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for Your Eyes Looking Like Coming Home

12/17/2014 c1 5EbonyGreen
Awww that was sooo cool! I'm so sorry that I'm reviewing so late, I didn't see it...
12/11/2014 c1 24TrebledWriter
That was so good! Sorry I didn't see this sooner!
12/11/2014 c1 J
Great!
12/11/2014 c1 71heatqueen
Ok, I like this. It's very descriptive and vivid. However, I feel as though you may be trying too hard with the language. Sometimes when you write, you say something in a really complex way when it actually may be better to state it more blandly and say it directly. I'm on my phone right now so I can't draw attention to specific examples, but this is the kind of fic I would love to beta because I think you have the potential to write really well if you refine your style a bit.

Good fic, and keep writing because you have a talent for it. :)

heatqueen
12/10/2014 c1 22aphleser
Oh, that was deep and romantic and gorgeous. Fantastic! I loved it. Fiyero really is devoted to her, isn't he?
Don't shy away from romance. It will get to you eventually.

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