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221/3/2015 c2 Guest
OMG I LOVE IT! IT SOUNDS LIKE ITS GOING TO BE REALLY AWESOME! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
OMG I LOVE IT! IT SOUNDS LIKE ITS GOING TO BE REALLY AWESOME! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
12/28/2014 c2 hopelessromantic
this has lots of promise
this has lots of promise
12/27/2014 c2 guest
Good start but there are many errors. The errors take away from the story that you are developing. Maybe you should get an editor. That will really enhance your story for the better.
Good start but there are many errors. The errors take away from the story that you are developing. Maybe you should get an editor. That will really enhance your story for the better.
12/26/2014 c1 Guest
I really think you need to either proofread or get a beta reader to look over your writing.
There are many grammar and punctuation mistakes. This story has potential but the fact that there are many grammar mistakes almost made me stop reading it.
Don't be discouraged. Like I said it has potential. But I have to say this reminds me of other IchiRuki stories that have the same teacher/student plot. Try to do something different that separates your stories from their stories.
I really think you need to either proofread or get a beta reader to look over your writing.
There are many grammar and punctuation mistakes. This story has potential but the fact that there are many grammar mistakes almost made me stop reading it.
Don't be discouraged. Like I said it has potential. But I have to say this reminds me of other IchiRuki stories that have the same teacher/student plot. Try to do something different that separates your stories from their stories.
12/27/2014 c2 Cisusi
I think your story has a lot of potential! I think it could be great! But please pay attention to grammar and other little mistakes, and your story will be 100x better!
I think your story has a lot of potential! I think it could be great! But please pay attention to grammar and other little mistakes, and your story will be 100x better!