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5/22/2016 c1 AZalmega
You got me extremely hooked. I like the intro. However, you might want to make your story a bit longer.
5/16/2016 c8 Hdzulfikar
not even 10 chapter and you spill the bean...why tell ozpin everything? it's better if you go with archer half-truth y'know
5/5/2016 c29 Coal
Amazing story, I take comfort in the fact that you plan on finishing it
5/1/2016 c7 2Zeru'Xil
Poor rapier
5/1/2016 c1 Zeru'Xil
Interesting intro this should be a good read lol
4/25/2016 c14 1Gojin1990
sorry to say this. it is a great story and i like the way its going. the only thing i find wrong is the WAY you got shiro into remnant. everybody knows shiro would NEVER do anything that would hurt somone. such as letting his soul take over somone elses body. unless you can rewrite that part somehow. make a plausible way for shiro to get to remnant without taking jaunes body or something it just isn't gonna "feel" right to me. otherwise the story is really good and interesting.
4/20/2016 c5 john985
Durandal is Blessed with three miracles "The Blade shall never Dull the Sword shall never Break and It shall only be wielded by those of Roland's blood."
4/10/2016 c9 Deweirdstofff
Do I see a cargo ship of shirouXmyrtenaster? I wonder if she rains full sentience and actually chats with enough of odd ramblings dasvendania!
4/11/2016 c28 Shadow of a Memory
Ignore the first part of my previous post. I didn't read far enough along.
4/11/2016 c24 Shadow of a Memory
I'm somewhat bothered by a couple inconsistencies. When Adam showed up earlier in Stray, he was shown to have Command Seals, yet seven others have been shown to be the masters and Servants of the war. Also, Tabitha and Lancer were told of the tainted grail in Strategy Meeting, yet in Apotheosis it appears that conversation didn't happen. I'm assuming somewhere down the line your story diverged from what you had originally planned but you forgot to account for that as you continue writing.
4/9/2016 c29 the unsung antihero
*appears in a clockwise spiral of black mist and blue flames*
It appears that this war truly has cursed a Paradise...
Damm where the heck did that come from, anyway I think you made a typo during shirou/Juane's inner monologue about Ozpin fighting herakles earlier in the chapter by reffering to herakles as berserker rather than Saber, because just a few sentences after it said lancer would deal with berserker... But I may have also misread it, but it might be a good idea to check it out anyway... As for the story itself I binge read it (as I often do) in about two day's (I have way to much spare time on my hands) and I'd give it a 4.3 out of 5
*disappears in a counterclockwise spiral of white smoke and red liquid (could be blood)*
4/7/2016 c6 RustMechanic
A well written story so far when it comes to a cross-over, a mild frustration with the fact that your pulling shit from F/S universe out of thin air, which will hopefully be explained later and not something done in the spur of "inspiration" as an excuse to bring plot devices from the F/S universe.

On the other hand, your exposition so far shows a much needed change from the usual cross-overs who F#CKING SHOVE ALL OF THEIR PLOT DEVICES FROM THEIR HOME UNIVERSE INTO ONE CHAPTER, AND BEAT OFF ON HOW A SPECIAL FLAKE(s) THEIR OC(s), OR WHATEVER, ARE COMPARED TO THE RESIDENTS OF THE UNIVERSE THEY ARE CROSSING INTO which I can say, without a doubt, proof that you actually planned your shit out and not glued crap together in hopes that it will stick, which is good to see.

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4/3/2016 c5 xxOblivionxxx
Even if they use steel of far better quality than type moon verse that isnt anythinf against noble fanthasm, they are legends given form, not weapons per si, weapon without legends are totaly wortless against then...
3/29/2016 c29 2shelwyn
Nice story but I kinda wanted him to bone Ruby. Harem route baby.
3/29/2016 c24 shelwyn
Harem beginnings woo
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