for When it all Goes Wrong5/10 c1 ChloeBenjamin
Hello Shepherd1969!
I just finished reading your story on fanfiction and wow it really stuck with me. The way you built the characters and layered the emotions was seriously impressive. It got me thinking: this could make an amazing comic.
I’m Chloe Benjamin, a freelance illustrator who specializes in comics and character design. I’ve been doing this for a few years now and I absolutely love bringing stories like yours to life visually.
If you're ever open to the idea of adapting your story into a comic, I’d love to collaborate and see what we can create together. No pressure at all just thought I’d reach out because your work really inspired me.
You can check out some of my past projects on Instagram: chloe_benjamin999
And if you feel like chatting, I’m on Discord (chloe_benjamin999) or email (chloebenjamin999 ).
Hope to hear from you and either way, keep writing. You’ve got something special.
All the best,
Chloe
Hello Shepherd1969!
I just finished reading your story on fanfiction and wow it really stuck with me. The way you built the characters and layered the emotions was seriously impressive. It got me thinking: this could make an amazing comic.
I’m Chloe Benjamin, a freelance illustrator who specializes in comics and character design. I’ve been doing this for a few years now and I absolutely love bringing stories like yours to life visually.
If you're ever open to the idea of adapting your story into a comic, I’d love to collaborate and see what we can create together. No pressure at all just thought I’d reach out because your work really inspired me.
You can check out some of my past projects on Instagram: chloe_benjamin999
And if you feel like chatting, I’m on Discord (chloe_benjamin999) or email (chloebenjamin999 ).
Hope to hear from you and either way, keep writing. You’ve got something special.
All the best,
Chloe
5/8 c1 Natalie4q6
I stumbled upon Storio (storioai dot com) yesterday — really interesting. The AI writing assistant speeds up drafting significantly. Seems promising if you like tools like Reedsy or Twine.
I stumbled upon Storio (storioai dot com) yesterday — really interesting. The AI writing assistant speeds up drafting significantly. Seems promising if you like tools like Reedsy or Twine.
5/3 c38 Candylou
Everyone is going through something much. Even though joe was without oxygen thirty minutes. I hope a miracle happens and joe comes to with all his brain function. If not, there is going to be so many more people with guilt besides frank and Fenton. Update as soon as possible
Everyone is going through something much. Even though joe was without oxygen thirty minutes. I hope a miracle happens and joe comes to with all his brain function. If not, there is going to be so many more people with guilt besides frank and Fenton. Update as soon as possible
5/2 c38 caseykam
Hey! I assume you didn't intend to post your working notes, but frankly I loved seeing into your thought process! Yes, please let's bring in the teacher story! Joe's character would totally have skipped class. I can see him cutting too, unfortunately. I've always liked Liz, she has so much more personality than Callie. Fenton and Frank stuck in a bathroom? Strange, but in Fenton's case very appropriate. Great chapter, can't wait to see what you do next. :)
Hey! I assume you didn't intend to post your working notes, but frankly I loved seeing into your thought process! Yes, please let's bring in the teacher story! Joe's character would totally have skipped class. I can see him cutting too, unfortunately. I've always liked Liz, she has so much more personality than Callie. Fenton and Frank stuck in a bathroom? Strange, but in Fenton's case very appropriate. Great chapter, can't wait to see what you do next. :)
4/9 c37 Candylou
From the review I left earlier, I don't know why I didn't put candylou down instead of guest, but anyway, I know everything is going wrong for everybody but those there need to cherish will they still have left instead of what they lost. Maybe that would just help them a little bit. Update as soon as you can
From the review I left earlier, I don't know why I didn't put candylou down instead of guest, but anyway, I know everything is going wrong for everybody but those there need to cherish will they still have left instead of what they lost. Maybe that would just help them a little bit. Update as soon as you can
4/6 c37 Guest
That was not good. Frank's fear almost came true, but iola let joe know that he still had work to do. Frank is definitely going to blame himself for not being with joe. It seems everyone is going through something horrible, some much stress on everybody. Everybody seems to have so many burdens, but to me, it would be more important to communicate and be there for each other. Like Fenton for example, how is he going to feel if joe really did die. And FENTON WASN'T THERE WITH HIS SON because he was ignoring him, doing cases, because of Lola's death? Fenton would feel even more guilty because he wished he should have spent more time with joe. Especially since Fenton overheard joe saying he thought Fenton didn't care about him and thought Fenton thinks of him as a disappointment. Update as soon as possible.
That was not good. Frank's fear almost came true, but iola let joe know that he still had work to do. Frank is definitely going to blame himself for not being with joe. It seems everyone is going through something horrible, some much stress on everybody. Everybody seems to have so many burdens, but to me, it would be more important to communicate and be there for each other. Like Fenton for example, how is he going to feel if joe really did die. And FENTON WASN'T THERE WITH HIS SON because he was ignoring him, doing cases, because of Lola's death? Fenton would feel even more guilty because he wished he should have spent more time with joe. Especially since Fenton overheard joe saying he thought Fenton didn't care about him and thought Fenton thinks of him as a disappointment. Update as soon as possible.
82/2 c36 Barb
Gosh I don’t know how you do it! Each time my heart calms down, you have thought of another crisis and it starts pounding again. Your writing is so amazing. Yours is the only story that I always start from chapter 1 every time I open it. Thanks for screwing up your courage to post your story. Its so amazing. I wish I could do that. Thanks for letting me read it. Hope all the characters get some healing ️
Gosh I don’t know how you do it! Each time my heart calms down, you have thought of another crisis and it starts pounding again. Your writing is so amazing. Yours is the only story that I always start from chapter 1 every time I open it. Thanks for screwing up your courage to post your story. Its so amazing. I wish I could do that. Thanks for letting me read it. Hope all the characters get some healing ️
1/26 c36 Candylou
I feel so sorry for all of them I know Tony was just trying to deal with his emotions, but all joe was attempting to do was to help Tony. It seems that when everyone tries to deal when their emotions, joe gets hurt the most. Especially, when all joe wants to do is help no wonder, joe has such inner conflicts with himself. Then how will the others feel if something happens to joe. Tony is going to blame himself for his own actions. Frank will blame himself for not being there. Chet would hate himself for hating joe. Fenton will blame himself. They all need strong counseling now as it is. Update as soon as possible
I feel so sorry for all of them I know Tony was just trying to deal with his emotions, but all joe was attempting to do was to help Tony. It seems that when everyone tries to deal when their emotions, joe gets hurt the most. Especially, when all joe wants to do is help no wonder, joe has such inner conflicts with himself. Then how will the others feel if something happens to joe. Tony is going to blame himself for his own actions. Frank will blame himself for not being there. Chet would hate himself for hating joe. Fenton will blame himself. They all need strong counseling now as it is. Update as soon as possible
1/25 c36 caseykam
Poor Tony. Poor Frank. Sounds like they are trying to take care of everyone else and not themselves. Will Joe lose his memory in the explosion? Stay tuned to find out. :)
Poor Tony. Poor Frank. Sounds like they are trying to take care of everyone else and not themselves. Will Joe lose his memory in the explosion? Stay tuned to find out. :)
9/27/2024 c35 Candylou
It's not good joe losing his memory, but at least he got it back . Running into chet and hearing how chet felt really traumatized joe. Instead of Fenton ordering frank and joe like he did, maybe Fenton could have listened to what actually happened and kindly given them advise. I am confused about one thing, I thought frank and joe already worked for Fenton in Bayport where his office already is, by the earlier chapters. Update as soon as you can, and maybe hopefully, it will start getting better for everyone
Though the way it is going for everyone, I am not sure.
It's not good joe losing his memory, but at least he got it back . Running into chet and hearing how chet felt really traumatized joe. Instead of Fenton ordering frank and joe like he did, maybe Fenton could have listened to what actually happened and kindly given them advise. I am confused about one thing, I thought frank and joe already worked for Fenton in Bayport where his office already is, by the earlier chapters. Update as soon as you can, and maybe hopefully, it will start getting better for everyone
Though the way it is going for everyone, I am not sure.
9/27/2024 c35 caseykam
Oh, wow. I can't decide who I feel sorrier for. Poor Chet. Poor Tony. Frank trying to hold everyone together? So, Joe's lost his memory before? The plot thickens... Good chapter! :)
Oh, wow. I can't decide who I feel sorrier for. Poor Chet. Poor Tony. Frank trying to hold everyone together? So, Joe's lost his memory before? The plot thickens... Good chapter! :)
5/3/2024 c34 Candylou
Joe is really deteriorating, the others aren't doing well either. It seems Chet and his father hasn't dealt well with iola's death either. It seems like there are so many lost, that none of them will ever be happy again.. so sad how everyone has turned out. Instead of supporting each other, they just drove each other away. It's terrible how grief can affect people. Update when you can.
Joe is really deteriorating, the others aren't doing well either. It seems Chet and his father hasn't dealt well with iola's death either. It seems like there are so many lost, that none of them will ever be happy again.. so sad how everyone has turned out. Instead of supporting each other, they just drove each other away. It's terrible how grief can affect people. Update when you can.
5/4/2024 c34 caseykam
Oh, wow! What a chapter! So, Joe, Chet and Frank have some understanding to work on. It's a shame it took 8 years. Maybe the friendship can be salvaged. Does Joe have amnesia for real, or is it just a momentary thing? This story is just full of action. What fun!
Welcome back. :)
Oh, wow! What a chapter! So, Joe, Chet and Frank have some understanding to work on. It's a shame it took 8 years. Maybe the friendship can be salvaged. Does Joe have amnesia for real, or is it just a momentary thing? This story is just full of action. What fun!
Welcome back. :)
3/21/2024 c33 Barb
Wow! Your story is coming along fabulously! I enjoyed every chapter. I thank God for your gift of writing. Thanks for sharing. Hope you can post more soon.
Wow! Your story is coming along fabulously! I enjoyed every chapter. I thank God for your gift of writing. Thanks for sharing. Hope you can post more soon.