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12/24/2014 c1 4LionPrankster
It was a very interesting chapter and I see great potential for this story. However, I have some critique, if you don't mind. First of all, you should make the author notes somewhat different from the story itself, because, I got a little confused at the end. Also, I don't know if this crossed your mind, and I don't want to be rude, but you could use some piece of software to check for grammar mistakes. And lastly, I can explain you the rating system if you want to know:

M - mature, sex, strong language, lemons, gore and blood
T - more subtle approach to the M rating, where all the themes mentioned before are only hinted towards.
K - kids, so no lemons, blood or nasty words
K - still kids but with a dash of nasty words.

I believe that covers it :D Also, don't be mad at the suggestions I made and the critique I gave. I believe this is the point of a review. Looking forward to more :D

LionPranster, over and out.

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