for When Flames Take Hold4/20/2020 c1 
1Lesbean36
Interesting story. I enjoyed it, but I really do think there could’ve been a perhaps better ending. Though, honestly, I just dislike deaths of the lover for the main character. There were a few other things that could’ve been better, plot seemed a bit rushed. Grammar mistakes here and there. And etc. Overall, though, nice story in general.
1Lesbean36Interesting story. I enjoyed it, but I really do think there could’ve been a perhaps better ending. Though, honestly, I just dislike deaths of the lover for the main character. There were a few other things that could’ve been better, plot seemed a bit rushed. Grammar mistakes here and there. And etc. Overall, though, nice story in general.
12/14/2019 c20 Thorgrun
This was... Actually very interesting. There were parts that bothered me, like for example sometimes dialogue would seem a bit robotic and flat. Some spelling errors, but all in all the storyline itself was actually interesting and kept me reading until the end. I was upset at the ending, poor Ruby! But still, good job, thanks for the read. :)
This was... Actually very interesting. There were parts that bothered me, like for example sometimes dialogue would seem a bit robotic and flat. Some spelling errors, but all in all the storyline itself was actually interesting and kept me reading until the end. I was upset at the ending, poor Ruby! But still, good job, thanks for the read. :)
11/13/2019 c2 9BunnyGirlErika
Yea Ruby being pissed like that is understandable because it's annoying when others treat you like a child when your not especially when some of the people treating you that way are around your age to begin with.
9BunnyGirlErikaYea Ruby being pissed like that is understandable because it's annoying when others treat you like a child when your not especially when some of the people treating you that way are around your age to begin with.
7/11/2019 c3 thedrugedghoul
Really? Just casual chitchat and flirting in front of a mangled corpse. Very natural.
Really? Just casual chitchat and flirting in front of a mangled corpse. Very natural.
2/11/2017 c20 Nameless shadow
Wow. Dark. Yet totally believable. Great job bro.
Wow. Dark. Yet totally believable. Great job bro.
1/27/2017 c20 key
god
god
1/27/2017 c4 Key
That escalated quickly.
That escalated quickly.
10/30/2016 c20 Moose
Very interesting concept that kept me hooked and read this all in one go. Did feel a bit rushed and some of your dialogue was a little too robotic/ooc (I mean you couldn't not be ooc sometimes with a story this off of cannon) but overall I really liked the story. Keep on writing stories and I look forward to you future works.
Very interesting concept that kept me hooked and read this all in one go. Did feel a bit rushed and some of your dialogue was a little too robotic/ooc (I mean you couldn't not be ooc sometimes with a story this off of cannon) but overall I really liked the story. Keep on writing stories and I look forward to you future works.