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2/10/2018 c1 Fast Frank
Reversing fanon, yay!
2/11/2017 c3 3Mmars69
Please don't let this be the end of this story.
Thanks for posting here. In spite of the problems, I like this site.
12/2/2016 c3 109sasha
I love this story I have to say I am bias regarding the mention of pairings as I have my favorites i.e. Daniel and oc and from Atlantis John and oc. Either way please update this is so different u can't just abandon it.
11/20/2016 c3 Guest
Correction: Hannah
11/20/2016 c2 Guest
Correction: ponce
11/20/2016 c2 Guest
Correction: colleagues
11/20/2016 c1 Guest
Correction: SYMBIOTE, not symbiont
8/10/2016 c3 Guest
More please :) I love the way you have in corporates the crossover.
2/16/2016 c3 1ZIrvs
Is there anyway that Hermione could be together with Cassandra, Dr Fraiser's daughter? I think it would allow for another arc in the story; they meet, Cas hates Herm because of symbiot, they overcome, fall in love, etc.

Love the story though, and regardless of what you do with it it is an awesome idea you have here.
9/17/2015 c2 Guest
Excuse me but you're wrong. I take self defense courses and you DO develop reflexes in the classes. In fact, some classes are dedicated to forcing you to develop said reflexes because if you cannot react to an attacker's attack, then self defense is useless. Self defense is not about just punches and kicks as you assume; it's about developing the reflex on *when* to use the punch and kick. It's about developing the reflexes necessary to counter an attack.

So yes, if Hermione took self defense courses, her first instinct would be to punch or kick someone who snuck up behind her.

Added to that I know several people in the military who have had an experience where someone, usually a friend or relative, sneaks up on them, not always on purpose, and startles them, and their self-defense reflexes kick in and they knock the other person out.

So, you are wrong. If you don't develop reflexes from self defense classes, either you are doing it wrong, you are a bad student, the teacher is teaching wrong or the teacher doesn't actually know true self defense.

Sorry for the rant but I had to say it.
9/15/2015 c3 2Lightspire
I like the idea, and the direction the story is going. I can't help but think it might have have been easier/more logical to have hermione joined after the war, but that's just me. Overall, I think your storytelling could improve with a better sense of pacing. You Tell the reader what happens a lot, and don't Show them as its happening. It's gotten better in the last two chapters, and I can understand the want to rush to get to parts you want to, but the entire series of Harry Potter was written over nearly a decade of time. I would like to spend a bit more time reading interactions and such. And starting from 1991 to go into 2000? That is A LOT of area to cover. I would suggest either skipping to the part you want to get to, and filling in the blanks as they come, or slowing down the story telling a bit. Otherwise, I really enjoy it. I have no opinion on shipping. It really depends on how it's written for me to get behind a relationship.
8/15/2015 c2 Rydan fall
Ball or boll lightning.
Basically open air cold fusion.
So the correct use of things like force fields, could let her run a open air fusion reactor.
Which means she can reduce the amount of materials she needs.

As for the outpost, she only needs enough power for a hour or so.
Just enough time to do a little digging, like getting of the closest outpost/base, with a active ZPM in it.
Copying a couple of blueprints like Destiny level FTL, shields and energy gathering systems.

She currently has the basics needed for some heavy duty construction, especially if she finds Isis/Osiris their temple/shuttle.
A energy to matter constructor, even if it can not make anything bigger then two wine barrels stacked on top of each other, is still a game changer.
With it she could build both other types of construction devices, like a force field based forge, bigger constructor ring parts, nano-constructors and so on.

The bigger they become, the more she can build, faster then before.
Meaning that at first she has to put her hovercar together by hand, later she could skip this stap without problems.
What this means is that after a while, she can have drone hover cranes to lift things into place, after which drone hover welders will fix things in place.

The armor from Bubblegum Crisis their Night Sabers and Iron Man its Iron Man suit, are good candidates in terms of functionality.
Iron Man its repulsors do look like Guaold hand devices, in terms of working as a weapon.
The Knight Sabers armor is easy to get on (and control).
So a combination could be the way to go, if needed.
Would certainly let her pull off space construction and space mining, thus circus venting the restriction of Earth bound projects.
No risk of frame collapse and more rare metals to be easily gotten, so bigger stuff could be put together faster, even if you need to travel between the asteroid cloud and Earth.
No problems with hiding said construction stuff either.
Still needs a spacesuit, though.

Too bad that she does not have a hobby that could explain her rare earth and large metal needs.
It would make things so much easier for her.
Like International Rescue (Thunderbirds), both the movie and the Thunderbirds Are Go 2015 serie, they have some nice ideas.
I especially like the last one its Thunderbird 3 version.
But that would mean a Hermione on a crusade with lots of friends helping her, just to pull it off.
Though the Twins might be interested, its just up their alley.
Not that I think this story will come anywhere close to this, in order to even think of pulling off (though the faces of the SGC might be fun to see, like with that X-301 test flight).

I do get why you think she can never mean anything in the large scale.
Just consider what you mean with that, I mean, a small starship, a capital ship like the Destiny, a Cityship or a whole fleet or even a complete star nation.
Depending on the way you go with her construction methods and what she can find or steal/borrow, certain things could be quite possible.
That outpost were SG-1 got the ZPM to power Earth its outpost, if a drone drivetrain could be mounted to that outpost, it could be brought to a saver location, for one.
And that would let her build her own spacestation or even starship, with as core section, a Alteran outpost.
But there is also that Stargate near the Earth outpost, which also gives some options.

Star Trek uses diamond tech in most of their electronic calculating systems, from computer-cores to warp-cores.
Macross/Robotech uses gravity tech in most things, from submersible carriers (gravity-ballast-generators instead of ballast-tanks) to fusion reactor and Yamato main guns that simulate solar flares.
Aoki Hagana no Arpeggio or Arpeggio of Blue Steel uses nanomachines as building blocks of the ships, around a central computer core unit.
Other sci-fi series offer similar options of development focusses and that could be a good thing.
But if and how it would or could be used...
Well, that's up to you, I guess.
Just remember, cloaks, hidden bases or letting things look like Sci-fi props are perfect covers to hide all that alien tech in plain sight, handy if you have some noisy guys over from the states.
Who would expect that Star Trek phaser rifle to really work?
Would you?
So think it over.
8/9/2015 c3 Rydan fall
Interesting.

Might I suggest she looks into creating somekinda power armor like the Knight Sabers from Bubblegum Crisis are using?
Because she will need a spacesuit for asteriod mining.
As for getting enough materials, there is still Osiris his shuttle and even a Gua'old weapons catch to be found.
At to this the Antartica Stargate and...
Hell, if she can up her computer processing power, she could adapt one of those salvaged rings into a Trek replicator.
And the guy she got it from?
I bet he had a cloaked Tel'tak (or bigger) in orbit or so, why else would he have those rings around?
So check it, the more she has, the sooner she can make her own version, if she can figure out a way to create a automated production yard.
As for why?
If she could get enough stuff together, then she might even be able to salvage a certain outpost intact.
Which would be quite a game changer for her.
And she already has crystal-tech and force fields, which are enough to both make a solid state light processing neural netwerk diamond computer system.
Meaning she could also use this force field based casting system for things like stone or metal casting, instead of conducting & non-conducting diamond.
Then ad in feather light spells and the like, used to move heavy items during contruction and less need for aditional gravity generators, so youcan use them to keep the product being casted, hovering in mid-air.
Who needs a nano-constructor anyway?
Thats good for a self repair system, not a construction system.
I can see her liking Sci-fi in order to get new ideas to pull things off, like the Delta Flyer from Star Trek Voyager.
If found on the ground, you can write it off as being a Trekkie of the kind that wants to own 1:1 scale models.
If she can get more small craft, then I can see her adding a hanger bay to the Antartica outpost
There are so many options, including combinning a gyroscope with a portkey and thus creating a fold-drive like out of nBSG.

So I am now following this, just to see were you take us.
8/6/2015 c3 5Tok'ra-Agent-632
Really love this story so far. If you are looking for shipping suggestions, I suggest your pair off Hermione/Egeria with Daniel Jackson. Her knowledge of Ancient Egypt from a personal view would certainly be a plus for Daniel. Plus there's the fact that two people of Daniel's love life were taken as hosts plus a Tok'ra (just the snake) had a crush on him.

Perhaps the Magical World might have been the result of a Goa'uld experiment meant to create the perfect host. However the overthrow of Ra ended the experiment prematurely. The Goa'uld working on the project killed all the subjects or so he or she thought. Or maybe the experiment was conducted without the approval of the System Lords and they attempted to kill all the subjects themselves. Then again the Ancients might've had something to do with it considering the use of Latin phrases in casting spells.
7/5/2015 c3 DangerGirl123
Interesting story, not many with Hermione as the main character for this crossover and I'm loving it can't wait for more.
I would love for a Hermione/Sam pairing. (Any idea on the pairing? Please NOT Harry) Love that you sorted Hermione in the house of Hufflepuff because this give her the oppoytunity of making friends with people of the other houses without the animosity and I like the group of friends she has befriended. (Would she have friends in the Slytheryn house?) And I think Harry should be a background character;secondary at best to Hermione she should be the the focus of this story.(Other Hermione stories begin with her the main character but as the story evolves she fades into the background and Harry becomes the main character)

Are you gonna continue updating this story? UPDATE ASAP.
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