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1GodricGryffindor87
This fanfic is great! Keep up the great work I hope that you will update soon! I can't wait to find out what will happen next!
1GodricGryffindor87This fanfic is great! Keep up the great work I hope that you will update soon! I can't wait to find out what will happen next!
3/10 c17 oldpotato
Read your AN in Ch15. Not convinced to be honest. The problem with your story is that you can't seem to decide on how to portray your characters and it's taking away from the story.
Fleur's actions are the least egregious here. Both in the Tasks and accepting Roger's invitation because she didn't know Harry's feelings. Totally believable and fine. However, she could've easily, idk, talked to the person she just got betrothed to and will now be marrying for sure? You make it seem like Harry is only person who can initiate any type of relationship or even friendship. Either way, not a big deal.
James and Lily. I can't tell if you're trying to portray them as people who feel guilt over Harry's estrangement (as evidenced by feeling of pride and wanting to talk to him) or can't wait to wash the Potter family name of him (as evidenced by their thoughts during the Gringotts meeting). Yes humans can be complex beings, but you are literally showing two conflicting paradigms of thoughts in Lily and James that should not be able to coexist. Either they feel guilt and are trying to make up for, albeit slipping at times like they neglected Harry as a kid, or they want to just get rid of him but can't because it would cost the Potter family too much gold. Pick one.
The 4 girls. Similar issue here, only magnified. You're trying to portray them as friends of Harry, and you backed that in your Ch15 AN by saying its hard being Harry's friend. However, I just don't understand this. They are all either biological children or adopted children of the Greengrass family. Harry was the latest adopted and even then he was adopted at around 9-10 years old. They have now spent 6-7 years living together all year long (summers at Greengrass and 9 months at school). They shouldn't be friends struggling to make their friendship work, they're family. The conflict, if anything, should be them trying to weight their feelings as adopted siblings for the past 7 years versus their growing feelings of romance for someone who they are used to seeing as their brother. Instead, you portray them as acquaintances/friends who just occasionally talk to each other. You literally wrote that they SLEEP together as children, they've spent the last 7 years together all year long. How do the girls not understand how Harry works? They should know that he doesn't understand romance, they should know that he wouldn't ask someone to the dance because how do you not know that about someone you've grown up with? That's just not believable to me.
Read your AN in Ch15. Not convinced to be honest. The problem with your story is that you can't seem to decide on how to portray your characters and it's taking away from the story.
Fleur's actions are the least egregious here. Both in the Tasks and accepting Roger's invitation because she didn't know Harry's feelings. Totally believable and fine. However, she could've easily, idk, talked to the person she just got betrothed to and will now be marrying for sure? You make it seem like Harry is only person who can initiate any type of relationship or even friendship. Either way, not a big deal.
James and Lily. I can't tell if you're trying to portray them as people who feel guilt over Harry's estrangement (as evidenced by feeling of pride and wanting to talk to him) or can't wait to wash the Potter family name of him (as evidenced by their thoughts during the Gringotts meeting). Yes humans can be complex beings, but you are literally showing two conflicting paradigms of thoughts in Lily and James that should not be able to coexist. Either they feel guilt and are trying to make up for, albeit slipping at times like they neglected Harry as a kid, or they want to just get rid of him but can't because it would cost the Potter family too much gold. Pick one.
The 4 girls. Similar issue here, only magnified. You're trying to portray them as friends of Harry, and you backed that in your Ch15 AN by saying its hard being Harry's friend. However, I just don't understand this. They are all either biological children or adopted children of the Greengrass family. Harry was the latest adopted and even then he was adopted at around 9-10 years old. They have now spent 6-7 years living together all year long (summers at Greengrass and 9 months at school). They shouldn't be friends struggling to make their friendship work, they're family. The conflict, if anything, should be them trying to weight their feelings as adopted siblings for the past 7 years versus their growing feelings of romance for someone who they are used to seeing as their brother. Instead, you portray them as acquaintances/friends who just occasionally talk to each other. You literally wrote that they SLEEP together as children, they've spent the last 7 years together all year long. How do the girls not understand how Harry works? They should know that he doesn't understand romance, they should know that he wouldn't ask someone to the dance because how do you not know that about someone you've grown up with? That's just not believable to me.
12/4/2024 c14 RodrickBlueLord
This is disgusting, Harry should let that bitch with his brother, they deserve each other
This is disgusting, Harry should let that bitch with his brother, they deserve each other
9/18/2024 c30 1Eroldin
Not a bad story. I have to agree with Fleur though, Daphne does NOT care about Harry at all. She treats Harry as if he was her possession. A tool she must have.
I think Harry being contracted to Fleur is for the best.
My advise to the writer is to let things truly escalate. I.e. let Harry leave the group for a while, making Daphne experience the results of her toxic behavior. The way she is now, won't let hear learn otherwise.
1EroldinNot a bad story. I have to agree with Fleur though, Daphne does NOT care about Harry at all. She treats Harry as if he was her possession. A tool she must have.
I think Harry being contracted to Fleur is for the best.
My advise to the writer is to let things truly escalate. I.e. let Harry leave the group for a while, making Daphne experience the results of her toxic behavior. The way she is now, won't let hear learn otherwise.
4/30/2024 c12 Guest
ferret malloy trash son of a death eater
ferret malloy trash son of a death eater
7/27/2023 c27 1Sankarea396
OMFGGG YASSS TRACY! THIS IS THE VERBAL BEAT DOWN I WAS WAITIN FOR! I officially retract my statement about hating you! Gods Daphne's such a fukin bchhh like ghorl you're one of his closest friends and she hasn't picked up on that fact?! Fleur has a valid excuse only knowing him from the start of the tournament add to that she is his fiance so no matter what Daphne does Fleur will always be the first Harry prioritizes in terms of romance cause its the logical thing for him to do even if he still does not get it
1Sankarea396OMFGGG YASSS TRACY! THIS IS THE VERBAL BEAT DOWN I WAS WAITIN FOR! I officially retract my statement about hating you! Gods Daphne's such a fukin bchhh like ghorl you're one of his closest friends and she hasn't picked up on that fact?! Fleur has a valid excuse only knowing him from the start of the tournament add to that she is his fiance so no matter what Daphne does Fleur will always be the first Harry prioritizes in terms of romance cause its the logical thing for him to do even if he still does not get it
7/27/2023 c11 Sankarea396
Has nobody asked if Harry's Asexual? I mean l know he lived out in the wild for 6 years but really? it stunted his humanity that far? Even fukin Tarzan found love under a year after meeting jane and he's lived in a gods damn jungle all his life! Even if he was away that many years puberty and hormones should have kicked him in the face! Im giving the benefit of a doubt due to his unusual circumstances but honestly I would love for him to be asexual cause I literally hate all his 'sisters' except may Astoria? and him being one is a smack to their faces! Gods they're using their close relationship to him to manipulating the outcome of his love life! If someone I consider a friend or at least someone important is that clueless I would at least help the guy out cause in Harry's situation it's becoming such a burden that he needed to search up what to do and why it's happening! Becoming asexual would leave him with fleur and fleur only and that's a good thing cause honestly Fleur can make a gay guys go straight and straight girls go gay... also Fleur's the only one currently not actively gatekeeping him and the people he calls his 'sisters' are indirectly making his life miserable gods this is not Alabama!
Has nobody asked if Harry's Asexual? I mean l know he lived out in the wild for 6 years but really? it stunted his humanity that far? Even fukin Tarzan found love under a year after meeting jane and he's lived in a gods damn jungle all his life! Even if he was away that many years puberty and hormones should have kicked him in the face! Im giving the benefit of a doubt due to his unusual circumstances but honestly I would love for him to be asexual cause I literally hate all his 'sisters' except may Astoria? and him being one is a smack to their faces! Gods they're using their close relationship to him to manipulating the outcome of his love life! If someone I consider a friend or at least someone important is that clueless I would at least help the guy out cause in Harry's situation it's becoming such a burden that he needed to search up what to do and why it's happening! Becoming asexual would leave him with fleur and fleur only and that's a good thing cause honestly Fleur can make a gay guys go straight and straight girls go gay... also Fleur's the only one currently not actively gatekeeping him and the people he calls his 'sisters' are indirectly making his life miserable gods this is not Alabama!
6/30/2023 c12 Guest
I can't stand your writing style unfortunately, it's all over the place
I can't stand your writing style unfortunately, it's all over the place