for I Still Haven't Found What I'm Looking For3/27/2022 c16 
1PrateWhiffler
I hope you're doing well.
This story is ticklingly adorable while concrete. I applaud the progression of storytelling ability I've noticed throughout. I was ready to give up, several times in earlier chapters, but each chapter was better than the previous, so I stuck with it.
Please don't take that as a hill to climb. An exploration and conclusion is preferable to an implosion of self doubt; you don't need to make each entry better than the one before. I've had my reservations, and still do, but you tell the tale well and I'd love to see the conclusion.
In other words: no pressure, you've got this. Roll with it. There's a lot worse you can do, and as a matter of taste, a lot more you can get away with.
Happy writing and best of luck. 3
1PrateWhifflerI hope you're doing well.
This story is ticklingly adorable while concrete. I applaud the progression of storytelling ability I've noticed throughout. I was ready to give up, several times in earlier chapters, but each chapter was better than the previous, so I stuck with it.
Please don't take that as a hill to climb. An exploration and conclusion is preferable to an implosion of self doubt; you don't need to make each entry better than the one before. I've had my reservations, and still do, but you tell the tale well and I'd love to see the conclusion.
In other words: no pressure, you've got this. Roll with it. There's a lot worse you can do, and as a matter of taste, a lot more you can get away with.
Happy writing and best of luck. 3
3/26/2022 c7 Yog-sothsoth
I really don't like it. I hope, if there are a pairing it will be only one woman. Oh, how I despise harems...
I really don't like it. I hope, if there are a pairing it will be only one woman. Oh, how I despise harems...
3/14/2022 c16 Richolse
This story was amazing, I truly hope you get a chance to return to it one day.
This story was amazing, I truly hope you get a chance to return to it one day.
3/11/2022 c16 Alana The Kitty
Hi hi! I just wanted to say that this story is still amazing even with after the... I think this is the 10th re-reading of this story that i've done? Maybe a few more? I've definitely lost count. I greatly enjoy the characterizations of *all* the characters, but I *especially* like the characterizations of Harry, Ahsoka Tano and Aayla Secura.
Your grasp on the feelings of the scenes, the motivations and thought processes of each character feel incredibly realistic but not bogged down with clunky sounding narrative. Though there is still plenty of narrative to be had to give you a full feeling of where they are and where they are standing and how they are talking.
I'll stop there before I start giving an entire essay's worth of my enjoyment of this fic 'cause sadly I do not have the attention span to keep writing it all out (Though as an aside, this story keeps my wandering attention locked onto it, take that as you will w )
This is a great story and I'm so very happy that you wrote it in the first place. Thank you for writing it. 3
Hi hi! I just wanted to say that this story is still amazing even with after the... I think this is the 10th re-reading of this story that i've done? Maybe a few more? I've definitely lost count. I greatly enjoy the characterizations of *all* the characters, but I *especially* like the characterizations of Harry, Ahsoka Tano and Aayla Secura.
Your grasp on the feelings of the scenes, the motivations and thought processes of each character feel incredibly realistic but not bogged down with clunky sounding narrative. Though there is still plenty of narrative to be had to give you a full feeling of where they are and where they are standing and how they are talking.
I'll stop there before I start giving an entire essay's worth of my enjoyment of this fic 'cause sadly I do not have the attention span to keep writing it all out (Though as an aside, this story keeps my wandering attention locked onto it, take that as you will w )
This is a great story and I'm so very happy that you wrote it in the first place. Thank you for writing it. 3
2/27/2022 c16 Anonymous
Thanks for updating the profile :-)
I just reread this story again.
I'm really curious how Harry is going to handle the Banking guild that is actively threatening his friends. Reasonably since they are guaranteeing the bounty it should not go away simply because Count Doku is not around. I've seen too many books where the author stops when the bad-guy is defeated and leaves those kinds of things hanging.
Isn't it time for Harry to do some experiments with his wards?
Maybe ward another ship and see if the Jedi can have their force-visions (and reasonably avoid the compulsion) by being inside some simple ward-scheme some distance from him.
Even tho he dislike the Jedi as an institution, maybe warding the childrens rooms would be interesting to him? Maybe if they know about it and spend much time in warded areas their minds could throw off any new compulsions by themselves?
PS.
Please refresh your backups.
Thanks for updating the profile :-)
I just reread this story again.
I'm really curious how Harry is going to handle the Banking guild that is actively threatening his friends. Reasonably since they are guaranteeing the bounty it should not go away simply because Count Doku is not around. I've seen too many books where the author stops when the bad-guy is defeated and leaves those kinds of things hanging.
Isn't it time for Harry to do some experiments with his wards?
Maybe ward another ship and see if the Jedi can have their force-visions (and reasonably avoid the compulsion) by being inside some simple ward-scheme some distance from him.
Even tho he dislike the Jedi as an institution, maybe warding the childrens rooms would be interesting to him? Maybe if they know about it and spend much time in warded areas their minds could throw off any new compulsions by themselves?
PS.
Please refresh your backups.
2/26/2022 c16 MonkeyDGabry
damn thats a bad chapter to abandon this story on, a freaking plot twist, frick
damn thats a bad chapter to abandon this story on, a freaking plot twist, frick
2/26/2022 c15 MonkeyDGabry
How can Ashoka teach Ventress occlumency ? She and Aayla made a magic vow to not theach magic to others remember? She can't teach it to others. Though you abandoned this story so i dont even know why i bother commenting
How can Ashoka teach Ventress occlumency ? She and Aayla made a magic vow to not theach magic to others remember? She can't teach it to others. Though you abandoned this story so i dont even know why i bother commenting
2/23/2022 c16 Guest
RIP fic
RIP fic
2/20/2022 c15 Guest
principals - principles
principals - principles
2/20/2022 c15 Guest
putting you back together going for naught - putting you back together, being for naught
putting you back together going for naught - putting you back together, being for naught
2/20/2022 c13 Guest
the look she gave him questioning - the questioning look she gave him
the look she gave him questioning - the questioning look she gave him