for Impendeo8/8/2015 c1 kathrynpalmer
Luv this - some parts funny, morbidly funny, gory, creepy and descriptive. Some great descriptive phrases used "trying to detach my parasitic self". Luv the imagery - I can just SEE it- "the blood and slab of flesh slide...of Titan mess". Some use of the word "defiantly" when u mean "definitely". Some other bits that a good editor could fix. I like the way u write and really want o follow this story. Keep up the good work.
Luv this - some parts funny, morbidly funny, gory, creepy and descriptive. Some great descriptive phrases used "trying to detach my parasitic self". Luv the imagery - I can just SEE it- "the blood and slab of flesh slide...of Titan mess". Some use of the word "defiantly" when u mean "definitely". Some other bits that a good editor could fix. I like the way u write and really want o follow this story. Keep up the good work.