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9/1/2017 c13 ArcherShirou
very good.
9/1/2017 c13 4tf330129
Keep it up :)
8/31/2017 c13 3Reishin Amara
So,seen the new build fighters um...OVA I think...?they did much better than Island did.
8/31/2017 c13 25Z-King
I love the conversation Adam had with Uzumi, especial Adam telling him he is part of a secret organization. also I have a feeling Cagalli might have growing feelings for Adam and he would say, "Great I'm like Marty McFly now."
8/31/2017 c13 RoyalTwinFangs
Nice chapter. What are your thought on the Reversible Gundam?
8/18/2017 c1 Guest
Chapter 13 please!

Idol Please don't add harem stuff ok,
8/9/2017 c12 Guest
GUNDAM BUILD FIGHTERS : BATTLOGUE -Episode 1
7/23/2017 c12 Guest
Another advice and lesson

Always remember. Story should have one point of direction to create a decent good ending. but the effect of the batterfly maybe change outcome of the timeline, example of Rau Le Creuset in the final battle instead with Adam. Creuset may not pilot the ZGMF-X13A Providence Gundam instead his pilot the Psyco Gundam MK-III which mean shocking to Adam giving him a great straggle, because GP base data has been stolen,

For now it's just only example of the batterfly effect. Alway reminder the fate dying characters in the canon series, Adam may save them for there death but the fate of there destiny cannot be change, they alway die in another tragic way and to much batterfly effect become out of control.

This is me as your friend sign out.
7/13/2017 c11 HalcyonDays14
For chapter 12
Huh, this is my 2nd time reading through the story. Not sure how I missed it the first time, but Shinn? I mean... I can wholeheartedly agree with the other three names. Creuset was trying his damnedest to light the world on fire, Azrael pretty much convinced the Alliance to nuke civilians, and Yuna's... well, too many to list actually. Compare to those three, Shinn's name felt like it came from the left field, not sure what it was about the character that made Adam "despise" the kid. Yeah questionable judgement toward the end of Destiny aside, the guy was pretty much the universe's punching bag from start to finish. Felt like someone like Yzak would catch more hate before someone like Shinn because of that whole, you know, intentionally shooting down civilian aircraft and all that.
6/26/2017 c12 Guest
Just don't insert so many OC to your future sequel it's will be ok,
I'm not forcing you if really you want to insert 15 oc to your eyes in seed reborn well goodluck my friend, just think careful ok and sorry for confuse you,
6/25/2017 c12 Guest
About the newtype stuffs, forget it I'm joke,

Keep mind my other review it's will hep you to improve

Good luck
6/25/2017 c12 Guest
One last word

Make Adam Winslow became a newtype not a innovade.

Don't ask me why
6/25/2017 c12 Guest
Another lesson and advice with explaintion.

This may lesson and Advice

1. Why you should not create a .five and finally six messy of crossover, you know why? It's because it's will lose interest of character development and then it's will cuase of confuse to the readers who read your story, and Gundam build fighter/Gundam seed should only you focus to your story. One Of the example of messy crossover is showa x vampire by kamen rider chrome. The story is good but not really as good when his create so many crossover it's lost the direction of the story. The worst his crossover hitman reborn with no sense of humor. Until it's became so messy until story has no end. The result fail,

2. Don't insert so many OCs from gundam build to gundam seed destiny, that why said before you should re-think first with the right timing, one of preview review, when you said the 15 character thrown the to Gundam seed destiny universe his scared and me too, because it's will be so crackly epic messy it's like you create a third crossover. Remember if you want really insert the OC chracter to your future sequel only 2 or 3, not so many but if you really whant to insert them I'm not forcing you, just take learn from the mistake previous authors, they try insert so many oc nothing them is succeful,

The only so best crossover so far is Gundam Seed: Fallen Angel by tgobg, it's has a emotion and feeling,

Bye freind
6/24/2017 c12 Guest
I see the list of the characters of your sequel, The multiple oc you will thrown in your future sequel will be cracky and Please re-think again with little bit planning, your thrown a 15 OC that's not really good. What I said again to my previous review 9. Thou shalt not extend a crackfic into a crack-epic, if really want insert your 15 original character/oc into the world of war endless sadness. only advice could I said to you should separate your ocs into different story arcs, but alway be careful and take lesson what happen of gundam-knight-Chris so many OCs can lost one point deriction,

To make a good ending of a good fanfic. The ending should create a one point of direction and that's drama/friendship/tragic/betrayed, to create a good ending is create a good moral lesson. That war is not a game,
Well I will not forcing you if you don't like my advice and review, It's just how I expressing my feeling to your story, I'm just only concern to you.

God bless you and Good luck.
6/26/2017 c12 HalcyonDays14
It's been a while since I last looked into this particular section of , but I'm glad I did.

You did a great job in executing this story. While I think it's unavoidable to have a bit of fantasy/magic involved when you're writing a crossover, your approach in inserting Adam into the SEED universe was well thought out and unique, at least to my knowledge. A lot of crossovers, and it's not limited to the ones on SEED, boiled down to: explosion happened and now MC is in another universe." I just can't help but think of that as a rather lazy approach to begin a crossover.

I also love how you didn't make Adam just outright announce how he's from a different 'universe'. You just don't say something like that if you want people to take you seriously, but for some reason that's how people have their characters explain their appearance right from the start. Not to mention the usual response are always something along the lines of "Okay, sounds legit." No, just no... The way you made the characters in SEED to actually rationalize and form their own theories of Adam and the Eye's origin is one of the highlights of this story IMO.

So with Adam's state upon his return in the first chapter, I assume the Eyes was shot down or disabled at the end of SEED? I think it would be cool for him to go back piloting the Reborns Gundam if that's the case.
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