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4/9/2015 c5 Xxthe dark shadowXx
Good job
3/24/2015 c4 Xxthe dark shadowXx
Great chapter
3/9/2015 c3 2Humphrey418
Why the cliffhanger?
3/9/2015 c3 Guest
cool
3/2/2015 c2 shadow runner180
Dang u got talent as a writter
3/1/2015 c1 37OpenUpPandora'sBoxOnlyIfYouDar
Okay, best idea ever! :-D :-D :-D Keep it up and Happy Story Weaving!

Liliana Dragonshard
2/21/2015 c2 2Humphrey418
I love this story, please update more often
2/21/2015 c2 Xxthe dark shadowXx
Epic chapter
1/10/2015 c1 10TimberPaw
Good one. Move on :)
1/10/2015 c1 Wolf
Interesting this character Humphrey looks and sounds almost like me, keep the chapters coming I'd like to read more.
1/9/2015 c1 1Amira Hayam
"an ability" instead of "Ability"

just a fact not really on the story, I just read up on wolves apparently they can only live up to 6-8 years, near urban places 13 years and in the wild 16 years.

*sigh* this is grammatically incorrect *imagines you're annoyed face* :D

You're doing comma splicing.

parents not Parents with a cap

friend's house not friends house or if plural friends' house

Colours have no caps

OK I can't be bothered to say every cap you do wrong...

*sigh* come one... it's easier saying "covering my left useless eye" then describing twice, besides how is it "useless"? Your character can still see with it, you might want to change it for the reason it didn't look good on his face.

Sensitive ears picked up - nicely descripted

Damn it! Cap on NOUNS! Kate's an name...

I not i

don't not dont

again on my own - Nice repetition

wait what? she goes onto to say about a dog? you could at least said "Kate stood silently having nothing to say after I didn't replied. She tried to come up with something and said..."

close not cleo

Reaction great for the growl but it's "Di-did" not "DI-did"

All not Al

"close and lock my door" it past tense so "closed and locked my door"

"I want to see your dog" kinda weird at first but great how you put her opinion strongly to make it less awkward

when writing a story don't use numbers unless it some kind of labelling system

*laughs* when the wind blows my hair out of my eye" *continues laughing* should be "when the wind blows my hair away from my left eye"

Story good
- writing could improve
1/9/2015 c1 Guest
Loved it but please make the chapters longer and please make thi story last longer then like 6 chapters it sounds really interesting so please continues this story thanks it's just so awesome haha
1/8/2015 c1 Xxthe dark shadowXx
Awesome chapter
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