for Shatter1/13/2019 c7 Guest
Want more chapters please?
Want more chapters please?
6/19/2018 c5 Guest
Really good stuff! Just wish there was more. Really interesting take on the events, also really wanna see more kelly/oc stuff. Ok bye!
Really good stuff! Just wish there was more. Really interesting take on the events, also really wanna see more kelly/oc stuff. Ok bye!
12/13/2016 c7 Commader Lochagos
Wow dude,this story is truely remarkable,love where this is headed.
I have to say,you truely are one of the more capable fanfiction writers i have seen so far(and trust me,i have seen many).
While you do have a few things you could improve on,like making the stories stick to a selected tense(and not switch from present to past in the middle of a sentence,and seriously? You don't know how to spell consol?XD)your stories are extremely enjoyable to read(and so are the lemons;)).I really hope you will continue this story(and i hope you are planning to,for it would be a shame for something with this much development and potential to go to waste)
Wow dude,this story is truely remarkable,love where this is headed.
I have to say,you truely are one of the more capable fanfiction writers i have seen so far(and trust me,i have seen many).
While you do have a few things you could improve on,like making the stories stick to a selected tense(and not switch from present to past in the middle of a sentence,and seriously? You don't know how to spell consol?XD)your stories are extremely enjoyable to read(and so are the lemons;)).I really hope you will continue this story(and i hope you are planning to,for it would be a shame for something with this much development and potential to go to waste)
3/8/2016 c7 JustCrimson41
I really like this fanfic ;) Hope u continue! LaskyxPalmer scene?
I really like this fanfic ;) Hope u continue! LaskyxPalmer scene?
2/1/2016 c1 Hollydoor
Holy fuck! That was intense. That has to be the best kind of lemon seen I've ever come across. If anyone, and I mean anyone gives you shit about this story send them my way. There will be nothing left of them to even be considered human.
Holy fuck! That was intense. That has to be the best kind of lemon seen I've ever come across. If anyone, and I mean anyone gives you shit about this story send them my way. There will be nothing left of them to even be considered human.
12/15/2015 c7 Longhorn
Bruh, this is one of the better halo stories on this site. Not just because of the sex, but because it happens and shit happens and other kinds of shit goes on. It's reality and it really builds immersion into the world we're reading and pulling me in firmly and seamlessly. I'm just waiting for pregnancy now. I wonder how that shitstorm will be handled!
Bruh, this is one of the better halo stories on this site. Not just because of the sex, but because it happens and shit happens and other kinds of shit goes on. It's reality and it really builds immersion into the world we're reading and pulling me in firmly and seamlessly. I'm just waiting for pregnancy now. I wonder how that shitstorm will be handled!
11/10/2015 c7 
15kilroyactual117
Is it just me or was kelly acting really OOC in this chapter?
You talked about her being fairly outgoing in previous chapters almost to the point of making Linda's head explode, and she seemed to have no problem making small talk with armor techs and what not, and also she didn't seem nearly this awkward when she was at the bar with Olympia. you said previously that she felt bad for being cruel to turner, but here she seems completly unaware she had done anything wrong.
Don't get me wrong, it was a good chapter, and I suppose Kelly's character is very open to interpretation given what the books give us.
maybe I'm reading way to much into this. I'll stop now.
15kilroyactual117Is it just me or was kelly acting really OOC in this chapter?
You talked about her being fairly outgoing in previous chapters almost to the point of making Linda's head explode, and she seemed to have no problem making small talk with armor techs and what not, and also she didn't seem nearly this awkward when she was at the bar with Olympia. you said previously that she felt bad for being cruel to turner, but here she seems completly unaware she had done anything wrong.
Don't get me wrong, it was a good chapter, and I suppose Kelly's character is very open to interpretation given what the books give us.
maybe I'm reading way to much into this. I'll stop now.
11/10/2015 c5 kilroyactual117
Man, this was hard to read. :( poor blue team. They've been together all this time only to be split up now. God, I can only imagine how hard that must be. Great chapter though!
Man, this was hard to read. :( poor blue team. They've been together all this time only to be split up now. God, I can only imagine how hard that must be. Great chapter though!
11/2/2015 c7 BrotherFulgore
This is a really interesting story. I like how you're adding other characters in too.
This is a really interesting story. I like how you're adding other characters in too.
10/22/2015 c7 Calo
Can I just say please do more since you just did one of my biggest turn ons. Oh jeez. Poor wall.
Can I just say please do more since you just did one of my biggest turn ons. Oh jeez. Poor wall.