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like, continue pls
like, continue pls
4/13/2020 c2 
111Uglymofo
About their vision, I always think they see colors like us, but if they had Loreal pits as snakes, they could also "see" in infrarred, superimposed to normal vision. The mask just filter thermal signatures, ignoring ambient heat.
111UglymofoAbout their vision, I always think they see colors like us, but if they had Loreal pits as snakes, they could also "see" in infrarred, superimposed to normal vision. The mask just filter thermal signatures, ignoring ambient heat.
11/13/2015 c7 2Cityhunterluv
Hammered? Looked pretty good to me! You have a style all your own, I like it! , they are starting out just like normal kids, it's really very funny, especially since Cir'idi is a yautja and this girl is just one upping him all the time! Great job!
2CityhunterluvHammered? Looked pretty good to me! You have a style all your own, I like it! , they are starting out just like normal kids, it's really very funny, especially since Cir'idi is a yautja and this girl is just one upping him all the time! Great job!
10/24/2015 c6 10Citrine Nebulae
This chapter was the BOMB. Loved that she put one over him and that he has just the tiniest bit of respect for her now. His thoughts as she fought the beast could be a strong foundation for a potential camaraderie later. This kind of relationship is really a soft spot for me. The lion and the mouse, Freak the Mighty type thing. Tiny brat and big brat forced to be friends until they like each other.
Cir'idi is 100% the brattiest brat yautja and I love him for it. Those two compliment each other beautifully. He acknowledges how similar they are even as different species. Despite whatever his age is, he's totally just as difficult and stubborn as she is. His brief thought to chase her down and bite her back had me rolling.
I wonder why she decided to feed him. Maybe she sees the possibility for mutual benefit like he does?
I JUST WANT THEM TO BE BRATS TO EACH OTHER UNTIL THEY ACKNOWLEDGE THEY'RE EACH OTHERS ONLY HOPE.
10Citrine NebulaeThis chapter was the BOMB. Loved that she put one over him and that he has just the tiniest bit of respect for her now. His thoughts as she fought the beast could be a strong foundation for a potential camaraderie later. This kind of relationship is really a soft spot for me. The lion and the mouse, Freak the Mighty type thing. Tiny brat and big brat forced to be friends until they like each other.
Cir'idi is 100% the brattiest brat yautja and I love him for it. Those two compliment each other beautifully. He acknowledges how similar they are even as different species. Despite whatever his age is, he's totally just as difficult and stubborn as she is. His brief thought to chase her down and bite her back had me rolling.
I wonder why she decided to feed him. Maybe she sees the possibility for mutual benefit like he does?
I JUST WANT THEM TO BE BRATS TO EACH OTHER UNTIL THEY ACKNOWLEDGE THEY'RE EACH OTHERS ONLY HOPE.
10/22/2015 c6 1AAEdmonds
*squeals* The way you've written this honestly has me picturing a very old Yautja relaxing in an armchair next to a fireplace while smoking a pipe (with other random details fluttering about the scene) telling the viewer his life story, it's absolutely wonderful.
1AAEdmonds*squeals* The way you've written this honestly has me picturing a very old Yautja relaxing in an armchair next to a fireplace while smoking a pipe (with other random details fluttering about the scene) telling the viewer his life story, it's absolutely wonderful.
10/19/2015 c5 10Citrine Nebulae
I'm on my phone so my review is going to be brief (and I know how frustrating hearing that is as an author, sorry!) but I want you to know that this fic is so great. I love the efforts you've taken to make your setting unique. Fire as a binary star system just gives the planet such character. I can't wait until the human and he have some face to face interaction. I'm a sucker for pantomiming and finding common ground between such differences. Please update as soon as you can, I'm so excited. :)
10Citrine NebulaeI'm on my phone so my review is going to be brief (and I know how frustrating hearing that is as an author, sorry!) but I want you to know that this fic is so great. I love the efforts you've taken to make your setting unique. Fire as a binary star system just gives the planet such character. I can't wait until the human and he have some face to face interaction. I'm a sucker for pantomiming and finding common ground between such differences. Please update as soon as you can, I'm so excited. :)
10/19/2015 c5 2Cityhunterluv
Ok...Cir'idi is definitely pissed he is in this situation. I feel very bad for the girl, all she wanted to do was help. I just can't imagine what the next chapter could be? Little demon? She seems sweet-but maybe you have a trick up ur sleeve...short chapter yes, but it finally is their introduction to eachother-and I really enjoy Cir'idi's thoughts, can't wait to see how they will change through the story! Get scratching again! Please!
2CityhunterluvOk...Cir'idi is definitely pissed he is in this situation. I feel very bad for the girl, all she wanted to do was help. I just can't imagine what the next chapter could be? Little demon? She seems sweet-but maybe you have a trick up ur sleeve...short chapter yes, but it finally is their introduction to eachother-and I really enjoy Cir'idi's thoughts, can't wait to see how they will change through the story! Get scratching again! Please!
10/18/2015 c4 1AAEdmonds
Holy shit, I've been waiting for an update to this story! I must say, you are an incredible story teller! Will we see a point of view from the female ooman, by chance?
1AAEdmondsHoly shit, I've been waiting for an update to this story! I must say, you are an incredible story teller! Will we see a point of view from the female ooman, by chance?
10/18/2015 c4 2Cityhunterluv
Please start scratching...im enjoying the yautjas thoughts, and can't wait to see how this lays out!
2CityhunterluvPlease start scratching...im enjoying the yautjas thoughts, and can't wait to see how this lays out!
5/20/2015 c1 Cityhunterluv
This is crazy,, but in a good way, please update the suspense is killing me!
This is crazy,, but in a good way, please update the suspense is killing me!
5/3/2015 c3 1AAEdmonds
I am LOVING this story! The thoughts of the Yautja you have created are captivating, and I am certainly waiting with bated breath for the next chapter. :)
1AAEdmondsI am LOVING this story! The thoughts of the Yautja you have created are captivating, and I am certainly waiting with bated breath for the next chapter. :)
5/1/2015 c3 10Citrine Nebulae
LOVED the opening line. It was a funny way of him owning up to his embarrassing predicament. I almost hope he does it later on – it’d be a nice harkener to polish off whatever struggles he will inevitably face…
Around the beginning of this chapter I noticed the repetition of a few phrases, and there are a couple punctuation errors. I’d suggest getting a beta, but it’s WHOLLY up to you. Many fics have larger errors, but with prose as good as this, I think it’d be a shame to not try and fix the small ones. It’d really bump up the quality of this fic to Supreme. I sound like I’m on a soapbox, sorry, it’s totally up to you. No offense intended.
Loved his observations of the human child. I always enjoy hearing what they think about humans they don’t consider prey. It reveals a more accessible side of them, I think? I didn’t enjoy the superpredators in the 2010 movie because of their lack of honor for this reason. The way in which you described human sight was also super interesting and aesthetically stirring, I loved it.
Can’t wait for more!
10Citrine NebulaeLOVED the opening line. It was a funny way of him owning up to his embarrassing predicament. I almost hope he does it later on – it’d be a nice harkener to polish off whatever struggles he will inevitably face…
Around the beginning of this chapter I noticed the repetition of a few phrases, and there are a couple punctuation errors. I’d suggest getting a beta, but it’s WHOLLY up to you. Many fics have larger errors, but with prose as good as this, I think it’d be a shame to not try and fix the small ones. It’d really bump up the quality of this fic to Supreme. I sound like I’m on a soapbox, sorry, it’s totally up to you. No offense intended.
Loved his observations of the human child. I always enjoy hearing what they think about humans they don’t consider prey. It reveals a more accessible side of them, I think? I didn’t enjoy the superpredators in the 2010 movie because of their lack of honor for this reason. The way in which you described human sight was also super interesting and aesthetically stirring, I loved it.
Can’t wait for more!
5/1/2015 c2 Citrine Nebulae
Oooops, I totally forgot that you named the yautja in the summary. My bad.
ANYWAYS, loved this chapter. Cir'idi's voice has maintained itself very well, and I'm still SUPER impressed. I never doubt for a minute that I'm reading the thoughts of something not-human. The description of the volcanic cave and the human inhabitant was interesting and detailed. The latter has kind of a sense of foreboding to it, for the same reason as Cir'idi stated: someone crazy has got to be living here. I wonder what if this human is still around, and what they're like...hmm. Onwards to the next. ;)
Oooops, I totally forgot that you named the yautja in the summary. My bad.
ANYWAYS, loved this chapter. Cir'idi's voice has maintained itself very well, and I'm still SUPER impressed. I never doubt for a minute that I'm reading the thoughts of something not-human. The description of the volcanic cave and the human inhabitant was interesting and detailed. The latter has kind of a sense of foreboding to it, for the same reason as Cir'idi stated: someone crazy has got to be living here. I wonder what if this human is still around, and what they're like...hmm. Onwards to the next. ;)
5/1/2015 c1 Citrine Nebulae
A solid start! I love the voice you've established for your narrator - I may have missed (his?) name, though. I myself find the perspective of an yautja extraordinarily difficult to write, but you've done it with very good taste. I also find this chapter and the premise of the story impressive, because nature itself as an antagonist is not an easy thing to portray. I can't wait to see what threats our narrator faces as the story continues, and I will be reading on. :)
A solid start! I love the voice you've established for your narrator - I may have missed (his?) name, though. I myself find the perspective of an yautja extraordinarily difficult to write, but you've done it with very good taste. I also find this chapter and the premise of the story impressive, because nature itself as an antagonist is not an easy thing to portray. I can't wait to see what threats our narrator faces as the story continues, and I will be reading on. :)