
12/22/2016 c2 Warner99
a good start , Needs to be a tad more umm well out of the 3rd person telling what's happen and why, sort of like feeling what her day was her refletion on seeing what was
going on for instance when she woke up that Moring. but very good love it :)
a good start , Needs to be a tad more umm well out of the 3rd person telling what's happen and why, sort of like feeling what her day was her refletion on seeing what was
going on for instance when she woke up that Moring. but very good love it :)
8/12/2016 c1 Bronze
Just a quickie about your summery. Dumbledore would go light millenniums passed spar if his little weapon suddenly went missing. I'm on google at the moment and your story's too small for me to read. Thus I'll write the address down and pick it up on explorer.
Just a quickie about your summery. Dumbledore would go light millenniums passed spar if his little weapon suddenly went missing. I'm on google at the moment and your story's too small for me to read. Thus I'll write the address down and pick it up on explorer.