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6/15 c1 ahack8672
Nice job, Tsukune.
7/24/2016 c5 Guest
Continue please
12/31/2015 c5 smithpj
No updates in a year. That sucks.i was really liking this story
7/20/2015 c5 fireninjafox
6/25/2015 c1 NatsuDragneel56
Nice job _
2/2/2015 c5 3Mizore
Great story so far! I can't wait to see how all of this turns out in the end. Please keep writing! you are doing great! I admire your creativity :)
1/29/2015 c4 Guest
You just ruined it
1/20/2015 c4 Edge Maverick
tengo curiosidad de como se te ocurrio esta idea y espero impaciente que lo continues para saber que tienes planeado con rubi y yukari jijijij hacen una linda pareja de brujas

I'm curious as happened to you this idea and I look forward to it Continues to know that you have planned with ruby and yukari jijijij make a cute couple witch
1/14/2015 c1 GrammarNazi
i like the thought, but please if you are to try to make a ff atleast edit it once your done writing. if you can't do that then please send me the story i'd be more than happy to edit the paper to a masterpeice. much swag many wow yours truly GrammarNazi
1/6/2015 c1 73Kyubi1
I hope you can understand me because I'm mexican and I can't write so well the English, I'm not so good in that language.
Zackie, even if you have a problem to learn, you must be try the best. Search the mistakes that you have and try to fix it, I know that I'm the worst person to tell you this, but at least, I always do my best and I know that you can write much better than I, who don't know English. So, this is an advice: Don't give up and try harder, if you want.
I could not understand so much of your fanfic, but is good, it would be better if you fix the mistakes. I know that you will take your time, but if you really like this, you will do it with an smile on your face, being happy.
12/30/2014 c2 9mineng101
I'm sorry, but chapter two was worse on spelling and grammar than chapter one. Please learn to use your computers tools. Two words you used repeatedly that were driving me crazy were exept (should be accept) and sense (should be since). There were many more mistakes as well. You should consider finding a beta reader to help you. Keep working at it, you will only improve with practice. Good luck
12/30/2014 c1 mineng101
You are in desperate need of a spell checker. You also really need to learn the use of quotation marks for speech. Lastly, the long run-on sentences need to be broken up. I hope these tips help you out. Good luck with your writing.
12/23/2014 c1 Guest
The title seem pretty... simple. But you are new... so best of luck to you.
12/21/2014 c1 Agate
Spell check and grammar correction would make this alot better.

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