for Red Rose12/18/2014 c1 GRAANDMA PAULA
GOOD SET UP. WILL CONTINUE TO FOLLOW AS YOUR STORY PROGRESSES.
GOOD SET UP. WILL CONTINUE TO FOLLOW AS YOUR STORY PROGRESSES.
12/19/2014 c1 
31POIphantomgirl
Nice beginning. I do like your style of getting to the point. Interested to see where you go next with this.
31POIphantomgirlNice beginning. I do like your style of getting to the point. Interested to see where you go next with this.
12/19/2014 c1 8PhantomFan01
But she loves you Erik! :D At least he returns her feelings, he just needs to get them out in the open :) Can't wait for more :D
8PhantomFan01But she loves you Erik! :D At least he returns her feelings, he just needs to get them out in the open :) Can't wait for more :D
12/18/2014 c1 31Not A Ghost3
Nice start! I like your idea for this story. The only thing I noticed was to add a bit more detail, you know 'show not tell'. I'm looking forward to more!
31Not A Ghost3Nice start! I like your idea for this story. The only thing I noticed was to add a bit more detail, you know 'show not tell'. I'm looking forward to more!