for Biker Bar12/17/2014 c6 FDWojo
Well, with the way you have your Surrey going, you are not instilling any confidence in us readers to continue reading. Especially if all that Brennan has to go on is Kate's bones. And even if we find that Kate its still alive and being continuall by Josh... Well... That's pretty sad.
Frank
Well, with the way you have your Surrey going, you are not instilling any confidence in us readers to continue reading. Especially if all that Brennan has to go on is Kate's bones. And even if we find that Kate its still alive and being continuall by Josh... Well... That's pretty sad.
Frank
12/9/2014 c5 Reina
Are you going to continue this? It's quite great.
Are you going to continue this? It's quite great.
11/26/2014 c5 TORONTOSUN
I don't think Rick is going to drive safely. I could see him running red lights, go above the speed limit.
I don't think Rick is going to drive safely. I could see him running red lights, go above the speed limit.
11/26/2014 c5 roach890
Seriously, the grammar of this is absolutely HORRIBLE, it might be good if you would learn proper grammar.
Seriously, the grammar of this is absolutely HORRIBLE, it might be good if you would learn proper grammar.
11/26/2014 c5 FDWojo
Well, I just thought I'd put my two (three) cents in here.
First, no one but you can ever be sure, but I strongly suspect that you are typing your story in on a mobile device such as a tablet or a smartphone. This is because the auto-correct/auto-guess that the keyboard does is doing a real crappy job. But, anyone who reads this site knows that people do that, so I'm just mentioning it because it's more pronounced here then with other writers I've read here.
Second, I'm a bit concerned with how your story has gone in this chapter. I can understand that Kate didn't want Ryan to tell anyone about Josh's threat, but Kate has never shown in the TV show (or in most other stories) to be blindly living her life. She is typically aware of where she's going and what might happen, so it seems a bit strange that she could receive such a threat from Josh, and yet ignore it and even get captured. Kate is NOT that stupid.
Third, based on the findings at the landfill, I feel the need to say this: Are you aware that for certain things that can happen in a story, you're supposed to be a warning in the story summary, or in the beginning Author Notes? Things like: Violent forced sexual intercourse? Death? Other trigger events such as self-harm?
For the most part, I *do* like the story, depending on how it goes. I know that it's taking you a while to get each chapter up. I am wondering about the next chapter you will have for us. Since you don't mention any of those bad things, I'm assuming that they won't be happening in your story. So, look forward to what you write next.
Frank
Well, I just thought I'd put my two (three) cents in here.
First, no one but you can ever be sure, but I strongly suspect that you are typing your story in on a mobile device such as a tablet or a smartphone. This is because the auto-correct/auto-guess that the keyboard does is doing a real crappy job. But, anyone who reads this site knows that people do that, so I'm just mentioning it because it's more pronounced here then with other writers I've read here.
Second, I'm a bit concerned with how your story has gone in this chapter. I can understand that Kate didn't want Ryan to tell anyone about Josh's threat, but Kate has never shown in the TV show (or in most other stories) to be blindly living her life. She is typically aware of where she's going and what might happen, so it seems a bit strange that she could receive such a threat from Josh, and yet ignore it and even get captured. Kate is NOT that stupid.
Third, based on the findings at the landfill, I feel the need to say this: Are you aware that for certain things that can happen in a story, you're supposed to be a warning in the story summary, or in the beginning Author Notes? Things like: Violent forced sexual intercourse? Death? Other trigger events such as self-harm?
For the most part, I *do* like the story, depending on how it goes. I know that it's taking you a while to get each chapter up. I am wondering about the next chapter you will have for us. Since you don't mention any of those bad things, I'm assuming that they won't be happening in your story. So, look forward to what you write next.
Frank
11/10/2014 c4 Lisa
Why would Rick trust Kate? Kate has never been someone he could trust. She uses, takes, lies, etc. She's incapable of showing the man any respect let alone being trustworthy. If Rick had any sense, he would drop her like the emotionally damaged hot mess that she is.
Why would Rick trust Kate? Kate has never been someone he could trust. She uses, takes, lies, etc. She's incapable of showing the man any respect let alone being trustworthy. If Rick had any sense, he would drop her like the emotionally damaged hot mess that she is.
11/11/2014 c4 FDWojo
I'm not really sure when your story is set in. Is it third season? Is it fourth? The story is interesting and I'm wondering if Kate has even been shot in your story. And if she has been, then why is she still with Josh? What is the story reason? She only got together with Josh because she wasn't able to go to the Hamptons because Gina showed up an also because she was too afraid to be with Rick.
Also, I really wish that there was better spelling. So many misspelled words.
Keep it going!
Frank
I'm not really sure when your story is set in. Is it third season? Is it fourth? The story is interesting and I'm wondering if Kate has even been shot in your story. And if she has been, then why is she still with Josh? What is the story reason? She only got together with Josh because she wasn't able to go to the Hamptons because Gina showed up an also because she was too afraid to be with Rick.
Also, I really wish that there was better spelling. So many misspelled words.
Keep it going!
Frank
11/10/2014 c4 LoveAbby
I liked this chapter, but was kind of confused at the end. Castle threw Beckett out?
I liked this chapter, but was kind of confused at the end. Castle threw Beckett out?
11/10/2014 c4 TORONTOSUN
Good for Rick to defend himself against Josh, who deserves it. I wonder if Rick trust Kate, and I hope he stays at the 12th. I like to see Rick not go to the 12th. I like to see how Kate handles it.
Good for Rick to defend himself against Josh, who deserves it. I wonder if Rick trust Kate, and I hope he stays at the 12th. I like to see Rick not go to the 12th. I like to see how Kate handles it.
11/8/2014 c2 Maria
GREAT! GREAT! I love this plot. How will you go on? Where has she to go to? New Job? Can't wait to read more of this ...
GREAT! GREAT! I love this plot. How will you go on? Where has she to go to? New Job? Can't wait to read more of this ...
111/6/2014 c1 Guest
I like it
Different but good
I like it
Different but good