for A Chance Encounter9/28 c1 hpmick13
I've only read a bit of this but ...
The description of the killing curse across his back, yeah just no.
Quote: 'The Killing Curse (Avada Kedavra) was a tool of the Dark Arts and was one of the three Unforgivable Curses. When cast successfully on a living person or creature, the curse caused instantaneous and painless death, without causing any injury to the body, and without any trace of violence.'
Harry is wildly OOC, he's nervous and reticent especially with people he doesn't know well, this one had been taken by a portkey somewhere but hasn't enquired where he is, has never mentioned the friends he was separated from our wanting to contact anybody, he regurgitates paragraphs of facts when asked a simple question, people just don't speak like that, it's unnatural.
The Delacours seem OOC as well
I've only read a bit of this but ...
The description of the killing curse across his back, yeah just no.
Quote: 'The Killing Curse (Avada Kedavra) was a tool of the Dark Arts and was one of the three Unforgivable Curses. When cast successfully on a living person or creature, the curse caused instantaneous and painless death, without causing any injury to the body, and without any trace of violence.'
Harry is wildly OOC, he's nervous and reticent especially with people he doesn't know well, this one had been taken by a portkey somewhere but hasn't enquired where he is, has never mentioned the friends he was separated from our wanting to contact anybody, he regurgitates paragraphs of facts when asked a simple question, people just don't speak like that, it's unnatural.
The Delacours seem OOC as well
9/26 c2 BlazeStryker
POLICY TIME!
Look, I know it's childish in a way which is why I save it for completed tales but the simple fact is that presenting the senile monomaniac as a sadistic piece of crap leaves only one response:
Headbastards Must Die.
POLICY TIME!
Look, I know it's childish in a way which is why I save it for completed tales but the simple fact is that presenting the senile monomaniac as a sadistic piece of crap leaves only one response:
Headbastards Must Die.
9/22 c23 
1Darknessdawns
This was an interesting piece. I quite liked the idea of Harry having a mutation due to all the odd magic and stuff he had been exposed to. However I really wish we had seen more of the character development that happened in the background, as well as the romance and family aspects. At any rate I did enjoy the piece. I just wish you had delved more into some parts of it. The Tri-Wiz events were very interesting and well done. Some of the most original ones I have seen. Unfortunately things also seemed to move really fast since most of the filler wasn't written, just acknowledged in the background. I also would have enjoyed seeing what happened with the friends, how Harry finished school and decided to become an unspeakable. Another thing I would like to mention is the whole language thing. It would have been nice to have an explanation on why all the French were speaking perfect English, or even if Harry was suddenly able to speak perfect French. I can definitely run with a magical way to learn but it does kinda need to be mentioned in story.
1DarknessdawnsThis was an interesting piece. I quite liked the idea of Harry having a mutation due to all the odd magic and stuff he had been exposed to. However I really wish we had seen more of the character development that happened in the background, as well as the romance and family aspects. At any rate I did enjoy the piece. I just wish you had delved more into some parts of it. The Tri-Wiz events were very interesting and well done. Some of the most original ones I have seen. Unfortunately things also seemed to move really fast since most of the filler wasn't written, just acknowledged in the background. I also would have enjoyed seeing what happened with the friends, how Harry finished school and decided to become an unspeakable. Another thing I would like to mention is the whole language thing. It would have been nice to have an explanation on why all the French were speaking perfect English, or even if Harry was suddenly able to speak perfect French. I can definitely run with a magical way to learn but it does kinda need to be mentioned in story.
9/19 c23 keht.jelicho
Awe was hoping that there'd be a bit about the other champions, too, and Hermione/Ron. Good glimpse at Harry and Fleur's future though
Awe was hoping that there'd be a bit about the other champions, too, and Hermione/Ron. Good glimpse at Harry and Fleur's future though
9/19 c23 Wishfull-star
That was beautiful I love how both dumbles and fudgey were taken down:) thank you for writing this story looking forward to whatever new stories you come up with stay safe:)
That was beautiful I love how both dumbles and fudgey were taken down:) thank you for writing this story looking forward to whatever new stories you come up with stay safe:)
9/18 c23 3WhiteElfElder
I wonder what affects having all three are going to have on Harry? At least Albus is no longer going to be a hindrance to progress.
3WhiteElfElderI wonder what affects having all three are going to have on Harry? At least Albus is no longer going to be a hindrance to progress.
9/18 c15 Guest
I actually love Ron and Hermione in this
I actually love Ron and Hermione in this