for Yu-Gi-Oh ARC-V The Light Of Hope9/15/2015 c2 
70OPFan37
Hey! It's good to see you active again!
Again, I really enjoyed this chapter, it had a lot of nice moments and the Duels were well thought out, plus I continue to like Siora as a character, and I look forward to what kind of development you give him later down the line.
Also, thank you darksawr and Durbe the Barian for helping him out, your both awesome!
Well done again, Siora Kazuki! I look forward to reading the next chapter!
70OPFan37Hey! It's good to see you active again!
Again, I really enjoyed this chapter, it had a lot of nice moments and the Duels were well thought out, plus I continue to like Siora as a character, and I look forward to what kind of development you give him later down the line.
Also, thank you darksawr and Durbe the Barian for helping him out, your both awesome!
Well done again, Siora Kazuki! I look forward to reading the next chapter!
9/13/2015 c2 Grimraven.V
What hoping to the oc x Masumi parting that's y oi foolwed and fav this story to the ad one
What hoping to the oc x Masumi parting that's y oi foolwed and fav this story to the ad one
5/18/2015 c1 70OPFan37
Well done on your first chapter! It was a pleasure to read and work on, and its great to see it finally up!
I'm glad it turned out well, though I must apologise myself because I did spot some spelling mistakes, and thats my fault, but the story, or at least the beginning of it, has been successfully built up.
I am definitely looking forward to reading more chapters in the future!
70OPFan37Well done on your first chapter! It was a pleasure to read and work on, and its great to see it finally up!
I'm glad it turned out well, though I must apologise myself because I did spot some spelling mistakes, and thats my fault, but the story, or at least the beginning of it, has been successfully built up.
I am definitely looking forward to reading more chapters in the future!
4/5/2015 c1 1Forestfleet
Alright, let me list things off as I go down:
It's usually sueish if you have your OC be a family member of another character, especially if it's impossible in the show.
Next up: You say that this will follow the plot except with MINOR changes. That's the major problem I see here. Usually, if people want to see the plot of Arc-V they're more inclined to watch the anime as opposed to read a fanfic with minor changes. You still make changes, yes, but if they're minor, well... why read your version?
I don't really mind who he has a crush on.
I like the idea that he's a teacher AND a main character. That's rarely done in a YGO fanfic. Heck, that's rarely done in most fiction. I really love teaching and related things so I do hope you go in depth with that. That could even justify reading your version to some.
The Deck doesn't actually say too much about his Deck. It's just the Deck name.
The major goal would usually bother me since that's stealing from Yuya's goal, but I would imagine Yuya's father told both of them to spread smiles with dueling, so I guess it actually does make sense.
The personality, however, I think is too short. That could describe a lot of people. I can be cheerful, but I'd get angry if my family is threatened. Same with, well, most people I know.
Note: Adopted family territory usually doesn't end well. Here's hoping you can actually do it in a tasteful manner.
1ForestfleetAlright, let me list things off as I go down:
It's usually sueish if you have your OC be a family member of another character, especially if it's impossible in the show.
Next up: You say that this will follow the plot except with MINOR changes. That's the major problem I see here. Usually, if people want to see the plot of Arc-V they're more inclined to watch the anime as opposed to read a fanfic with minor changes. You still make changes, yes, but if they're minor, well... why read your version?
I don't really mind who he has a crush on.
I like the idea that he's a teacher AND a main character. That's rarely done in a YGO fanfic. Heck, that's rarely done in most fiction. I really love teaching and related things so I do hope you go in depth with that. That could even justify reading your version to some.
The Deck doesn't actually say too much about his Deck. It's just the Deck name.
The major goal would usually bother me since that's stealing from Yuya's goal, but I would imagine Yuya's father told both of them to spread smiles with dueling, so I guess it actually does make sense.
The personality, however, I think is too short. That could describe a lot of people. I can be cheerful, but I'd get angry if my family is threatened. Same with, well, most people I know.
Note: Adopted family territory usually doesn't end well. Here's hoping you can actually do it in a tasteful manner.