.

P.S: Keep the good work!
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
Shirou and Archer have no scar over their heart. That's fanon comes from flight made by gabrielblessing and it's pretty bad fanon anyways.
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