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12/14/2014 c1 112AzureSkye23
Ooh, I've only watched this movie once, and never even considered what Jane would go through afterwards. I like this, though, it's an almost PTSD, and would make sense after everything. That she recognizes it, though, and actively fights back by *being* messy, and not changing her personality to give in to her new fear of chaos is beautiful. And as always, your choice and command of language is simply beautiful. :)
11/27/2014 c1 5Ruadhnait
I am a terrible person for not reviewing this earlier. Ugh, I am so very ashamed of myself right now.

I can't believe I didn't review this earlier, because this, my friend, is bloody brilliant. You just - wow. Just wow. Gimme a moment while I try to corral my sheer awe into something coherent ...

...okay, got it. I never really thought about Jane this way. I never really thought about the Aether's effects on Jane this way. I love how you explored the Aether's psychological effects on its host, rather than just treating it as powerful cosmic goo like the movie did. Not only was this a pleasure to read, it really made me think. I appreciate that.

Also, the other thing that's making me pound my keyboard and groan in incoherent envy/rage is that during my little hiatus your writing quality shot through the roof. Not that you weren't good before (of course you were amazing before) but now you're incredible. I mean, wow. I have got some work to do. I am so jealous of you. I think what's most effective in this story, especially, is your use of descriptive detail. It works really, really well here. I would give some specific examples, but this website isn't letting me copy and paste, and apparently I'm too lazy to type it out myself. (Also I'd just end up copying the whole story, because the whole thing's incredible. You know.)

Let's see, what else. OH YEAH. You claim that you're not a science person, but I saw what you did there with the universal gravitation constant. To five decimal places, no less! *high fives*

Ugh, this is awesome. So jealous of you right now. So mad.

Oh, have a wonderful Thanksgiving, too!

Hugs,
Ruadhnait
11/23/2014 c1 24Galad Estel
Hi, Crackers!

Glad to see you're writing again. I don't know a whole lot about the Thor universe, but I really enjoyed reading this. The writing was beautiful, and I loved your characterization of Jane. How she's trying to justify her actions and not have things change her. She seems have to come up with a clear idea of who she is, but the Aether made her doubt herself. I also like how you dropped in equations and scientific thought, because she's a scientist.

Great work
-Galad Estel
11/7/2014 c1 RandomCelt
Whoa, Crackers!

This is brilliant. I never thought about the Aether effecting Jane that way, but it just *works*. I really like how you turned the abstraction of 'disorder' into a tangible reality and how you got inside Jane's head. As a messy person who's bothered by the messes she makes, this really resonated with me.

I wasn't sure I would like the first-person voice at the beginning, but you nailed Jane perfectly. You really command the best use of first-person narration I've seen yet. I think this is one of the best - if not THE best - characterizations of post-Aether Jane I've ever seen. The way you differentiated between figure and fact was really cool, too - it's enough for Jane to understand that something does make sense, even if she'd rather know why.

I also really like your interpretation of the MCU and I'm always happy to see when you've written for it. Nice work!

There was one place where you typed 'dessert' and I'm not sure whether or not you meant 'desert', but that's the only (possible) typo I saw.

Thanks for sharing,
-Celt

P.S. This review is anonymous simply because I'm too lazy to log in. I hope you don't mind. :)
11/7/2014 c1 mornnenn
Ah, this was beautiful! And I only know who Thor is really, but I still got such a feel for Jane. She became so lifelike and real. Also, this read rather like the start of a novel. And I was so happy to see that you had written something! Also, wow, it was beautifully written. The sentences all aligned together so nicely, and it made me so happy! I just had a question about what was wrong with her that she kept seeing red. I loved how poetic parts of this was while still keeping a prose feel. Your descriptions were lovely. It's really amazing to see how you can create a story that feels that alive when we are stuck inside the head of one person in one place. It still feels like a moving story. Lovely work!
11/7/2014 c1 33fantasychica37
This is really good! (ALSO YOU DO MARVEL FANFIC TOO BRGAAAAAAAAAAA)
11/6/2014 c1 45Thalion Estel
That was amazing, Crackers! The very idea that the experience Jane had with the Aether would affect her psychologically is a great point, and I like how you brought it out. I also liked that Jane used all those physics references in comparison with the mess. It's really in character and creative. The comment about Thor being unpredictable and yet reliable was sweet. too. The whole thing was just so original and well done. :) Your descriptions were really, really good: I especially loved the likening of the table and its contents to Mancala. The last line, which was totally perfect for Jane to say, created the perfect wrap up to this wonderful little story. Thanks so much for posting it!

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