for The Black Zodiac6/27/2022 c15 GundamDemon
Please pardon my asking but when will you be updating this. Also please update this soon.
Please pardon my asking but when will you be updating this. Also please update this soon.
11/18/2018 c6 alexhoulston11
i think i know what saki was on about by tell the cow the truth but im not going to say cause if im right then it will be a spoiler
i think i know what saki was on about by tell the cow the truth but im not going to say cause if im right then it will be a spoiler
1/4/2018 c15 
8multyfangirl21
well that will be fun to explain if they catch sight of their problem rat.
8multyfangirl21well that will be fun to explain if they catch sight of their problem rat.
12/28/2017 c5 multyfangirl21
but the god of the zodiac is a woman, a cross dressed woman but still female. is she actually a man in the anime?
but the god of the zodiac is a woman, a cross dressed woman but still female. is she actually a man in the anime?
12/28/2017 c3 multyfangirl21
I can't help but think that staying with the Zodiac members would be safe. like they could protect up to 3 members of their counter parts
I can't help but think that staying with the Zodiac members would be safe. like they could protect up to 3 members of their counter parts
8/9/2017 c15 no won cares
ahhhhh I just finessed reading this and I already have to wait man I have to wait on evry fanfic I've read so far :( :(
ahhhhh I just finessed reading this and I already have to wait man I have to wait on evry fanfic I've read so far :( :(
8/8/2017 c10 evee5
ema and emi were awesome it was like yuki and kyo mix to gether
ema and emi were awesome it was like yuki and kyo mix to gether
7/18/2017 c15 Guest
Whens the next part
Whens the next part
1/17/2017 c13 That artist girl
Ummm that must have been awkward. Poor Yuki and kyo. They must be so confused... Love your story though, it is one of the best ones of fruit basket out there. Actually I take that back it is the best one I have to have read so far... But any who hope to read more soon.
Ummm that must have been awkward. Poor Yuki and kyo. They must be so confused... Love your story though, it is one of the best ones of fruit basket out there. Actually I take that back it is the best one I have to have read so far... But any who hope to read more soon.
10/28/2016 c13 Guest
Well... that's one way to confess your love to someone *blink,blink*
Well... that's one way to confess your love to someone *blink,blink*
6/28/2016 c13 1YUNeLenna
First of all, thank you for this very imaginative story.
I will start off with the bad and end with the good, hoping this can help you a bit.
Your story is extremely confusing as to when it is happening in the books. At first I thought it was taking place after the curse had been broken at the end of the books but it does not seem like it is the case at all since they still turn into animals. Then there is that part referring to the first book but it cannot be, I mean Tohru already knows Lisa, Momiji, Hatsuharu, Hatori and Ayame. if it was actually taking place in the first book she would not have met them yet. You see my point, we have no clue as to when your story is occurring, yet it is important because it helps us with the context.
Next, I would advice you to have a Beta Reader look at your work because there are some mistakes with time concordance, grammar and syntax.
Now let us get to the good parts. I would like to congratulate you, you said you had writer blocks but it does not show at all in your writing. Most writer with that kind of problem write inaccurate parts barely linked to their initial story line, because they are in a rush to get ride of the chapter which they cannot seem to finish (or even start as a matter of fact). And it is not your case at all, you write properly you stick to your story and make shorter chapters instead of long and "filled up with random stuff" chapters.
Your imagination is your strongest point in this story I think, you made up some very unusual "black curse" which no one had thought of up til now. The fact that the soul and the holder can communicate is very interesting and I am pleased to see you are using it, this can be full of promise for Tohru and Akane.
Overall i enjoy it even with the confusion, I have not told you all this to bring your mood down but in hope it can help you figure out how to improve. I do hope you will not give it up.
Thank you for sharing your imagination with us, see you next chapter.
1YUNeLennaFirst of all, thank you for this very imaginative story.
I will start off with the bad and end with the good, hoping this can help you a bit.
Your story is extremely confusing as to when it is happening in the books. At first I thought it was taking place after the curse had been broken at the end of the books but it does not seem like it is the case at all since they still turn into animals. Then there is that part referring to the first book but it cannot be, I mean Tohru already knows Lisa, Momiji, Hatsuharu, Hatori and Ayame. if it was actually taking place in the first book she would not have met them yet. You see my point, we have no clue as to when your story is occurring, yet it is important because it helps us with the context.
Next, I would advice you to have a Beta Reader look at your work because there are some mistakes with time concordance, grammar and syntax.
Now let us get to the good parts. I would like to congratulate you, you said you had writer blocks but it does not show at all in your writing. Most writer with that kind of problem write inaccurate parts barely linked to their initial story line, because they are in a rush to get ride of the chapter which they cannot seem to finish (or even start as a matter of fact). And it is not your case at all, you write properly you stick to your story and make shorter chapters instead of long and "filled up with random stuff" chapters.
Your imagination is your strongest point in this story I think, you made up some very unusual "black curse" which no one had thought of up til now. The fact that the soul and the holder can communicate is very interesting and I am pleased to see you are using it, this can be full of promise for Tohru and Akane.
Overall i enjoy it even with the confusion, I have not told you all this to bring your mood down but in hope it can help you figure out how to improve. I do hope you will not give it up.
Thank you for sharing your imagination with us, see you next chapter.
4/4/2016 c13 1NevaehMichelle13
This is getting really really good pease keep going. I love the idea of the black zodiac and I can not wait to see the next chapter.
1NevaehMichelle13This is getting really really good pease keep going. I love the idea of the black zodiac and I can not wait to see the next chapter.
3/20/2016 c4 RAM
Wow, this got really intense super fast. It's an amazing fic!
Wow, this got really intense super fast. It's an amazing fic!