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4/14/2017 c1 Lawrence Lay
Can you write a Space 1999 Dr Who crossover?
7/17/2015 c16 Michael
It is a great story! Is there a sequel to it? Will Athena and Brian be reunited?
7/11/2015 c15 Michael
This is a great story!
7/10/2015 c15 Michael
That is a great story!
6/26/2015 c14 Michael
I love this story!
6/17/2015 c13 Michael
This is really good! What happened to Earth? Where are the people of Earth?
6/17/2015 c13 Michael
This is great so far! What happened to Earth? Like where is everyone?
6/17/2015 c13 paladin3030
13 chapters with a little over 6k worth of words, if you combined them you would have four chapters worth of words.

Don't take this wrong but to make it simple your chapters are too short.

People want meat on there bones yours don't have any.

We want more characterization more details.

We want to visualize the scene in our minds

If you want example's of stories with characterization's & details look at the stories of UH-60 NIGHTSTALKER or Leaf Ranger & wilkins75 you'll see what I mean.

I hope you do so & that they can help you out

Maybe when this fic is over you could go back & do a rewite with some expanded chapters?
6/10/2015 c12 Michael
This is a great story! Is there more?
6/3/2015 c11 Michael
This is a great story!
5/28/2015 c10 Michael
I love this story! Its great!
5/28/2015 c10 Michael
This is a great story! I really love it
5/24/2015 c8 Michael
This is really amzing stroy! Is there a happy ending to it?
4/13/2015 c1 paladin3030
I'm sorry.

Please ignore my last review you have it in the right section afterall _; .
4/13/2015 c2 paladin3030
I think you have this story in the wrong X-over section this is the Star Wars X-Over section.

I think you want to put this story in the Battlestar Galactica X-Over section.

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