for The Tok'ra Queen4/6/2015 c1 Guest
A good beginning for what could be a good story.
The good: plot and storyline are unique and original. The writing is good.
The bad: a massive wall of text with bad grammar, missing words, and misspellings as well as typos. I suggest a beta. A beta would improve this story a whole lot.
That being said, the plot and storyline are good. Just improve the grammar, missing words, and fix the typos and misspellings and this story will be great.
A good beginning for what could be a good story.
The good: plot and storyline are unique and original. The writing is good.
The bad: a massive wall of text with bad grammar, missing words, and misspellings as well as typos. I suggest a beta. A beta would improve this story a whole lot.
That being said, the plot and storyline are good. Just improve the grammar, missing words, and fix the typos and misspellings and this story will be great.
4/6/2015 c3 sim
Hint: did you consider crossfic with "Last Ancient" ? It could be more than interesting. (Ancient Harry, Tok'ra Hermione and he suspects nothing.)
Hint: did you consider crossfic with "Last Ancient" ? It could be more than interesting. (Ancient Harry, Tok'ra Hermione and he suspects nothing.)
4/5/2015 c3 Guest
very good,
very good,
4/5/2015 c1 Mr guy
This is good but you need a beta
This is good but you need a beta
4/5/2015 c2 Axeguest
great story i hope harry ends up as her partner/friend/maybe more
great story i hope harry ends up as her partner/friend/maybe more
4/5/2015 c3 
3Terrence Rogue
This is a wonderfully unique story and I love it so far. Can't wait to see what you have planned!
3Terrence RogueThis is a wonderfully unique story and I love it so far. Can't wait to see what you have planned!
4/5/2015 c3 1angel897
liked It most enjoyable chapter to read. love how Sprout didn't back down from Snape at all. will be here looking forward to reading what happens next.
1angel897liked It most enjoyable chapter to read. love how Sprout didn't back down from Snape at all. will be here looking forward to reading what happens next.
4/5/2015 c3 BlackWolfLord
This chapter was mostly a massive wall of text that made it hard to read and also contained a few spelling mistakes from what I could see.
Well, she will be here for a few,/ Well, she will be here for a few (years)
Block the probe into her mind she also was quite sure/ she (was also) quite sure
He actually deducted point from her/ he actually deducted point(s) from her
Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I chancel/ Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I cancel
Does actually hinder me to learn/ Does actually hinder my learning of the subject
I also don't appreciate to be insulted/ I also don't appreciate being insulted
This chapter was mostly a massive wall of text that made it hard to read and also contained a few spelling mistakes from what I could see.
Well, she will be here for a few,/ Well, she will be here for a few (years)
Block the probe into her mind she also was quite sure/ she (was also) quite sure
He actually deducted point from her/ he actually deducted point(s) from her
Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I chancel/ Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I cancel
Does actually hinder me to learn/ Does actually hinder my learning of the subject
I also don't appreciate to be insulted/ I also don't appreciate being insulted
3/31/2015 c2 Kimojuno
I would love for this to be Hufflepuff Harry/Hermione, with Harry becoming Tok'ra as well.
I would love for this to be Hufflepuff Harry/Hermione, with Harry becoming Tok'ra as well.
4/1/2015 c2 11SNolon
Story is excellent so far. Any plans for pairings? I would be quite interested in a Harry/Hermione pairing. :)
11SNolonStory is excellent so far. Any plans for pairings? I would be quite interested in a Harry/Hermione pairing. :)
3/29/2015 c2 Guest
Very good read can't wait for the update would like to see egerias view on a few more things maybe even have her feared by snape would be funny
Very good read can't wait for the update would like to see egerias view on a few more things maybe even have her feared by snape would be funny
3/28/2015 c2 Babycutiepie
Awesome! Hurry and write the next chapters! I want to see what happens next and how Professor Snape takes to teaching her. Update soon
Awesome! Hurry and write the next chapters! I want to see what happens next and how Professor Snape takes to teaching her. Update soon