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2/22/2015 c8 11K Kelly
Heartbreakingly beautiful! Especially the letters they were just perfect, but I'd love to know if Lizzie goes on to fulfill her mother's dream of being the "it girl".

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K. Kelly
1/24/2015 c5 49KnightNight7203
Uh oh, I was afraid this would happen. Good addition, though, and beautifully written :') It's sad how Bonnie has nightmares, and it's sad how the police attack them and everybody gets hurt, but I do like how one leads into the next, almost like foreshadowing. I'm interested to see how Clyde reacts to keeping Lizzie now that this has happened . . . Please update soon!

Much love,
KnightNight
1/24/2015 c4 KnightNight7203
Oh. I love her name, I love how excited Bonnie is to be a mother, and I love how even Clyde is won over by the baby right away. So cute!

Much love,
KnightNight
1/24/2015 c3 KnightNight7203
Sorry it's taken me so long to read this, but it's really good! Bonnie threatening Blanche with the gun - and Blanche just going on with her argument like nothing happened - was funny, I continue to love the way you work lines from the musical in. Also, Blanche's switch from cranky to caring when Bonnie goes into labor is really sweet, I'm glad we get to see that side of her. And I'm glad Clyde's back to meet the baby!

Much love,
KnightNight
1/17/2015 c3 Guest
ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT! PLEASE CONTINUE! ️️️
1/17/2015 c3 23Singstar4
Please continue! I really want to know what happens!
1/16/2015 c2 49KnightNight7203
I love how you're working the baby idea throughout the preexisting storyline of the musical and including some of the scenes we recognize along with your own. And aww, is the idea of a baby starting to grow on Clyde?

Much love,
KnightNight
1/16/2015 c1 KnightNight7203
Oh, I am excited for this. Good start! Sounds from his reaction that Clyde had a really rough day, and I like that he freaks out about it but he doesn't quite articulate his exact reason for doing so. Like, is he upset because the baby will be in danger itself, or because it'll make them look bad because they aren't married, or because it'll ruin his outlaw style . . . ? I like that it reads almost as if he really doesn't know yet why he's so opposed to the idea, just that he is and it's overwhelming and he doesn't want to deal with it. And somehow I just can't see Bonnie dropping her kid off on some random doorstep, but I guess I'll have to wait and see :)

Much love,
KnightNight

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