for Unwanted and Forgotten1/7/2015 c1 
1EliteKnight
Very interesting. I will be keeping an eye on this story. Keep it up!
PS: I only saw a few small mistakes but its all good. It didn't take away from the story any.
PPS: - haha pp. XD
PPPS: Vary different intro then i would have thought of. Interesting approach!
1EliteKnightVery interesting. I will be keeping an eye on this story. Keep it up!
PS: I only saw a few small mistakes but its all good. It didn't take away from the story any.
PPS: - haha pp. XD
PPPS: Vary different intro then i would have thought of. Interesting approach!
11/25/2014 c1 2reaperthecat
Why did the mother call Dakota sweaty, wouldn't it be sweety. Also don't you mean, In a sweet tone, not "In a sweat tone". And lastly her name is Chica, not "Cheka". Just informing you about your mistakes, nothing else.
2reaperthecatWhy did the mother call Dakota sweaty, wouldn't it be sweety. Also don't you mean, In a sweet tone, not "In a sweat tone". And lastly her name is Chica, not "Cheka". Just informing you about your mistakes, nothing else.