for Pokemon: Ash Ketchum's Rise to Excellence10/27/2018 c2 Guest
Greta chapter! It was awesome
Greta chapter! It was awesome
11/19/2015 c2 Roshan
Are you planning on updating anytime soon shithead?
Are you planning on updating anytime soon shithead?
8/31/2015 c2 AlphaMewtwo
Reconsider Mewtwo? C'mon, Ash taught Mewtwo not every human is evil in The First Movie, and yet he befriends another Mewtwo in Unova...
Reconsider Mewtwo? C'mon, Ash taught Mewtwo not every human is evil in The First Movie, and yet he befriends another Mewtwo in Unova...
8/26/2015 c2 Guest
Good but will he have a harem?
Good but will he have a harem?
8/17/2015 c2 StarGazer2326
Mew is overdone but what about articuno since ash doesn't get an ice type until hoenn. And Darkrai since Ash doesn't get a dark type until Unova. And have leaf catch shaymin.
Mew is overdone but what about articuno since ash doesn't get an ice type until hoenn. And Darkrai since Ash doesn't get a dark type until Unova. And have leaf catch shaymin.
7/1/2015 c2 
7Myra the Dovahkiin
great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.
7Myra the Dovahkiingreat story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.
5/25/2015 c2 BlessKM
Step one of creating a successful main cast: don't make them/him/her OP or exceedingly weak. If they are, which must be moderated extremely, there must also be some sort of counterpoint. The counterpoint must then be used as a plot device for character development and bonding. Also, characters with extremes that become a part of the main cast should be introduced later in the story.
It is rather unfortunate that so few authors on this site follow this rule and this story is no exception. Also, I see a lot of unnecessary bolding of words. It makes the writing as a whole look choppy and weird.
Step one of creating a successful main cast: don't make them/him/her OP or exceedingly weak. If they are, which must be moderated extremely, there must also be some sort of counterpoint. The counterpoint must then be used as a plot device for character development and bonding. Also, characters with extremes that become a part of the main cast should be introduced later in the story.
It is rather unfortunate that so few authors on this site follow this rule and this story is no exception. Also, I see a lot of unnecessary bolding of words. It makes the writing as a whole look choppy and weird.
5/25/2015 c2 seeldewgong
Be proud, you're doing better than me so far. I'm not complaining though. Anyone who can honestly say they are an othelloshipper will eventually read it.
Glad to hear that SCR is still being worked on.
Decent chapter, although I felt it was a tad rushed. Maybe it's just me though. I hope that the gyms don't come too easy for them. They need to learn and grow, no matter what age they are.
Be proud, you're doing better than me so far. I'm not complaining though. Anyone who can honestly say they are an othelloshipper will eventually read it.
Glad to hear that SCR is still being worked on.
Decent chapter, although I felt it was a tad rushed. Maybe it's just me though. I hope that the gyms don't come too easy for them. They need to learn and grow, no matter what age they are.
5/24/2015 c1 Guest
mew for ash
mew for ash