for Harry Evans Book 16/23/2015 c11 the Khajiit Ra'Koor
this story is certanly one you can be proud of. i really enjoy reading this story and i cannot wait for another update.
and if the first 11 chapters are anything to go by, if the other chapters are even half as good this story will be a masterpiece.
this story is certanly one you can be proud of. i really enjoy reading this story and i cannot wait for another update.
and if the first 11 chapters are anything to go by, if the other chapters are even half as good this story will be a masterpiece.
6/23/2015 c11 
16Admiral Red
I love this story. I have a harry potter story that will have military involved. I plan on writing NCIS and transformers into, but those would be the later chapters.
16Admiral RedI love this story. I have a harry potter story that will have military involved. I plan on writing NCIS and transformers into, but those would be the later chapters.
6/23/2015 c11 magitech
Good chapter
I like how you had Harry regard himself as an American, that is far better and more realistic than him thinking he is British.
Perhaps the best way to deal with Dumbles is to go public and make it known Harry has refused his Hogwarts "Invitation" and stress it is an invitation, not a demand. Hogwarts isn't supposed to be a prison, though it seemed that way in canon at times.
Also as Harry is an American citizen Matt should hammer it through Dumbles egotistical skull that any forceful moves on his to get Harry to Hogwarts is kidnapping of a US citizen and will be dealt with as such.
Good chapter
I like how you had Harry regard himself as an American, that is far better and more realistic than him thinking he is British.
Perhaps the best way to deal with Dumbles is to go public and make it known Harry has refused his Hogwarts "Invitation" and stress it is an invitation, not a demand. Hogwarts isn't supposed to be a prison, though it seemed that way in canon at times.
Also as Harry is an American citizen Matt should hammer it through Dumbles egotistical skull that any forceful moves on his to get Harry to Hogwarts is kidnapping of a US citizen and will be dealt with as such.
6/15/2015 c10 adenoide
It's interestiong to read.
It's interestiong to read.
6/6/2015 c9 1serenityselena
oh my... hopefully thing will be ok for Matt...
looking forward to reading more :)
1serenityselenaoh my... hopefully thing will be ok for Matt...
looking forward to reading more :)
6/6/2015 c9 3ObsessedWithHPFanFic
I think your chapters are getting shorter with each one. Do you really think that a father would go off to war without saying goodbye to his son? Thanks for sharing!
3ObsessedWithHPFanFicI think your chapters are getting shorter with each one. Do you really think that a father would go off to war without saying goodbye to his son? Thanks for sharing!
6/6/2015 c1 1marthapreston4
I get the seperated thing but not the no talking to each other for 15 years my siblings and I were split up and we talk every week. Some of us had to wait till we were legal adults but then nothing could stop us
1marthapreston4I get the seperated thing but not the no talking to each other for 15 years my siblings and I were split up and we talk every week. Some of us had to wait till we were legal adults but then nothing could stop us
6/6/2015 c9 alice22
New reader, poor Jane ad HArry. I hope his father will be alright. I hope she was given guardianship in case something happens to him!
New reader, poor Jane ad HArry. I hope his father will be alright. I hope she was given guardianship in case something happens to him!
6/6/2015 c9 1WriternotAuthor
Awesome idea. Your grammar could use some work, but I'm a grammar Nazi, so I think that about almost every story I read. :D Seriously, though, the text is kind of hard to read because some of the sentences are separated by commas instead of periods. Try reading the chapter out loud before you post; that helps me.
All in all, this is pretty good, and I'm following it.
1WriternotAuthorAwesome idea. Your grammar could use some work, but I'm a grammar Nazi, so I think that about almost every story I read. :D Seriously, though, the text is kind of hard to read because some of the sentences are separated by commas instead of periods. Try reading the chapter out loud before you post; that helps me.
All in all, this is pretty good, and I'm following it.