for Chapter 4193/15/2015 c1 
1Sokaiyesa
This is helpful criticism so please don't take any offence to this! I'm just giving out some advice so that you can improve :) first of all, IT WAS A BEAUTIFUL REUNION OUO But (in my opinion) I think maybe you might have rushed this a little, you'll also have to aware of grammar and punctuation (We all hate this but hey, it's gonna have to be your best friend if you decide to take up writing XD)
Secondly, and this is my personal opinion (so you don't have to listen to it!) but maybe you should tone down the capital letters XD Use exclamation marks if you want to show your viewers that they're shouting.
But seeing as how this is your first fanfiction, you've done extremely well! :3 keep up the awesome work, and I hope to see more from you! And yes, I shall fangirl with you on Natsu's timeskip appearance BUT GAHH WHY'D HE CUT HIS HAIR!? IT WAS SO BOOTIFUL ;u;
1SokaiyesaThis is helpful criticism so please don't take any offence to this! I'm just giving out some advice so that you can improve :) first of all, IT WAS A BEAUTIFUL REUNION OUO But (in my opinion) I think maybe you might have rushed this a little, you'll also have to aware of grammar and punctuation (We all hate this but hey, it's gonna have to be your best friend if you decide to take up writing XD)
Secondly, and this is my personal opinion (so you don't have to listen to it!) but maybe you should tone down the capital letters XD Use exclamation marks if you want to show your viewers that they're shouting.
But seeing as how this is your first fanfiction, you've done extremely well! :3 keep up the awesome work, and I hope to see more from you! And yes, I shall fangirl with you on Natsu's timeskip appearance BUT GAHH WHY'D HE CUT HIS HAIR!? IT WAS SO BOOTIFUL ;u;
2/6/2015 c1 No-name
Wow this is really good please continue
Wow this is really good please continue
2/4/2015 c1 loveluce
I liked this fanfic keep posting
your really good in this
I liked this fanfic keep posting
your really good in this
2/4/2015 c1 lidio
muy buen fanfiction solo le falta el manga seria henial ese capitulo
muy buen fanfiction solo le falta el manga seria henial ese capitulo
2/3/2015 c1 cat
this is great good job!
this is great good job!
2/3/2015 c1 Kiara
NAAAATTTSSSUUUUU!
BABE YOU ARE HOT.
Loved this XD
NAAAATTTSSSUUUUU!
BABE YOU ARE HOT.
Loved this XD
2/3/2015 c1 3Raelin Thaon
I think you should continue this.
And let me tell you! I would do the same thing as Lucy did. I mean COME ON!? After one year away with nothing! And where the hell is our NaLu moment.. Seriously?! We had a Gale moment, then a Gruvia moment AND Jerza!
Sorry that's the end of my rant!
Rae
3Raelin ThaonI think you should continue this.
And let me tell you! I would do the same thing as Lucy did. I mean COME ON!? After one year away with nothing! And where the hell is our NaLu moment.. Seriously?! We had a Gale moment, then a Gruvia moment AND Jerza!
Sorry that's the end of my rant!
Rae
2/3/2015 c1 Guest
I think you did pretty good with this, but there are a few mistakes with where they are. First, they're not in Magnolia, they're in Crocus. Second, Lucy is quite clearly living in a different apartment, and I'm fairly certain it's in Crocus. Other than that you did a good job.
I think you did pretty good with this, but there are a few mistakes with where they are. First, they're not in Magnolia, they're in Crocus. Second, Lucy is quite clearly living in a different apartment, and I'm fairly certain it's in Crocus. Other than that you did a good job.
2/2/2015 c1 mallows
are you sure this is your first fanfic? This is very goog story to be your first... i love it!? Update more pleeeaaasssseeeee with cherry on top...
are you sure this is your first fanfic? This is very goog story to be your first... i love it!? Update more pleeeaaasssseeeee with cherry on top...
2/2/2015 c1 2Chiharurina
AHHH SAME! I AM IN LOVE WITH THAT NEW CHAPTER! 3 LUCY'S NEW LONG HAIR IS SO AMAZING AND NATSU. Well, he really needs a haircut and he looks like Gildarts but powerful. XD THANK YOU FOR MAKING A MINI STORY ABOUT THIS CHAPTER! ABSOLUTELY LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! ! ) )
2ChiharurinaAHHH SAME! I AM IN LOVE WITH THAT NEW CHAPTER! 3 LUCY'S NEW LONG HAIR IS SO AMAZING AND NATSU. Well, he really needs a haircut and he looks like Gildarts but powerful. XD THANK YOU FOR MAKING A MINI STORY ABOUT THIS CHAPTER! ABSOLUTELY LOVE LOVE LOVE IT! ! ) )