for Mega Man ZX3: Omega's Ascension8/18/2021 c4 gabriel288
Hey really loved it , seems unfortunately is not going have continuation right ? You wrote very well the idea of z be the biometal from gray , i find it very interesting , also the mystery , damn just perfect ))
Hey really loved it , seems unfortunately is not going have continuation right ? You wrote very well the idea of z be the biometal from gray , i find it very interesting , also the mystery , damn just perfect ))
7/29/2017 c4 
5EnPassant4264
It's ironic, this story was written as a tribute to another one that died and has since died itself. It's really good, what happened to it?
5EnPassant4264It's ironic, this story was written as a tribute to another one that died and has since died itself. It's really good, what happened to it?
12/10/2015 c2 4Variable Zero
Hooray! A Red vs Blue fan! Though I say you should tone down on the exposition, it made the chapter feel longer than it should.
4Variable ZeroHooray! A Red vs Blue fan! Though I say you should tone down on the exposition, it made the chapter feel longer than it should.
5/24/2015 c1 65TyrantChimera
Hello! I've only read the first chapter so far, but it's really getting me curious as to how exaclty model O was obtained in the first place... guess I'd better keep reading? XD It may mean all the difference as to whether 'reviving' Omega is feasible or not... great fic so far!
65TyrantChimeraHello! I've only read the first chapter so far, but it's really getting me curious as to how exaclty model O was obtained in the first place... guess I'd better keep reading? XD It may mean all the difference as to whether 'reviving' Omega is feasible or not... great fic so far!
4/12/2015 c1 7MetalSonic30
After reading the first four chapters, I have to say that you've totally attracted my attention. Surprisingly, you (Spoilers) gave Grey Model Z and had him and Model Z destroy Ouroboros. And not only that, but you included the four main protagonists and made it work in your story. The Cyber-Elves inside Model O... Never saw that coming, you surprised me.
You continue to impress and surprise me good sir!
7MetalSonic30After reading the first four chapters, I have to say that you've totally attracted my attention. Surprisingly, you (Spoilers) gave Grey Model Z and had him and Model Z destroy Ouroboros. And not only that, but you included the four main protagonists and made it work in your story. The Cyber-Elves inside Model O... Never saw that coming, you surprised me.
You continue to impress and surprise me good sir!
3/25/2015 c4 4Da-Awesom-One
From what I just read, Siarnaq just found the Elpizo Cyber Elf, while the Guardians and Hunters are gonna fight Crea and Prea. Interesting showdown we've got ahead of us.
Also, Siarnaq is stone, cold, heartless killing machine. I'm looking forward to see why you think he got thaf way. Update soon!
4Da-Awesom-OneFrom what I just read, Siarnaq just found the Elpizo Cyber Elf, while the Guardians and Hunters are gonna fight Crea and Prea. Interesting showdown we've got ahead of us.
Also, Siarnaq is stone, cold, heartless killing machine. I'm looking forward to see why you think he got thaf way. Update soon!
3/17/2015 c3 Da-Awesom-One
I remember reading a similar story about this. I'm hoping to see where you go with this and hopefully see it concluded. Im also wondering if Grey will get to be Model A in the future. Update soon.
I remember reading a similar story about this. I'm hoping to see where you go with this and hopefully see it concluded. Im also wondering if Grey will get to be Model A in the future. Update soon.
2/27/2015 c2 6reppuzan
Giving Grey of all people Model Z... I can't say I saw that coming. I wonder what Vent and Aile will think when they finally run into him. IT also brings up the question of whether or not Z will stay with Grey or if he'll get another one (can't keep Aile or Vent out of the action for very long).
I feel that you've captured Grey pretty well. He's a bit more foul mouthed than canon (I don't recall him swearing, but that sort of thing tends to happen in fan stories anyway).
I liked how you brought up some average soldiers in order to create some backstory as well as to show what the setting is like from the perspective of someone who isn't one of the Chosen. I wouldn't use it too often though as it will otherwise drag down the pacing of your story and take the spotlight away from the main characters (and yes I noticed that you used the cast from Red vs. Blue.)
You're quite descriptive, a fact that is prevalent in a lot of your works. However, be careful not to go overboard as you'll end up with walls of text that your readers will have to trudge through before they get to the important parts. Your case isn't particularly bad, but it's just something to think about as slower readers might find it annoying that they have to read so much to get to what they want to read (I don't, but I'm just stating that it's a possibility).
Another thing that came up is the thought of more Chosen Ones. With the potential for more Biometals (the four spirits) the chance for additional Chosen Ones to add to the Game of Destiny Redux becomes a particularly important topic that is not to be overlooked. Be careful how you structure their personalities should you do so as the basic character archetypes have already been covered with Aeolus, Thetis, Atlas, and Siarnaq (now that I look at it they are all related to Greco-Roman Mythology in some way).
Otherwise, great work as always! I'm surprised that you updated so quickly (it usually takes me a month or two to write something of this length unless I'm particularly inspired), not that I mind of course. I look forward to reading more of this!
6reppuzanGiving Grey of all people Model Z... I can't say I saw that coming. I wonder what Vent and Aile will think when they finally run into him. IT also brings up the question of whether or not Z will stay with Grey or if he'll get another one (can't keep Aile or Vent out of the action for very long).
I feel that you've captured Grey pretty well. He's a bit more foul mouthed than canon (I don't recall him swearing, but that sort of thing tends to happen in fan stories anyway).
I liked how you brought up some average soldiers in order to create some backstory as well as to show what the setting is like from the perspective of someone who isn't one of the Chosen. I wouldn't use it too often though as it will otherwise drag down the pacing of your story and take the spotlight away from the main characters (and yes I noticed that you used the cast from Red vs. Blue.)
You're quite descriptive, a fact that is prevalent in a lot of your works. However, be careful not to go overboard as you'll end up with walls of text that your readers will have to trudge through before they get to the important parts. Your case isn't particularly bad, but it's just something to think about as slower readers might find it annoying that they have to read so much to get to what they want to read (I don't, but I'm just stating that it's a possibility).
Another thing that came up is the thought of more Chosen Ones. With the potential for more Biometals (the four spirits) the chance for additional Chosen Ones to add to the Game of Destiny Redux becomes a particularly important topic that is not to be overlooked. Be careful how you structure their personalities should you do so as the basic character archetypes have already been covered with Aeolus, Thetis, Atlas, and Siarnaq (now that I look at it they are all related to Greco-Roman Mythology in some way).
Otherwise, great work as always! I'm surprised that you updated so quickly (it usually takes me a month or two to write something of this length unless I'm particularly inspired), not that I mind of course. I look forward to reading more of this!
2/26/2015 c2 9LunaClefairy
Hrm, I must say you've captured my interest with these two chapters. I'm not the most familiar with the ZX series, but I do know a few things about it. And your writing is very solid; while some parts felt like they were dragging a little I see no major spelling or grammar errors.
So it appears that for some reason Model O contained not only Omega's soul, but also the Dark Elf, Elpizo, Crea and Prea, and Copy X. I thought the Dark Elf's curse had been lifted, though... Something weird's going on, that's for sure.
And Grey has found Model Z! From what little I do know about ZXA, I know Model Z stayed behind in an exploding ship in order to take out the other Mega Men, I think, and that ship's wreckage is what Grey found. That's our Zero for you; always managing to come back no matter how many times he dies. And Z saved Grey's life, too! We'll have to see how well Grey can handle the Biometal's power.
I've added this to my follows and I shall patiently await updates.
9LunaClefairyHrm, I must say you've captured my interest with these two chapters. I'm not the most familiar with the ZX series, but I do know a few things about it. And your writing is very solid; while some parts felt like they were dragging a little I see no major spelling or grammar errors.
So it appears that for some reason Model O contained not only Omega's soul, but also the Dark Elf, Elpizo, Crea and Prea, and Copy X. I thought the Dark Elf's curse had been lifted, though... Something weird's going on, that's for sure.
And Grey has found Model Z! From what little I do know about ZXA, I know Model Z stayed behind in an exploding ship in order to take out the other Mega Men, I think, and that ship's wreckage is what Grey found. That's our Zero for you; always managing to come back no matter how many times he dies. And Z saved Grey's life, too! We'll have to see how well Grey can handle the Biometal's power.
I've added this to my follows and I shall patiently await updates.
2/19/2015 c1 6reppuzan
Well, isn't this interesting.
The way that you split Model O into the four Cyber Elves is intriguing, the Dark Elf, Elpizo, the Baby Elves, and Copy X... so I guess I can assume that appearances by them (or potential Biometals) can be expected.
I really liked the fact that you included both Vent and Aile as well as Ashe and Grey in the story. To be honest, I find the narrative to be lacking should any one of them be missing as each storyline has their own version to tell. I can't wait to see Ashe's reaction upon meeting Grey (and the fact that he doesn't know he's Albert's backup body given the fact that you said he just woke up). Some interactions between Model ZX's holders will be great to see too.
That does bring in the question as to what Grey will be capable of. Ashe is the designated Model A chosen one, and you seem to have made it so that two people can't use the same Biometal at once (Aile had Z while Vent had X). Will he be sharing A with Ashe or will he get an original Biometal?
That said and done, there is little for me to critique here. Your grammar, characterization, and word flow are damn near flawless, and I would find it hard pressed to find someone to write the whole scenario as well as you did. In cases like this I tend to try and provide food for thought instead, so here I go:
1. As I mentioned earlier, there is the question as to what Biometal Grey will receive access to. Will you have him share, or will he be given his own?
2. What will the roles of the four Cyber Elves released form Model O be? All four were devastatingly powerful and posed a threat to Zero and the world at their respective points in time... given X's influence on the games it would make sense to give them an important role in shaping events... assuming Thomas doesn't somehow make them into Biometals.
3. Will you be introducing new Pseudoroids? The Biometals are all in the hands of Thomas, so he is more than capable of doing so. Then again... I don't see the Chosen Ones as willing to hand over a piece of their Biometal to anyone.
4. Will Mikhail be acting as Mission Control for the heroes? That was role in Advent, but anything can change.
5. This one is a bit of an oddball but will any of the characters from the Classic series be appearing in any shape or form? Concept Art for Command Mission (which takes place after X8) shows both Rock and Cutman with modern redesigns. Given Rock's weapon copy ability (and note Robot Master status, giving him complete command over all non-hostile Mechaniloids) I wouldn't be surprised if there was an extra Biometal stashed away somewhere.
I don't know if this will be helpful to you but I do try to give constructive reviews. I really enjoy your work (I finished Fate: Zero Sanity in one sitting!) so I'm looking forward to this.
Anyway, Gung Hay Fat Choy (It's the first day of the Chinese New Year after all) and Happy Writing!
6reppuzanWell, isn't this interesting.
The way that you split Model O into the four Cyber Elves is intriguing, the Dark Elf, Elpizo, the Baby Elves, and Copy X... so I guess I can assume that appearances by them (or potential Biometals) can be expected.
I really liked the fact that you included both Vent and Aile as well as Ashe and Grey in the story. To be honest, I find the narrative to be lacking should any one of them be missing as each storyline has their own version to tell. I can't wait to see Ashe's reaction upon meeting Grey (and the fact that he doesn't know he's Albert's backup body given the fact that you said he just woke up). Some interactions between Model ZX's holders will be great to see too.
That does bring in the question as to what Grey will be capable of. Ashe is the designated Model A chosen one, and you seem to have made it so that two people can't use the same Biometal at once (Aile had Z while Vent had X). Will he be sharing A with Ashe or will he get an original Biometal?
That said and done, there is little for me to critique here. Your grammar, characterization, and word flow are damn near flawless, and I would find it hard pressed to find someone to write the whole scenario as well as you did. In cases like this I tend to try and provide food for thought instead, so here I go:
1. As I mentioned earlier, there is the question as to what Biometal Grey will receive access to. Will you have him share, or will he be given his own?
2. What will the roles of the four Cyber Elves released form Model O be? All four were devastatingly powerful and posed a threat to Zero and the world at their respective points in time... given X's influence on the games it would make sense to give them an important role in shaping events... assuming Thomas doesn't somehow make them into Biometals.
3. Will you be introducing new Pseudoroids? The Biometals are all in the hands of Thomas, so he is more than capable of doing so. Then again... I don't see the Chosen Ones as willing to hand over a piece of their Biometal to anyone.
4. Will Mikhail be acting as Mission Control for the heroes? That was role in Advent, but anything can change.
5. This one is a bit of an oddball but will any of the characters from the Classic series be appearing in any shape or form? Concept Art for Command Mission (which takes place after X8) shows both Rock and Cutman with modern redesigns. Given Rock's weapon copy ability (and note Robot Master status, giving him complete command over all non-hostile Mechaniloids) I wouldn't be surprised if there was an extra Biometal stashed away somewhere.
I don't know if this will be helpful to you but I do try to give constructive reviews. I really enjoy your work (I finished Fate: Zero Sanity in one sitting!) so I'm looking forward to this.
Anyway, Gung Hay Fat Choy (It's the first day of the Chinese New Year after all) and Happy Writing!
2/19/2015 c1 8ForteOfTheBallad98
Well, this is quite the story beginning. I've always liked Omega as a character, and I think he was drastically underused. Will he become his own character like Zero did in Return to Zero? It'd be a good way of exploring his character.
8ForteOfTheBallad98Well, this is quite the story beginning. I've always liked Omega as a character, and I think he was drastically underused. Will he become his own character like Zero did in Return to Zero? It'd be a good way of exploring his character.