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4/28/2015 c11 Guest
Aww too bad. It was getting good.
4/22/2015 c11 70YellowAngela
You should continue to write. Your writing is getting better and you left this at a cliffhanger. I understand about being busy but where there is a will there is a way. Hope you decide to continue.
4/1/2015 c10 YellowAngela
It is really short. I'm not sure what I can say about it except that it's interesting that White could be bribed. I hope the last chapter wraps everything up.
3/29/2015 c9 Guest
What happens next? Come on! Don't leave us hanging.
3/26/2015 c9 1fanaticagenrex
Sigue escribiendo, estoy ansiosa por leer más
3/26/2015 c8 fanaticagenrex
Me está gustando
3/26/2015 c5 fanaticagenrex
Esto me encanta, voy a seguir revisando
3/26/2015 c4 fanaticagenrex
Es un poco confuso todo, me parece raro que Van K deje que Rex esté así de libre por su castillo, digo, sin tanta vigilancia, pero me gusta
3/26/2015 c3 fanaticagenrex
Es un buen capítulo , seguiré leyendo :)
3/21/2015 c9 4InnerGlow
pretty good. can't wait to read more.
3/13/2015 c9 70YellowAngela
You're getting better with descriptions and plots. There are still some grammar/spelling errors and some parts that I was confused by. But overall not bad.
3/4/2015 c7 YellowAngela
I had to log out to leave a review. Apparently, I had already left one and it won't let me leave one. That was pretty exciting. Although I'm a little confused. How does Knight know that Alpha is Lynx?
2/17/2015 c1 Anonymous
I love the idea alpha is my 3rd favorite villain in the series (2. Zag-rs and 1. Van kleiss) so I can't wait to read it
2/9/2015 c1 5theWriterunknown
Your writing does need some work- but hey, that's normal. Not one writer could say that they got everything perfect and award-winning the first time, and as the old saying goes, practice makes perfect. I really like the ideas you got going on there- I find it humorous that VK's castle has a kitchen, serving food that's actually edible, like pizza and soda. And that VK keeps forgetting your character's name...-what was it again by the way? XD just kidding.
That being said, I have to suggest that you space paragraphs more often; like when a different person starts to speak, when a new idea is introduced, or the "camera" of the story changes- your writing will sound a lot less jumbled if you do this.
You need to proofread your work more often, and space it where it gets jumbled to get a better view on it. Especially when you’re writing you're dialog and "action" scenes. Also, you seem to move a little too quickly so be sure that you practice, and try to be more descriptive. Other than that, you’re pretty good :-). Take all the time that you need before you decide to get back to it. That last message you have seems to be going through some technical problems.
PS: You don’t have to listen to me at all. You’re the writer to this work, not me. Sorry if I was overstepping in any way!
2/9/2015 c7 70YellowAngela
Okay, take your time but for some reason there's formatting problems on your message.
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