for The Fox's Shadow10/20/2022 c9 GloriouSin
As if the overly liberal and utterly unrealistic underuse of criminally overpowered henge was not enough, as if edo tensei was not the dumbest thing ever, as if Pain not using resurrection to fix all his problems was not mindbendingly idiotic. Here comes a retard that decides he will add idiotic pointless magic doppelganger techniques. Holy shit can't people just at least... ATTEMPT to write something HALF-DECENT?
And... ok... so either don't show what happens offcreen or show it all. And i hope but doubt this is not the real Anko but then again why in the hell would she tell Sarutobi about being doppelgangered?
And... Are you just trying to bs me that not only ANY SHINOBI but Anko of all people did not see who attacked her? Could not hear? (I assume it's someone unknown cos otherwise they would get completely recognised by voice).
And since you like idiotic gimmicks, check mate, Hiruzen has a magic fucking ball that fucks your dumbass shitty underthought pseudo-mystery in the ass with a 10 foot stick.
As if the overly liberal and utterly unrealistic underuse of criminally overpowered henge was not enough, as if edo tensei was not the dumbest thing ever, as if Pain not using resurrection to fix all his problems was not mindbendingly idiotic. Here comes a retard that decides he will add idiotic pointless magic doppelganger techniques. Holy shit can't people just at least... ATTEMPT to write something HALF-DECENT?
And... ok... so either don't show what happens offcreen or show it all. And i hope but doubt this is not the real Anko but then again why in the hell would she tell Sarutobi about being doppelgangered?
And... Are you just trying to bs me that not only ANY SHINOBI but Anko of all people did not see who attacked her? Could not hear? (I assume it's someone unknown cos otherwise they would get completely recognised by voice).
And since you like idiotic gimmicks, check mate, Hiruzen has a magic fucking ball that fucks your dumbass shitty underthought pseudo-mystery in the ass with a 10 foot stick.
10/10/2022 c19 Guest
There's good elements in your story so far up to this point that I've read but I've lost interest bro I'd keep reading bro but there's other stories out there and only so much time in the day!
There's good elements in your story so far up to this point that I've read but I've lost interest bro I'd keep reading bro but there's other stories out there and only so much time in the day!
6/19/2022 c41 Guest
So Anko adopts Susamr and not Naruto, you know I'm not even shocked, I mean you've made her character a piece of shit from the moment you introduced her so of course she was, the only good part of this story is the fact you fucking ended it, it was unentertaining bullshit trash from start to finish and you need to never wrote again until you've had psychiatric counseling to fix your serious mental health problems
So Anko adopts Susamr and not Naruto, you know I'm not even shocked, I mean you've made her character a piece of shit from the moment you introduced her so of course she was, the only good part of this story is the fact you fucking ended it, it was unentertaining bullshit trash from start to finish and you need to never wrote again until you've had psychiatric counseling to fix your serious mental health problems
6/19/2022 c15 Guest
Seriously, none of this shit is funny or entertaining all it does is show what a disgusting deranged piece of shit you clearly are
Seriously, none of this shit is funny or entertaining all it does is show what a disgusting deranged piece of shit you clearly are
6/19/2022 c14 Guest
Oh look she's also abusive, you're a disgusting piece of filth who needs immediate admittance to an asylum before you're found with mutilated corpses in your basement
Oh look she's also abusive, you're a disgusting piece of filth who needs immediate admittance to an asylum before you're found with mutilated corpses in your basement
6/19/2022 c10 Guest
Wow, look another story filled with people who are lying pieces of shit, just stop writing, this story is complete trash and you are clearly incapable of making it anything other than shit
Wow, look another story filled with people who are lying pieces of shit, just stop writing, this story is complete trash and you are clearly incapable of making it anything other than shit
6/19/2022 c5 Guest
Oh so you decided to make Anko and sadistic, arrogant, narcissistic cunt, how lovely, moving on to a story that isn't complete trash
Oh so you decided to make Anko and sadistic, arrogant, narcissistic cunt, how lovely, moving on to a story that isn't complete trash
6/25/2021 c1 Guest
WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. . . . . .
WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lives in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that the best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that read this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on the site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake, apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. . . . . .
5/4/2021 c21 kuroakuma999
So I like the story so far, but in my personal preference I hate how you made naruto a whiny bitch. Considering how he grown up it would make sense that while he would be as book smart he would have more common sense and act more mature but again I didn’t write the story so I can’t complain to much.
So I like the story so far, but in my personal preference I hate how you made naruto a whiny bitch. Considering how he grown up it would make sense that while he would be as book smart he would have more common sense and act more mature but again I didn’t write the story so I can’t complain to much.
1/14/2020 c36 troutman30
Luke...I am your father!
NOOOO! That can't be true!
Luke ...Join me, come to the dark side!
NOOOO I'll never join you!
So has anyone else figured out that the shadow is Naruto's dark side?
That's my guess anyway, no, I just found this story in somebodies Favorites, I haven't read past this chapter.
Luke...I am your father!
NOOOO! That can't be true!
Luke ...Join me, come to the dark side!
NOOOO I'll never join you!
So has anyone else figured out that the shadow is Naruto's dark side?
That's my guess anyway, no, I just found this story in somebodies Favorites, I haven't read past this chapter.
10/4/2018 c41 
4halo4hire
Normally I absolutely hate, loathe, despise, abhor, pre-academy Naruto stories. So many of them have a 5yo Naruto dealing with things no 5yo should deal with, admittedly Naruto isn't a normal child but it's disturbing that someone imagined it happening. Tangent! Anyways, this was... confusing. Like I have mixed feelings about this story, on one hand it was a pretty well written story and it flows decently in the telling, few minor bugs and gripes, but besides that, it was well done. On the other hand I absolutely abhor pre academy Naruto stories and kept hoping for a time skip. Seriously, was praying for one towards the end.
4halo4hireNormally I absolutely hate, loathe, despise, abhor, pre-academy Naruto stories. So many of them have a 5yo Naruto dealing with things no 5yo should deal with, admittedly Naruto isn't a normal child but it's disturbing that someone imagined it happening. Tangent! Anyways, this was... confusing. Like I have mixed feelings about this story, on one hand it was a pretty well written story and it flows decently in the telling, few minor bugs and gripes, but besides that, it was well done. On the other hand I absolutely abhor pre academy Naruto stories and kept hoping for a time skip. Seriously, was praying for one towards the end.
4/22/2017 c29 Guest
A sad chapter but I'm glade that it brought the two brothers closer
A sad chapter but I'm glade that it brought the two brothers closer
10/11/2016 c42 18MRAY 4TW
Well, this was a fantastic fic, combining the best of all genres. It's the first time I've read of a complete fic that's all about Naruto's life before the academy, and it was pretty good, too. Lots of good friendshipping and the like.
As for criticalities, I can't say I have any. It was well written, minimal use of flashbacks, had cliffhangers when necessary, little to no spelling and grammatical errors and honestly, worth a fave in my book. Keep it up!
MRAY 4TW
18MRAY 4TWWell, this was a fantastic fic, combining the best of all genres. It's the first time I've read of a complete fic that's all about Naruto's life before the academy, and it was pretty good, too. Lots of good friendshipping and the like.
As for criticalities, I can't say I have any. It was well written, minimal use of flashbacks, had cliffhangers when necessary, little to no spelling and grammatical errors and honestly, worth a fave in my book. Keep it up!
MRAY 4TW