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8/5/2015 c3 113th Shade
I always like the idea of having my favourite character secretly being one of the countries. But out if all the countries why Brazil? Why not an English speaking country? And how does it work out with Wally (I mean Brazil) having an uncle? I'm curious as to how you will explain that.
7/29/2015 c3 1LovelyKnight
Ughh I want to know what happens eAe
7/1/2015 c3 4queenyuri
Wow I like it i hope there is a update soon please this so good and I like how you intruduse Wally at the and
6/26/2015 c3 Hi D
I can't stop thinking about Artemis's reaction, she's practically dating some 40x her age
6/14/2015 c3 Guest
I liked the course that takes the story . The mystery becomes larger, Wally now going to have a lot of explaining , I can not wait to see the reactions of all
6/13/2015 c3 Guest
I really liked the course is taking the history , the fact that Wally and Brazil have decided to rely on his friends. Poor Arthur knows all about the same.
6/15/2015 c3 13creativesm75
i can imagine the reactions now... wide open eyes and wide open mouths, lots of incredulous shouting or staring and
6/11/2015 c3 1Nordicsmagic
Amazing, I can't wait for more. This is so interesting. (*)o*o(*)
6/4/2015 c2 Kxxx
Can't wait for mooore~~
5/17/2015 c2 4IvySeeker
Great work! Conversations are a little confusing to follow though, so maybe those could be more specific? Other than that, I love the flow of the story.
5/13/2015 c1 19Hinata28h
Please continue! You have so much potential and I'm sure you'll be fine!

For your first chapter, I think you did fairly well with a few errors. Just remember that even though you as a writer can see the events happening, you need to be word-friendly to your readers. Writing clear descriptions of the events you imagine can help your audience understand what you want to portray. You don't specifically need lengthy paragraphs of details, but you need enough details to pass a scene to your audience.

Despite that, you're doing fine! Kudos!
5/5/2015 c1 Ellothere
Great plot, bit confusing, and Wally is a country!
4/29/2015 c1 Guest
This is really good, your writing is amazing :) I can't wait to see more :)
4/28/2015 c1 14The Resurrection Lily
Uhh the Prime Minister of America? Pretty sure we don't have one of those. Do you mean the President or are you talking about the Prime Minister of a different country?
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