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8/19 c1 1aaapplexxx237
This is great !
6/22 c1 6Searece
Awww, I like this. It was so great to read.
6/15/2018 c1 Who
Awww... :3 How cute! I like it 3 I wish it could be cannon XD
11/28/2015 c1 19Juniper Night
First of all, I want to compliment you on your summary; it was hilarious and well-written. I know it seems odd to mention the summary in a review, but not everyone puts time into their summaries, and you did, so I'm mentioning it :)

As for the rest of the story... the idea is great. I love the idea of Zuko and Raven bonding over their shared evil-father dilemma, as well as the idea of Raven giving Zuko hope. What I feel could have been stronger was the "crossing over" part (You said this was your first crossover fic, right? Congrats!) That is to say, the premise for Raven traveling to Zuko's world seems a bit weak, a bit convenient. After all, it's her daily job to help people. There's lots of people she could help in Jump City, without traveling to an alternate dimension or planet where, for all she knows, there might not even be oxygen to breathe. Therefore her using this vague, commercial-sounding albeit funny spell book to jump into a possible alternate universe blind feels a little ooc, as does her pressing Zuko for information when she herself is such a reserved, private person. An alternate way of achieving your goal might have been through a miscast spell, a villain's dimension hopper, Larry, or dream wandering - all of which offer Raven less control of the story, and therefore make it feel a little more believable.

All of these are the suggestions and opinions of one. measly, unpublished author; please don't take my critiques too hard, especially when I still enjoyed your story and so, obviously, did the 8 people who've already favorited, followed, and reviewed your story.

Happy Writing,
~Juniper
11/20/2015 c1 13BB
(too lazy to log in -13BlueBananas)

So, Zuko and Raven fluff? Adorable :3 That ending was adorable. The entire thing was adorable. And Raven's spell book's name is hilarious! I'm pretty sure 'Beastboy' is Beast Boy though. Didn't see anything other than :D
9/28/2015 c1 8Nalash Polal Falayt
Wow! Never thought of this! Pretty amazing really. Never thought of their similarities! :D
4/26/2015 c1 9Amme Mahtal
This was so good, I loved how you expolored Zuko and Raven's inner dilemma and also how Raven strived to help Zuko because usually she doesn't show much emotion. It was very well written and the feels were there. Keep up the good work!
4/20/2015 c1 11TeraWatt
As much as I love stories that cross over to other stories, sometimes they get too ambitious with a huge convoluted plot that gets 30 chapters in before the author loses interest or the plot has spiraled beyond any hope of continuation. Alternatively, some authors have a story that is simply too short to make any measure of sense.

Your story, on the other hand, is concise and coherent. It explains why and how the character has found themselves in someone else's story and the characters stay true to their persona.

I enjoyed your comparison of Raven and Zuko's parental dilemmas and that the story was surprisingly not a case of "super-powered character solves all problems" or "cool character joins posse". (Not to diminish either trope as I greatly enjoy these as well)

Well done! Keep writing!
TeraWatt
4/18/2015 c1 dejajade919
Its good please continue raven should help fight ozai

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