for RealitySHIFT11/22/2015 c17 AzerealofFlight
When are you going to complete the story! It says it's been updated on August 9, and nothing for 2 months! I'm dying of suspense!
When are you going to complete the story! It says it's been updated on August 9, and nothing for 2 months! I'm dying of suspense!
8/30/2015 c17 WatsonManSAIYAN
Like I said in the last chapter, sorry for the late comment, mate! I was busy so I hadn't had the time to reply! I don't know what will happen to Talwyn, but I do know that it's going to be quite entertaining! Let me know when you want me to start beta reading!
Like I said in the last chapter, sorry for the late comment, mate! I was busy so I hadn't had the time to reply! I don't know what will happen to Talwyn, but I do know that it's going to be quite entertaining! Let me know when you want me to start beta reading!
8/20/2015 c17 Omegawatcher
Don't worry, I know you are busy with your life, and do not rush. I will look forward to seeing you at this October's comic convention, your Scythe comic sounds really interesting when you described it to me. But you will have to tell me what booth number your group is.
As for the question: I can't really form a hypothetical answer...But just putting it in basis of what normal villains do, she might die.
-Omega
Don't worry, I know you are busy with your life, and do not rush. I will look forward to seeing you at this October's comic convention, your Scythe comic sounds really interesting when you described it to me. But you will have to tell me what booth number your group is.
As for the question: I can't really form a hypothetical answer...But just putting it in basis of what normal villains do, she might die.
-Omega
8/9/2015 c17 Destiny
I completely undrestand, you have a ton of stuff to do. Take all the time you need. : )
I completely undrestand, you have a ton of stuff to do. Take all the time you need. : )
7/25/2015 c16 
10xXxCrescent MoonxXx
That was a great chapter and it somehow felt necessary even though as you said works more as a filler! I loved the flashback and you still manage to amaze me with how perfectly you present Ratchet! The descriptions were so vivid it actually felt as if I was watching a movie! I wonder what happened to Talwyn!
I definitely want to read more, keep it up!
Oh and I wanted to say I'm very sorry to hear about Watson's loss. I hope things get better for him soon.
10xXxCrescent MoonxXxThat was a great chapter and it somehow felt necessary even though as you said works more as a filler! I loved the flashback and you still manage to amaze me with how perfectly you present Ratchet! The descriptions were so vivid it actually felt as if I was watching a movie! I wonder what happened to Talwyn!
I definitely want to read more, keep it up!
Oh and I wanted to say I'm very sorry to hear about Watson's loss. I hope things get better for him soon.
7/22/2015 c16 2B-Frame
I don't really have lot of words for this because they all mean the same thing; this is bloody brilliant and I'm so glad I found you and your works. DAMN AWESOME HAHAHA. Anyway, the suspension is just, just wrenching my heart now because I wanna know what happened D: Be looking forward for the next chapter and don't rush yourself XD
2B-FrameI don't really have lot of words for this because they all mean the same thing; this is bloody brilliant and I'm so glad I found you and your works. DAMN AWESOME HAHAHA. Anyway, the suspension is just, just wrenching my heart now because I wanna know what happened D: Be looking forward for the next chapter and don't rush yourself XD
7/20/2015 c16 Destiny
I loved this chapter and can't wait for the next one. What happened to Talwyn?
I loved this chapter and can't wait for the next one. What happened to Talwyn?
7/20/2015 c16 tagh
Oye! Veo que usted ha puesto otro capítulo! Que chill, no? Lo malo especially que tuve que traducir todas las palabras que escribistes usando el Google Transletion, pero valió la pena, whey! But I will speak to you in espanish. So that I can better my language, no?
Oye! Veo que usted ha puesto otro capítulo! Que chill, no? Lo malo especially que tuve que traducir todas las palabras que escribistes usando el Google Transletion, pero valió la pena, whey! But I will speak to you in espanish. So that I can better my language, no?
7/20/2015 c16 WatsonManSAIYAN
You actually did it! You actually went ahead to pull a MADOKA, mate! Unbelievable! You had me laughing there, and I caught that speck of Assasin's Creed in there! Yes I do feel like I need to make this up to you, Fluff, because I have NOT been a exemplary beta to you. You may forgive me, but I will see what I can do to make this up, mate. Plus that bit with Talwyn and Ratchet, it was PHENOMENAL. It sounds true to the wording. You really have followed my suggestions. I'm looking forward to the next rough draft, it will give me something to do for the time being. Best of luck, mate!
You actually did it! You actually went ahead to pull a MADOKA, mate! Unbelievable! You had me laughing there, and I caught that speck of Assasin's Creed in there! Yes I do feel like I need to make this up to you, Fluff, because I have NOT been a exemplary beta to you. You may forgive me, but I will see what I can do to make this up, mate. Plus that bit with Talwyn and Ratchet, it was PHENOMENAL. It sounds true to the wording. You really have followed my suggestions. I'm looking forward to the next rough draft, it will give me something to do for the time being. Best of luck, mate!
7/20/2015 c16 Guest
You have finally released the next chapter. I personally enjoyed reading this.
You have finally released the next chapter. I personally enjoyed reading this.
7/20/2015 c16 Omegawatcher
I loved how you've gone to make a recap of the previous chapter. It would have been tedious to go back and read over that part, since it is around 8k words. This chapter was also great, I loved how normal this scene played out. You have done a good job in bringing out the normalcy in this situation, plus I see you have hinted something assassin's creed related...if you haven't noticed it, then I'm sure you will see it if you re-read your chapter. Once again, it's an amazing job well done by both you and Watson, and I look forward to reading the next chapter, as well as the next chapter in "A Light in the Dark". Both seem promising.
-Omega
I loved how you've gone to make a recap of the previous chapter. It would have been tedious to go back and read over that part, since it is around 8k words. This chapter was also great, I loved how normal this scene played out. You have done a good job in bringing out the normalcy in this situation, plus I see you have hinted something assassin's creed related...if you haven't noticed it, then I'm sure you will see it if you re-read your chapter. Once again, it's an amazing job well done by both you and Watson, and I look forward to reading the next chapter, as well as the next chapter in "A Light in the Dark". Both seem promising.
-Omega
7/19/2015 c16 TheQueenOfDiamondsKimy
Lol, you updated! Just in time too, I was about to go to sleep when I get the message. Once again, this was AWESOME! I loved how you left me hanging (don't do that, uuuugh!) And now I want to know what's going to happen next! I even loved the interactions Ratchet and Clank had! w This is a awesome chapter, despite the late late upload! Keep them coming!
Lol, you updated! Just in time too, I was about to go to sleep when I get the message. Once again, this was AWESOME! I loved how you left me hanging (don't do that, uuuugh!) And now I want to know what's going to happen next! I even loved the interactions Ratchet and Clank had! w This is a awesome chapter, despite the late late upload! Keep them coming!
7/9/2015 c15 tagh
Hola! Y si, si hablo español jajaja. Pero yo no sabía que usted pudía hablar el idioma también :) :P. Me da alegria a encontrar otra persona quen es hispana, y me encantó leer este capítulo de tu cuento del juego Ratchet y Clank, aunque fue escrito en Inglés (no mancheeeees). Usando Google Translate mas o menos me ayudo con eso.
Hola! Y si, si hablo español jajaja. Pero yo no sabía que usted pudía hablar el idioma también :) :P. Me da alegria a encontrar otra persona quen es hispana, y me encantó leer este capítulo de tu cuento del juego Ratchet y Clank, aunque fue escrito en Inglés (no mancheeeees). Usando Google Translate mas o menos me ayudo con eso.
7/3/2015 c15 Omegawatcher
This overall has been such a good read. I applaud you for making this scene as quick paced as the space scene before. It almost has a hint of Star wars-style dogfights that I enjoy. The ending left me in a stupor; the protagonist now hearing Clank speak, yet he never spoke at all. A refreshing new twist that has surely made me stick until the end. I hope you submit another entry into this story, as I am curious as to how Ratchet will explain this dilemma (or will attempt to cover, as is his nature in order to not let anyone else worry for him.) I do agree though, the ending was flat, but straight to the point in what was to be conveyed.
You did ask some question sin previous chapters, I believe 2.
-I feel as if though you took the personas and then twisted them up a little, giving them another added trait that surely fits their psychosis (in good or bad ways.) It's enjoyable to such creativity in an author, which helps to make an impact as a whole.
-All authors would ask themselves this question time and time again. So far, I've been able to place a picture to words and not get confused. The pacing seems legit, and very thorough. So in a nutshell, it's been well done, especially for a second part to your first one, "Obsidian Mind", where although the story seems to be written in short sentences, it did convey its message and deliver.
I hope my feedback helps, and once again, I will wait for another update. Omega.
This overall has been such a good read. I applaud you for making this scene as quick paced as the space scene before. It almost has a hint of Star wars-style dogfights that I enjoy. The ending left me in a stupor; the protagonist now hearing Clank speak, yet he never spoke at all. A refreshing new twist that has surely made me stick until the end. I hope you submit another entry into this story, as I am curious as to how Ratchet will explain this dilemma (or will attempt to cover, as is his nature in order to not let anyone else worry for him.) I do agree though, the ending was flat, but straight to the point in what was to be conveyed.
You did ask some question sin previous chapters, I believe 2.
-I feel as if though you took the personas and then twisted them up a little, giving them another added trait that surely fits their psychosis (in good or bad ways.) It's enjoyable to such creativity in an author, which helps to make an impact as a whole.
-All authors would ask themselves this question time and time again. So far, I've been able to place a picture to words and not get confused. The pacing seems legit, and very thorough. So in a nutshell, it's been well done, especially for a second part to your first one, "Obsidian Mind", where although the story seems to be written in short sentences, it did convey its message and deliver.
I hope my feedback helps, and once again, I will wait for another update. Omega.
7/3/2015 c10 Omegawatcher
After a few more chapters, it seems to be quite a read. The descriptions that start off the chapter draw you into his mind as Ratchet is fighting those sentries left off from the last chapter, "No backup plans". I like the way you seem to capture those little moments where Ratchet's Lombax curiosity intrudes, a fine example being the part where he is just "stupified" and marveling at all of the technological weapons and parts that he himself, being from Veldin and low on currency, is unable to have (though I am sure being a hero should have its perks.) During the ending, where Sasha and the duo find out more on Talos's father, it really sounded believable; how traumatic it really was for the antagonist at such a young age to have to witness his father being taken into custody. It almost seems as if though a lot of researching went into the thinking process in order to flesh out the idea, including the outcome.
The title though, reminds me of another story I read from an author named "C-puff". But other than that, I'll finish this and move on. Omega
After a few more chapters, it seems to be quite a read. The descriptions that start off the chapter draw you into his mind as Ratchet is fighting those sentries left off from the last chapter, "No backup plans". I like the way you seem to capture those little moments where Ratchet's Lombax curiosity intrudes, a fine example being the part where he is just "stupified" and marveling at all of the technological weapons and parts that he himself, being from Veldin and low on currency, is unable to have (though I am sure being a hero should have its perks.) During the ending, where Sasha and the duo find out more on Talos's father, it really sounded believable; how traumatic it really was for the antagonist at such a young age to have to witness his father being taken into custody. It almost seems as if though a lot of researching went into the thinking process in order to flesh out the idea, including the outcome.
The title though, reminds me of another story I read from an author named "C-puff". But other than that, I'll finish this and move on. Omega