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4/20/2020 c1 1Lesbean36
Interesting story. I enjoyed it, but I really do think there could’ve been a perhaps better ending. Though, honestly, I just dislike deaths of the lover for the main character. There were a few other things that could’ve been better, plot seemed a bit rushed. Grammar mistakes here and there. And etc. Overall, though, nice story in general.
12/14/2019 c20 Thorgrun
This was... Actually very interesting. There were parts that bothered me, like for example sometimes dialogue would seem a bit robotic and flat. Some spelling errors, but all in all the storyline itself was actually interesting and kept me reading until the end. I was upset at the ending, poor Ruby! But still, good job, thanks for the read. :)
11/13/2019 c2 9BunnyGirlErika
Yea Ruby being pissed like that is understandable because it's annoying when others treat you like a child when your not especially when some of the people treating you that way are around your age to begin with.
10/24/2019 c20 Juliandog5
I'm sad now, my heart...
7/11/2019 c3 thedrugedghoul
Really? Just casual chitchat and flirting in front of a mangled corpse. Very natural.
5/9/2019 c20 11sondowth
Bittersweet
4/16/2019 c20 WeissCold
Oof why am I crying :-;
1/3/2018 c20 3pipn123
Great story
2/24/2017 c20 1ALoveMysteriousWritter
I AM CRYING WHY DO THAT TO CINDER WHYYYYY
2/11/2017 c20 Nameless shadow
Wow. Dark. Yet totally believable. Great job bro.
1/27/2017 c20 key
god
1/27/2017 c4 Key
That escalated quickly.
1/20/2017 c20 3Piggyslayer1235
Please make a sequel!
10/30/2016 c20 Moose
Very interesting concept that kept me hooked and read this all in one go. Did feel a bit rushed and some of your dialogue was a little too robotic/ooc (I mean you couldn't not be ooc sometimes with a story this off of cannon) but overall I really liked the story. Keep on writing stories and I look forward to you future works.
10/24/2016 c20 6THB4
I liked this story but who killed Yang did Ozpin have control and have her killed or was she killed by Summer's forces
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