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11/5/2018 c8 2Golden Light 001
Well it's usually remarked as being new and raw so at the very least it should be an entirely diffrent shade compated to the rest of him.
11/5/2018 c7 The Final Faux
10/31/2018 c14 Roman Borowski
10/29/2018 c22 Ryoji Mochizuki
10/29/2018 c21 Ryoji Mochizuki
hmmm... Shouldn't rule breaker have broken the contract between cinder and herakles though?
9/11/2018 c16 Guest
I like this chapter. All the suggestions given for the "big bad" of the story make good sense in context and are something those characters could certainly do. Nero is the obvious one, but given the context, Tatari and Altrouge certainly also make sense.
9/9/2018 c3 Guest
RACE: sword

9/2/2018 c24 2Nihatclodra
You... are not very good at story consistency... the first time Shirou explained about Angra Mainyu he said that it wasn't and actual god and was weak, thus ending up dying quickly and tainting he grail as a result (aka: canon)... but now he's saying that Angra Mainyu Is a god and actually won the 3rd holy grail war? wtf?

then you had Adam Taurus introduce himself as a master, but he's nowhere to be seen when all the masters met up.

hell, you even repeatedly referred to Shirou and Blake as "Partners" throughout this fic... but they aren't partners in this story, Shirou picked Ren; remember?
9/2/2018 c23 Nihatclodra
Why the hell did the church executioners attack Shirou?
9/2/2018 c21 Nihatclodra
Okay, I'm actually a little impressed with how you're handling this holy grail war... hopefully it stays that way... and Shirou stops being an absolute imbecile. There was no logical reason to NOT summon a servant as soon as he could, and every reason to do so!
9/1/2018 c14 Nihatclodra
Aaaaand fate crossover fallacy #1 has begunI can't think of any way to make interesting opponents for my overpowered Fate Characters, let's inexplicably throw a holy grail war into a world that couldn't possibly have a holy grail war!"

I have seen MANY authors go that route, and I can't think of a single one that did it well...
9/1/2018 c12 Nihatclodra
I swear, it's like you're purposely writing Shirou as being utterly incompetent at keeping secrets...
9/1/2018 c10 Nihatclodra
Gods fucking dammit, why must Shirou be so fucking stupid as to repeatedly reference his 1st life as though it was his current one!? WHY!?
9/1/2018 c9 Nihatclodra
Jaune telling Blake that he is an orphan is utterly retarded. It serves absolutely no purpose except to make people eventually believe he is lying, which in turn makes it easier for the Arcs to learn he isn't Jaune. hell, when he introduced himself as "Jaune Arc Smita", it was just as fucking stupid...
9/1/2018 c3 Nihatclodra
With Shirou believing Aura and Prana to be different energies; his refusing to have his Aura unlocked makes zero sense, and it rather OOC for Shirou even by how you have set up his character in this story...
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