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4/6/2015 c1 Guest
A good beginning for what could be a good story.
The good: plot and storyline are unique and original. The writing is good.
The bad: a massive wall of text with bad grammar, missing words, and misspellings as well as typos. I suggest a beta. A beta would improve this story a whole lot.

That being said, the plot and storyline are good. Just improve the grammar, missing words, and fix the typos and misspellings and this story will be great.
4/6/2015 c3 sim
Hint: did you consider crossfic with "Last Ancient" ? It could be more than interesting. (Ancient Harry, Tok'ra Hermione and he suspects nothing.)
4/5/2015 c3 Guest
very good,
4/5/2015 c1 Mr guy
This is good but you need a beta
4/5/2015 c2 Axeguest
great story i hope harry ends up as her partner/friend/maybe more
4/5/2015 c3 3Terrence Rogue
This is a wonderfully unique story and I love it so far. Can't wait to see what you have planned!
4/5/2015 c3 Telron
interesting and good so far
4/5/2015 c3 fraewyn
Can't wait for more!
4/5/2015 c3 1angel897
liked It most enjoyable chapter to read. love how Sprout didn't back down from Snape at all. will be here looking forward to reading what happens next.
4/5/2015 c3 BlackWolfLord
This chapter was mostly a massive wall of text that made it hard to read and also contained a few spelling mistakes from what I could see.

Well, she will be here for a few,/ Well, she will be here for a few (years)

Block the probe into her mind she also was quite sure/ she (was also) quite sure

He actually deducted point from her/ he actually deducted point(s) from her

Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I chancel/ Professor Sprout as per my agreement, I cancel

Does actually hinder me to learn/ Does actually hinder my learning of the subject

I also don't appreciate to be insulted/ I also don't appreciate being insulted
3/31/2015 c2 Kimojuno
I would love for this to be Hufflepuff Harry/Hermione, with Harry becoming Tok'ra as well.
4/1/2015 c2 11SNolon
Story is excellent so far. Any plans for pairings? I would be quite interested in a Harry/Hermione pairing. :)
3/29/2015 c2 Guest
Very good read can't wait for the update would like to see egerias view on a few more things maybe even have her feared by snape would be funny
3/28/2015 c2 Babycutiepie
Awesome! Hurry and write the next chapters! I want to see what happens next and how Professor Snape takes to teaching her. Update soon
3/27/2015 c2 5Tahari
Your story has an interesting premise but the many spelling errors greatly detract from the flow. I would strongly suggest finding a beta reader.
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