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4/5/2015 c1 Thundercade
Great first chapter, i'm excited about where this story is going. I hope it is Percy/Zoe. Looking forward to the next update :-)
Great first chapter, i'm excited about where this story is going. I hope it is Percy/Zoe. Looking forward to the next update :-)
4/3/2015 c1 Domolikescookies
This is awesome :D! I have been searching for a story like this for ages and here it is! I luv it :3.
This is awesome :D! I have been searching for a story like this for ages and here it is! I luv it :3.
4/3/2015 c1 dan
Hey great story publish more chapters like this
Hey great story publish more chapters like this
4/3/2015 c1 Me
great chapter write more
great chapter write more
4/3/2015 c1 
5CrowKrowQrow
Interesting story, but just one small thing, if Percy lived in the wild he shouldn't know titles like Lord or Lady since even if he had a vague memory of that from when he was with his mother that is not the a thing most four year olds learn much less know when to use it, he also shouldn't know forms of showing obedience and respect such as bowing as he had no human contact and someone who lived in the wild and surrounded by animals shouldn't show his throat to a stranger so easily on the words of other strangers even if it feels like he is trustworthy, throats are pretty protected by animals. Also while not that much I think the wolf part would have been better if there was a show of strength as well, not just a battle of wills, as the alpha should be the stronger, so it would make the scene better in my opinion and well, while writing the hunters trusting him would be hard I think you made it way too easy, while I understand they accepting him by Artemis order they should still avoid him even if from habit or fear from whatever made them join the hunters.
I like the small detail that you put there, that as he was orphaned at four Percy wouldn't know how to write english very well even if the memory came to him, but as a demigod he is programmed to know greek so he should be able to write in, also that Apollo saw his future before being attached to the child, it would make sense as seeing his future he is in a way spending time with Percy so he could unknowingly start to feel connected to the kid, small details make stories much better as they show concern and those was a good one (don't know if you did thinking about this but well).
Sorry if I sound annoying but I only hope to give constructive criticism.
5CrowKrowQrowInteresting story, but just one small thing, if Percy lived in the wild he shouldn't know titles like Lord or Lady since even if he had a vague memory of that from when he was with his mother that is not the a thing most four year olds learn much less know when to use it, he also shouldn't know forms of showing obedience and respect such as bowing as he had no human contact and someone who lived in the wild and surrounded by animals shouldn't show his throat to a stranger so easily on the words of other strangers even if it feels like he is trustworthy, throats are pretty protected by animals. Also while not that much I think the wolf part would have been better if there was a show of strength as well, not just a battle of wills, as the alpha should be the stronger, so it would make the scene better in my opinion and well, while writing the hunters trusting him would be hard I think you made it way too easy, while I understand they accepting him by Artemis order they should still avoid him even if from habit or fear from whatever made them join the hunters.
I like the small detail that you put there, that as he was orphaned at four Percy wouldn't know how to write english very well even if the memory came to him, but as a demigod he is programmed to know greek so he should be able to write in, also that Apollo saw his future before being attached to the child, it would make sense as seeing his future he is in a way spending time with Percy so he could unknowingly start to feel connected to the kid, small details make stories much better as they show concern and those was a good one (don't know if you did thinking about this but well).
Sorry if I sound annoying but I only hope to give constructive criticism.
4/2/2015 c1 5oOSupergirlOo
Could you maybe do the pairing Percy and Zoë? And could you have Percy and Phoebe being really good friends?
5oOSupergirlOoCould you maybe do the pairing Percy and Zoë? And could you have Percy and Phoebe being really good friends?