for Gogyo no Naruto(DISCONTINUED BEING REVISED)6/10/2018 c24 
4tymaxion
Very excited for the next chapter, binged this in 2 days and it was well worth it.
4tymaxionVery excited for the next chapter, binged this in 2 days and it was well worth it.
6/3/2018 c20 silversnitch4765
That is the 3rd time that you showed Anko to be weak, why try to make her a badass at all when she is talking to people?
That is the 3rd time that you showed Anko to be weak, why try to make her a badass at all when she is talking to people?
6/1/2018 c10 silversnitch4765
I find myself disappointed, Naruto/sasuke/Sakura are all stronger and the fight turns out the same. Orochi should not have done so well against a 3 tailed jinchuriki, 5 tailed rinnegan hunch and an ems wielder. Utterly ridiculous
I find myself disappointed, Naruto/sasuke/Sakura are all stronger and the fight turns out the same. Orochi should not have done so well against a 3 tailed jinchuriki, 5 tailed rinnegan hunch and an ems wielder. Utterly ridiculous
6/1/2018 c7 silversnitch4765
Why have Anko as part of this story if she is a non factor? You had the homage mention Sasuke has as much chakra as a sennin and he ran out using a single jutsu meanwhile Haku is fine chakra wise? Also doesn't sasuke have a fuuin that makes his fire chakra master level, so has a smaller chakra cost?
Why have Anko as part of this story if she is a non factor? You had the homage mention Sasuke has as much chakra as a sennin and he ran out using a single jutsu meanwhile Haku is fine chakra wise? Also doesn't sasuke have a fuuin that makes his fire chakra master level, so has a smaller chakra cost?
5/31/2018 c1 silversnitch4765
Too many Japanese terms of endearment, it's just off putting. There is no flow with that many of them. Otherwise I I like the story so far
Too many Japanese terms of endearment, it's just off putting. There is no flow with that many of them. Otherwise I I like the story so far
5/26/2018 c24 Danny Williams
Great job on this spin off of Naruto (enjoyed all chapters).
The translations are good (but hard to remember).
Looking forward to next update.
Great job on this spin off of Naruto (enjoyed all chapters).
The translations are good (but hard to remember).
Looking forward to next update.
5/27/2018 c1 7era-romance
all the contradictions are driving me crazy! Ex. the letters from narutos parent hope that he is an A ranked ninja but they include things like shadow clones jutsu (which he wouldn't have been able to graduate without) and chakra exercises...not to mention ur writing style is driving me bonkers. I'm outtie.
7era-romanceall the contradictions are driving me crazy! Ex. the letters from narutos parent hope that he is an A ranked ninja but they include things like shadow clones jutsu (which he wouldn't have been able to graduate without) and chakra exercises...not to mention ur writing style is driving me bonkers. I'm outtie.
5/25/2018 c24 Guest
Idk why but all the Sama, Dono, and such is getting annoying
Idk why but all the Sama, Dono, and such is getting annoying
5/26/2018 c7 HBK96
Hey there, before I start the review let me congratulate you for a wonderful premise for this story. I was getting bored of reading the same plot line usually. You are a good writer and I have been following your work eagerly. Now onto the review.
Pros:
- As stated above a good premise. Old man Hokage being open upfront at his age was a good start. I haven't seen it yet, I believe!
- Naruto's parents being alive with the help of seals was another unique plot. I loved it. Too many stories had them meeting Naruto when the seal was weak.
- Naruto having good support all over. His parents, the ANBU teachers and most importantly friends.
- I love over powered main characters so this was another plus.
Cons:
- A few grammatical errors but that is negligible. Although a con since some like to read a story fluently with no pause due to errors.
- Dialogues... I know a story should have an engrossing dialogue that shows us what the character feels and does. But come on! Your story had lots of unnecessary dialogues in between characters. There is no need for every sentence to have a dialogue. You can narrate a lot of story and reduce the dialogue. This is simply an advice dear author and the rest is up to your discretion.
- I believe that ninjas are a secretive lot. And as such the open sharing of techniques you showcased didn't sit well with me. I understand that they are friends and or God brother, but they are called clan techniques for a reason! Again simply an observation and advice from an avid reader. You may or may not work on this.
That's it for now, since I won't be going on further ahead with this story. I hope I didn't sound too direct or rude, since it's not my intention to do so. I actually am interested to how Naruto and Co will turn up, but unless with a few deep changes this story is not for me. I deeply thank you for reading this and hope to hear a positive reply.
All in all a very good work and I hope you keep continuing this. Looking forward to your Pokemon master's path.
HBK96
Hey there, before I start the review let me congratulate you for a wonderful premise for this story. I was getting bored of reading the same plot line usually. You are a good writer and I have been following your work eagerly. Now onto the review.
Pros:
- As stated above a good premise. Old man Hokage being open upfront at his age was a good start. I haven't seen it yet, I believe!
- Naruto's parents being alive with the help of seals was another unique plot. I loved it. Too many stories had them meeting Naruto when the seal was weak.
- Naruto having good support all over. His parents, the ANBU teachers and most importantly friends.
- I love over powered main characters so this was another plus.
Cons:
- A few grammatical errors but that is negligible. Although a con since some like to read a story fluently with no pause due to errors.
- Dialogues... I know a story should have an engrossing dialogue that shows us what the character feels and does. But come on! Your story had lots of unnecessary dialogues in between characters. There is no need for every sentence to have a dialogue. You can narrate a lot of story and reduce the dialogue. This is simply an advice dear author and the rest is up to your discretion.
- I believe that ninjas are a secretive lot. And as such the open sharing of techniques you showcased didn't sit well with me. I understand that they are friends and or God brother, but they are called clan techniques for a reason! Again simply an observation and advice from an avid reader. You may or may not work on this.
That's it for now, since I won't be going on further ahead with this story. I hope I didn't sound too direct or rude, since it's not my intention to do so. I actually am interested to how Naruto and Co will turn up, but unless with a few deep changes this story is not for me. I deeply thank you for reading this and hope to hear a positive reply.
All in all a very good work and I hope you keep continuing this. Looking forward to your Pokemon master's path.
HBK96
5/24/2018 c24 2bloody dragon fang
this is very unique and it held some foreboding that helps make the reader want more
2bloody dragon fangthis is very unique and it held some foreboding that helps make the reader want more