for A Nugget Of Advice
12/9 c6 Spanner96
Naruto is way too weak after a month of competent training. Your decision to make him earth natured was already an annoying forced change, but then you have him barely advance in it and what little skill he develops becomes a crutch because he is otherwise useless.
His personality is also grating. You’ve made him an edgy coward who can’t decide if he is smart or immature. Naruto was annoying in canon too but at least he only had ONE personality… you have given him two and both of them are annoying.
Naruto is way too weak after a month of competent training. Your decision to make him earth natured was already an annoying forced change, but then you have him barely advance in it and what little skill he develops becomes a crutch because he is otherwise useless.
His personality is also grating. You’ve made him an edgy coward who can’t decide if he is smart or immature. Naruto was annoying in canon too but at least he only had ONE personality… you have given him two and both of them are annoying.
1/25 c33 Pat9921
interesting joining chapter. looking forward to next chapter but dude com on and be better or not it is free after all. i can only criticide here.
and sorry for cussing you out i get irritated when bad decisions are made in good fics that i like.
interesting joining chapter. looking forward to next chapter but dude com on and be better or not it is free after all. i can only criticide here.
and sorry for cussing you out i get irritated when bad decisions are made in good fics that i like.
1/25 c32 Pat9921
not really half and half but quarter uzumaki and maybe three quarters senju.
again not a snake sage
also that exposition sucks dude why are they talking like they are meeting for the first time. sheesh! they already know each other and know other things about the fucking clan so why would they talk like that. dude seriously.
not really half and half but quarter uzumaki and maybe three quarters senju.
again not a snake sage
also that exposition sucks dude why are they talking like they are meeting for the first time. sheesh! they already know each other and know other things about the fucking clan so why would they talk like that. dude seriously.
1/25 c29 Pat9921
first of all orochimaro is not really a sage as he couldn't conplete the training and he only uses nature chakra like jugo does as he got the idea from experimenting on jugo,not really his own thing. he perverted the nature chakra by his influence bit because it was his to begin with.
sorry it is also bullshit that anyone can use shadow clone when we know it was exclusively used by konoha nin that are atleast jonin level except for naruto.
why make the uzumali so op goddamn it just takes all the tension out of the scene come on man it is just so boring. the water dragon eith no fucking seals seriously zabuza did 44 seals for that. the nidaime did like 2 or 3 but this fucker can just do without any seals
might as well make him god you dipshit.
first of all orochimaro is not really a sage as he couldn't conplete the training and he only uses nature chakra like jugo does as he got the idea from experimenting on jugo,not really his own thing. he perverted the nature chakra by his influence bit because it was his to begin with.
sorry it is also bullshit that anyone can use shadow clone when we know it was exclusively used by konoha nin that are atleast jonin level except for naruto.
why make the uzumali so op goddamn it just takes all the tension out of the scene come on man it is just so boring. the water dragon eith no fucking seals seriously zabuza did 44 seals for that. the nidaime did like 2 or 3 but this fucker can just do without any seals
might as well make him god you dipshit.
1/24 c27 Pat9921
ok so he is a pseudojinchuriki my bad should have read the whole chapter first. so not every redhead is a uzumaki man. dont make them all uzumaki and also dont make op characters that can do just anything you wnat them to,sheesh! karin was an anomaly not every uzumaki has healing chakra,chains and eye of the kagura whatever.
give them some variety dude. that shiro dude is also literally the same overpowered piece of crap that isn't doing much here and likely a power fanstasy.
ok so he is a pseudojinchuriki my bad should have read the whole chapter first. so not every redhead is a uzumaki man. dont make them all uzumaki and also dont make op characters that can do just anything you wnat them to,sheesh! karin was an anomaly not every uzumaki has healing chakra,chains and eye of the kagura whatever.
give them some variety dude. that shiro dude is also literally the same overpowered piece of crap that isn't doing much here and likely a power fanstasy.
1/24 c27 Pat9921
yeah that is not how that works,the three tails was selaed in the yondaime mizukage not him and after he died the three tails was resurrected 3 years after part 1. so what is up wih that huh?
yeah that is not how that works,the three tails was selaed in the yondaime mizukage not him and after he died the three tails was resurrected 3 years after part 1. so what is up wih that huh?
1/24 c12 Pat9921
i feel like naruto should have it in his head by now to do everything slow and thoughtfully so he could actually understand and not just rely on trial and error and he has not. why? i can only imagine you just don't care for it as you want to follow canon. we have seen naruto slowing down whenever he practices even after being let go of ebisu ehen we see him practicing compression and expansion of the dirt. that is so fucking idiotic of you just forget this development of naruto and just do it the canon way. you dipshit
for chapter 13
i feel like naruto should have it in his head by now to do everything slow and thoughtfully so he could actually understand and not just rely on trial and error and he has not. why? i can only imagine you just don't care for it as you want to follow canon. we have seen naruto slowing down whenever he practices even after being let go of ebisu ehen we see him practicing compression and expansion of the dirt. that is so fucking idiotic of you just forget this development of naruto and just do it the canon way. you dipshit
for chapter 13
1/24 c13 Pat9921
also why isn't he using the shadow clines for practicing the ballon exploding that is stupid of you to just say that naruto forgot. he literally jses it for every earth release then ehy would he forget that,ya dipshit. why are you trying to follow canon actions when it should have never been there. you dipshit
also why isn't he using the shadow clines for practicing the ballon exploding that is stupid of you to just say that naruto forgot. he literally jses it for every earth release then ehy would he forget that,ya dipshit. why are you trying to follow canon actions when it should have never been there. you dipshit
1/24 c13 Pat9921
i thought naruto would be more thinking about doing this and had a higher amount of chakra control by being taught by ebisu so why are you just following canon man it should change how the rasengan training works with the changes you made. also why the chasm trick again ehen we know that he can get kyubis chakra now with ease as they made a fuxkin deal ya dipshit.
i thought naruto would be more thinking about doing this and had a higher amount of chakra control by being taught by ebisu so why are you just following canon man it should change how the rasengan training works with the changes you made. also why the chasm trick again ehen we know that he can get kyubis chakra now with ease as they made a fuxkin deal ya dipshit.
12/26/2024 c2 Guest
him having earth release is stupid because it lessen the chance for the rasenshariken
him having earth release is stupid because it lessen the chance for the rasenshariken
11/30/2024 c7 Axccel
Since the chakra of the Shadow Clones returns to the user, it arguably is an extremely efficient technique.
Since the chakra of the Shadow Clones returns to the user, it arguably is an extremely efficient technique.
11/25/2024 c2 FlawedBauthor
Wow, nice to see Naruto is going to win through learning Chakra Control! Wow!
Wow, nice to see Naruto is going to win through learning Chakra Control! Wow!