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10/31/2014 c1 10FishSlayer
It's an interesting explanation of how the Abyss came to be, for certain. Despite my disagreement, lol. I like this kind of creativity.

You could use improvement on your writing. Don't worry so much about using words rarely used, or having a huge range of vocabulary. I've found writing in the most understandable way while not sounding at all illiterate makes your stories flow better and be more immersive for readers.

But hey, I'm still learning too.

Typo that stuck out to me: "a wide whole was blasted in the dungeon's wall", where it should be "hole".

Good work, overall. :3
10/31/2014 c1 23ASouffleToServeTwo
Intriguing! I like how this connected some of the dots in the game's convoluted lore, and whilst it wasn't scary, it had the essence of creepiness, if not a touch of psychological horror, so well done nonetheless!

Happy Soulween!
10/31/2014 c1 54Alone in the blight
no problem friend, what matters is your participation in the event!
happy terror souls!

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