for Melanira of Doriath4/18/2015 c3 
26XxIrisxX
Once again, you have brilliantly set the stage. The characters are excellent. The descriptions simply blow my mind and eacjlh chapter of the story just leaves me hanging and craving for more!
If I may, I would like to point out that some of the punctiona marks are a little off- nothing major really. I guess I am picking at stuff. ; Also, I would suggest you to have the elvish phrases translated somewhere in the notes or something.
I know that it's highly unlikely that someone might not understand them. But I still keep the possibility open for those who are new to Tolkien's world. :)
Other than that, wow!
26XxIrisxXOnce again, you have brilliantly set the stage. The characters are excellent. The descriptions simply blow my mind and eacjlh chapter of the story just leaves me hanging and craving for more!
If I may, I would like to point out that some of the punctiona marks are a little off- nothing major really. I guess I am picking at stuff. ; Also, I would suggest you to have the elvish phrases translated somewhere in the notes or something.
I know that it's highly unlikely that someone might not understand them. But I still keep the possibility open for those who are new to Tolkien's world. :)
Other than that, wow!
4/4/2015 c1 XxIrisxX
I don't need to tell you what a brilliant piece it is. You have a strong character background and a good plot. Go for it! :D
I don't need to tell you what a brilliant piece it is. You have a strong character background and a good plot. Go for it! :D