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3Stilphyell
Hmmmm interesting concept you are using. And you are using it in such a way that is deliverately vague and where if needed you could easily make more Command Seals appear on another person. It would be interesting if someone close to Rias (maybe from her own peerage? Heh Kiba seems like a fun idea) summons a Saber that remembers Archer and maybe his life since the route that happened on the Grail War was the one where she remains in the word with Rin (can't remember name right now... I think it was UBW route).
I'm interested in how you will advance in the story and distribute the 8 pawns from Rias, especially now that you have a Boosted Gear with a possibility of it being in an enemy. I would recommend involving one of the remaining Longinus (Absolute Demise - Innovate Clear - Telos Karma) or maybe some half-devils from a devil lineage (A bastard child of Grayfia's brother with a human woman sounds pretty cool, and it would set a catchy one-liner like "It can't be a Gremory with a Lucifuge"), doesn't matter if it is from a Pillar or not. Hell you could add a lost descendant of one of the Maous to make it more fun.
Cheers!
Stilphyell.
P.S: Keep the good work!
3StilphyellHmmmm interesting concept you are using. And you are using it in such a way that is deliverately vague and where if needed you could easily make more Command Seals appear on another person. It would be interesting if someone close to Rias (maybe from her own peerage? Heh Kiba seems like a fun idea) summons a Saber that remembers Archer and maybe his life since the route that happened on the Grail War was the one where she remains in the word with Rin (can't remember name right now... I think it was UBW route).
I'm interested in how you will advance in the story and distribute the 8 pawns from Rias, especially now that you have a Boosted Gear with a possibility of it being in an enemy. I would recommend involving one of the remaining Longinus (Absolute Demise - Innovate Clear - Telos Karma) or maybe some half-devils from a devil lineage (A bastard child of Grayfia's brother with a human woman sounds pretty cool, and it would set a catchy one-liner like "It can't be a Gremory with a Lucifuge"), doesn't matter if it is from a Pillar or not. Hell you could add a lost descendant of one of the Maous to make it more fun.
Cheers!
Stilphyell.
P.S: Keep the good work!
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
Shirou and Archer have no scar over their heart. That's fanon comes from flight made by gabrielblessing and it's pretty bad fanon anyways.
Shirou and Archer have no scar over their heart. That's fanon comes from flight made by gabrielblessing and it's pretty bad fanon anyways.
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
Bring out Gun God with his Black Barrel and I assure u he could kill everyone in a single shot. I mean the thing itself is called Longinus fuck true Longinus the Black Barrel offers insta-win against Great Red.
Also the story is nice, its original as far as plot has gone will u first follow the plot or will it bec,ome completely AU?
Bring out Gun God with his Black Barrel and I assure u he could kill everyone in a single shot. I mean the thing itself is called Longinus fuck true Longinus the Black Barrel offers insta-win against Great Red.
Also the story is nice, its original as far as plot has gone will u first follow the plot or will it bec,ome completely AU?
10/28/2014 c1 Swanboy
Interesting read so far.
Looking forward to finding more.
Also
Great Red of course, he is just ridiculous.
Interesting read so far.
Looking forward to finding more.
Also
Great Red of course, he is just ridiculous.
10/28/2014 c1 wikerens
Definitely an interesting story. Do hope it will be a harem thou, and dope hope Rias won't be the main girl as most DxD fics go by. Really want to see a more diverse harem.
Definitely an interesting story. Do hope it will be a harem thou, and dope hope Rias won't be the main girl as most DxD fics go by. Really want to see a more diverse harem.
10/28/2014 c1 Legend3881
I like the concept and the first chapter was well written. How Rias obtained Archer is a little strange. I think something like Rias and her peerage stopping stray mages carrying out a forbidden ritual to summon a powerful servant and rias gets tied into the ritual would have been a better fit or something like that. Having the command seals just show up out of the blue is strange.
While archer is bad ass I hope you connect him to the DXD world is some other ways. Give him a unique aspect or power that connects him to the DXD world. While he is stronger than Rias peerage now, That will change soon considering the fast growth in power they underwent.
Cannot wait for the next chapter.
I like the concept and the first chapter was well written. How Rias obtained Archer is a little strange. I think something like Rias and her peerage stopping stray mages carrying out a forbidden ritual to summon a powerful servant and rias gets tied into the ritual would have been a better fit or something like that. Having the command seals just show up out of the blue is strange.
While archer is bad ass I hope you connect him to the DXD world is some other ways. Give him a unique aspect or power that connects him to the DXD world. While he is stronger than Rias peerage now, That will change soon considering the fast growth in power they underwent.
Cannot wait for the next chapter.
10/28/2014 c1 AstralJean
It's a very good start, but do hope it's not one of those stories where other people from DxD start summoning other servants from FSN and another grail war (in some way different) begins. A seriously bad and not very interesting plot, never really was. You've done a very good job with the first chapter and really want to see Archer being the sole FSN character here.
It's a very good start, but do hope it's not one of those stories where other people from DxD start summoning other servants from FSN and another grail war (in some way different) begins. A seriously bad and not very interesting plot, never really was. You've done a very good job with the first chapter and really want to see Archer being the sole FSN character here.
10/28/2014 c1 4the lone soul
very very very interesting indeed i really look forward to unlimited blade works hehe other than that its alright but i bet rias isnt the only one with a sercant my gut is telling me even the scumbag riser has one probably but that is only a guess
keep up the good work bro
4the lone soulvery very very interesting indeed i really look forward to unlimited blade works hehe other than that its alright but i bet rias isnt the only one with a sercant my gut is telling me even the scumbag riser has one probably but that is only a guess
keep up the good work bro
10/28/2014 c1 Guest
I hope Archer still has his tracing abilities and Noble Phantasms
I hope Archer still has his tracing abilities and Noble Phantasms
10/28/2014 c1 Lone Gundam
This was actually a good chapter, you're completely right about how no one has attempted to write about DXD characters being Masters. Though I hope there's an explanation for why Rias got Command Seals, is the Grail somehow in the DXDverse or something else?
This was actually a good chapter, you're completely right about how no one has attempted to write about DXD characters being Masters. Though I hope there's an explanation for why Rias got Command Seals, is the Grail somehow in the DXDverse or something else?
10/28/2014 c1 seborg2
Very good first chapter and I agree that it is weird that no one has thought of it. Anyway please upload the next chapter soon.
Very good first chapter and I agree that it is weird that no one has thought of it. Anyway please upload the next chapter soon.
10/28/2014 c1 Bills
Will archer become a devil and if possible will he be able to copy sacred gears to besides the swords type, like boosted gear ?
Will archer become a devil and if possible will he be able to copy sacred gears to besides the swords type, like boosted gear ?
10/28/2014 c1 Isaac
I can't wait for the anime to catch up and show more of Issei's badass development, at least writers would stop omitting him from crossovers then.
Otherwise this seems pretty interesting, Im hoping for more servants to appear but I like Archers presence and am wondering how that will effect the story, looking forward to it.
I can't wait for the anime to catch up and show more of Issei's badass development, at least writers would stop omitting him from crossovers then.
Otherwise this seems pretty interesting, Im hoping for more servants to appear but I like Archers presence and am wondering how that will effect the story, looking forward to it.